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over a year ago
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You have a few spelling mistakes and no pics apart from that its not too bad but doesn't stand out from a lot of men's on here ....sorry not what you wanted to hear |
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Add spaces between sentences...imagine you are reading a book...now reason your profile text, would you keep on reading after the first few lines?
A few pics in public will help people see you but keep cock pics in privAte.
Good luck and welcome to fabs x |
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If I were you I would consider taking out the 'Oh I forgot' and think about how it reads.
At the moment it reads as if you were speaking to someone and writing it out word for word as you say it
In other words, rushed!
Prospective meets will want to think that you have taken your time and thought carefully about your profile.
It's about demonstrating that you are prepared to put the effort in.
Read BETWEEN the lines. What does this profile say about you at the moment
'I'm after a quick fix'
Oh and please, please, please learn the difference between there, their and they're. It might seem pedantic but it makes a huge difference.
Just for the sake of demonstrating what we're all on about, I have taken the liberty of simply tidying up your profile text, whilst leaving it largely intact.
'I am a 41 year old straight man looking to meet women and couples.
I am very easy going, polite and not pushy in anyway.
I have total respect for people that I meet and their wishes. I am also totally discreet and would appreciate the same in return.
If you are interested please wink or mail me, putting happy in the subject box.
I have face pictures available on request.
So don't be shy, come and say 'Hi'
I think you'll agree that the text is much easier on the eye and a whole lot easier to read.
Hope this points you in the right direction  |
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