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By *iaFlashCouple
over a year ago
walsall |
The part of your profile where you have written about yourselves I would change.
Use paragraphs when you talk about different things, put your likes in one paragraph and dislikes in another and so on, also just read through what you write to correct any spelling mistakes.
By doing these things it will make it easier to read and also highlight parts what you want people to notice.
Hope this helps
Nia and Flash xxxx
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"Maybe the fact you are both smokers puts some people off.
Sally"
There's also plenty of Fabbers that either don't care or actually prefer people who do. The only faults (for me) are lack of punctuation and pics, neither of which are deal breakers. |
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By *irty130Couple
over a year ago
Bristol Area |
I would word the whole thing as "we" and "us". When referring to the individuals say "he is" and "she is" (or use "k" and "m"). It's not a good start when you say "me and ..." as it can ring alarm bells that the other person isn't so involved.
I agree with the others, space it out a bit. Use sentences and paragraphs to get your ideas across. |
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