Some full stops might help a bit, I have a nasty habit of not breathing until I reach one and I nearly collapsed reading that!  Use paragraphs and tidy it up a bit.
I would say avoid a cock pic as a main picture, use your face one and a couple of nice bum and/or torso pics.
As far as the words go only you can find what works for you, but review it regularly and read it back to yourself. Does it answer questions or pose even more?
All the best. |
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over a year ago
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To stand out I would stay away from the bum and torso pics as many men have them. Its up to you how you wish to be portrayed and just use you own imagination. My fave male avatar at the moment is View's smile and teeth avatar  |
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By *icboyMan
over a year ago
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"To stand out I would stay away from the bum and torso pics as many men have them. Its up to you how you wish to be portrayed and just use you own imagination. My fave male avatar at the moment is View's smile and teeth avatar "
Need to get you to take my photo. |
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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago
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"Break it into paragraphs and make it a little easier to read.
The content is ok "
Oh agree...I stopped reading as it was making my eyes go funny. I also have a very short attention span so...ooooh, shiny things!  |
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By (user no longer on site)
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"Break it into paragraphs and make it a little easier to read.
The content is ok
Oh agree...I stopped reading as it was making my eyes go funny. I also have a very short attention span so...ooooh, shiny things! "
agreed i looked and just saw a mass put me straight off even though i liked the pics |
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"Break it into paragraphs and make it a little easier to read.
The content is ok
Oh agree...I stopped reading as it was making my eyes go funny. I also have a very short attention span so...ooooh, shiny things!
agreed i looked and just saw a mass put me straight off even though i liked the pics"
Didn't get as far as pics as I said short...oooooh... |
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"Can any one help what else can I do to my profile to make me stand out im down to earth and looking for friends and fun along the way any hints or tips on how to put my self in the window "
As everyone has said break up the wording on your profile a bit to make it easier for people to read .
Add a few intresting teasing photos
Also your age range would you really shag a 99yr old woman? i think not so sort it out |
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"Profile update good or bad "
Still needs work I'm afraid. Full stops followed by inital capitals and use of paragraphs when starting a new subject. Also some spell checking needed. Not keen on main body pic either. Look around at some successful male profiles. If you need help pm us. My good deed for the day.  |
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By (user no longer on site)
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It's much better than it was! I managed to read it all this time.
Your main picture will appeal to some but bum, torso and face pics is what seems to be the most common response when it is asked what people like to see in the public gallery.
But I will say it is very refreshing for someone to take some the advice given |
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By *ENGUYMan
over a year ago
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You've improved things, but you still have to do some more.
Look at your Profile as if you were going to "sell" yourself, because that is what you are doing!
Your profile is full of grammatical, spelling and punctuation errors. You don't use Capital letters when you should, but ommit them at other times!
Break it down into paragraphs. Group specific similar details into one section. Use a dictionary!
I run a small proofreading business; your form of errors are what I see on a regular basis. The key point is, get your advert correct, and people will start to notice you and respond. Good Luck! |
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"You've improved things, but you still have to do some more.
Look at your Profile as if you were going to "sell" yourself, because that is what you are doing!
Your profile is full of grammatical, spelling and punctuation errors. You don't use Capital letters when you should, but ommit them at other times!
Break it down into paragraphs. Group specific similar details into one section. Use a dictionary!
I run a small proofreading business; your form of errors are what I see on a regular basis. The key point is, get your advert correct, and people will start to notice you and respond. Good Luck!"
Excellent advice,if you are on google chrome u get a nice wriggly red line under spelling mistakes,ideal for dyslexics like me.
Remember the word are your ad,you want it to be as good as it can be,although perhaps not the essay on my profile! |
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