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over a year ago
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Here's a poem I made up let me know what you think plz
I can't wait to meet you
Get over to your place
Can't wait to get your pussy out
And sit you on my face
Biting n sucking
On each firm tit
Tonguing your pussy
Licking your clit
Bending you over
So your on all fours
You screaming n shouting
Begging for more
Flipping you over
Fucking your sweet bum
You screaming n shouting
IM GOING TO CUM!!!!!!
Your hard clit tingling
Your hot pussy soaking wet
This will be a night
That you will never ever forget
Think I need add more to it but not bad in my opinion |
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"I would keep the rhyming but change the lines so the rhythm is more structured, for example, use lines with the same number of syllables and pentameter works well - in fives. "
jesus its the simon cowell of the poem world  |
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"Noted cheers although I have raised over 18.5k for various charities by writing poems (not this type obviously) lol n had stuff published but cheers "
Why can't we have a publishable standard then? I think a good poem has structure and rhythm, I like them to rhyme. For example: "Miss Jane Hunter Dunn, Miss Jane Hunter Dunn, furnished and burnished by Aldershott sun". The rhythm suggests the to and fro of a tennis match in which you can imagine her playing. If you emphasise the 'Dunn' it also suggests the raquet hitting the ball. Clever, eh?
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"I would keep the rhyming but change the lines so the rhythm is more structured, for example, use lines with the same number of syllables and pentameter works well - in fives.
jesus its the simon cowell of the poem world "
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"Noted cheers although I have raised over 18.5k for various charities by writing poems (not this type obviously) lol n had stuff published but cheers
Why can't we have a publishable standard then? I think a good poem has structure and rhythm, I like them to rhyme. For example: "Miss Jane Hunter Dunn, Miss Jane Hunter Dunn, furnished and burnished by Aldershott sun". The rhythm suggests the to and fro of a tennis match in which you can imagine her playing. If you emphasise the 'Dunn' it also suggests the raquet hitting the ball. Clever, eh?
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to clever for me, il just sick to the mary had a little lambs ones, much easier to understand  |
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"Noted cheers although I have raised over 18.5k for various charities by writing poems (not this type obviously) lol n had stuff published but cheers
Why can't we have a publishable standard then? I think a good poem has structure and rhythm, I like them to rhyme. For example: "Miss Jane Hunter Dunn, Miss Jane Hunter Dunn, furnished and burnished by Aldershott sun". The rhythm suggests the to and fro of a tennis match in which you can imagine her playing. If you emphasise the 'Dunn' it also suggests the raquet hitting the ball. Clever, eh?
to clever for me, il just sick to the mary had a little lambs ones, much easier to understand "
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"Noted cheers although I have raised over 18.5k for various charities by writing poems (not this type obviously) lol n had stuff published but cheers
Why can't we have a publishable standard then? I think a good poem has structure and rhythm, I like them to rhyme. For example: "Miss Jane Hunter Dunn, Miss Jane Hunter Dunn, furnished and burnished by Aldershott sun". The rhythm suggests the to and fro of a tennis match in which you can imagine her playing. If you emphasise the 'Dunn' it also suggests the raquet hitting the ball. Clever, eh?
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Very clever!
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"Noted cheers although I have raised over 18.5k for various charities by writing poems (not this type obviously) lol n had stuff published but cheers
Why can't we have a publishable standard then? I think a good poem has structure and rhythm, I like them to rhyme. For example: "Miss Jane Hunter Dunn, Miss Jane Hunter Dunn, furnished and burnished by Aldershott sun". The rhythm suggests the to and fro of a tennis match in which you can imagine her playing. If you emphasise the 'Dunn' it also suggests the raquet hitting the ball. Clever, eh?
Very clever!
Amazing what you learn in the Fab fora."
Thank you luv n might I add you are stunning with a fantastic figure x |
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