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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago
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Get rid of the cap and chain pic
Get rid of the comment about Helen Flanagan (whoever she might be)
Sorry, your profile is fairly generic at the moment. |
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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago
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The last sentence is most people's biggest bug.
Why would they want to message to get to know more, only for them to realise that you're not what they're looking for? Why not put more in the profile so people don't need to ask? |
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By *emini ManMan
over a year ago
There and to the left a bit |
To be honest OP it tells a reader nothing about you, what you're specifically looking for, or more importantly what you think you can offer. You need to get some personality across, give people a flavour of the person behind the profile.
Whilst I commend you for posting face pics - they're all pretty samey, maybe add some that show off your body. |
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By (user no longer on site) OP
over a year ago
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"To be honest OP it tells a reader nothing about you, what you're specifically looking for, or more importantly what you think you can offer. You need to get some personality across, give people a flavour of the person behind the profile.
Whilst I commend you for posting face pics - they're all pretty samey, maybe add some that show off your body."
I'm going to do a complete re design later with new pics and everything |
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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago
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Photos two years old
First paragraph make no sense to us.
What do you mean by danger in meets?
Always amuses us when single men say same room swapping as an interest. You have nothing to swap lol |
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By (user no longer on site) OP
over a year ago
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"I honestly dont know what that means lol
If your replying to a message press reply and quoat"
I just figures out what sane swap means. But we coyld swap sex acts and ideas |
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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago
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"I honestly dont know what that means lol
If your replying to a message press reply and quoat
I just figures out what sane swap means. But we coyld swap sex acts and ideas"
No it's swapping partners lol |
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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago
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i dont know what is was like before, but it doesn't really say anything..you put you are looking for people with similar interest but no hint as to what they are.
Needs to be much more descriptive about what you offer, and what you are looking for |
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By *emini ManMan
over a year ago
There and to the left a bit |
I think if anything you've made it worse OP!! Doesn't really tell us anything about you or what specifically you are looking for or can offer - doesn'T reflect any personality...in fact to heck with it...re-read my earlier post to save me just typing it again  |
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By *ady LickWoman
over a year ago
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I didn't see it before but.....while it's great you have face pics, do you really need 5? I think we'd rather see a bit of body (not cock)
You say you compare to nobody. Quite a bold statement, what do you mean by that? As I read it it sounds a bit off putting.
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By (user no longer on site) OP
over a year ago
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"Too plain for me, as above, 5 face photos, really? Need variation in photos, not for all, but I like to see what a guy is hiding, so the odd cock pic isn't a bad think imo, shows what's on offer, "
Im going put some massive thought into this and redo everything |
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"Re wrote the lot and now just need pics"
It's good to see that you have posted face pics. However, as others have already said, they are al the same. Take yourself outdoors and get a selfie, anything that shows you somewhere else. Torso shots will go down well also.
Good luck |
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By *emini ManMan
over a year ago
There and to the left a bit |
You're getting there OP but it's hard work - can I make a suggestion? Rather than keep trying to fix it on the fly - take a step back, take a piece of paper - make a list of each of the following:
- What you're looking for here
- All the good things about you
- What you think you can offer a prospective meet
- Anything else that might be relevant (e.g. why you can't accomodate)
Once you've done that, construct a profile blurb using what you've written down.
A couple of things on your blurb as it currently is written:
- You say you're looking for "professional ladies" - for one that may be misconstrued (!!) and for two how would you define professional? It's a much maligned term on here anyway, so I'd remove it.
- There's no need to tell people how long you've been here - it says how long at the top
- Personally I wouldn't say 5'6" is "tall" as you suggest
- You say you'd like to meet locally - which is fine, but you don't define what you'd call "local" - to some that might be 5 mins down the road and no further - to others it might be 30 miles away.
- Using the phrase "so I don't have to travel miles" will read to some like you're not willing to make an effort, so you might want to re-word that.
- You say "I joined Fab to see what was going on and I've had a few experiences and you must be available during the day...."
- Given you've been here over a year, have you not found out "what is going on" yet?
- Your veris are both Webcam ones, if those are the experiences you are referring to, some people would question their validity as to "experience".
- I'd also re-word the "you must be available during the day" bit as it's too strongly putting the onus on the other person, I'd maybe word it "am only available during the day due to having my daughter most evenings" - although if there are some evenings where you are free it might be worth putting something in there suggesting that. |
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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago
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"Ive had 2 meets on here but they left the site so my veri's went hence I have 2 webcam ones."
The cerise from those who left would still show on your summery |
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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago
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"Ive had 2 meets on here but they left the site so my veri's went hence I have 2 webcam ones.
The cerise from those who left would still show on your summery"
This is true... So you should have four op.  |
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By (user no longer on site) OP
over a year ago
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"Ive had 2 meets on here but they left the site so my veri's went hence I have 2 webcam ones.
The cerise from those who left would still show on your summery
This is true... So you should have four op. "
Don't know what happened - updated everything, is it better |
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By *lceeWoman
over a year ago
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"Ive had 2 meets on here but they left the site so my veri's went hence I have 2 webcam ones.
The cerise from those who left would still show on your summery
This is true... So you should have four op.
Don't know what happened - updated everything, is it better"
Hmmm...this is a tough one. Your profile is well written which is a plus but on the other hand, I don’t really get a feel for what it would be like to hang out with you. It’s the personality thing that others have picked up on. I like to know that I’ll have fun with someone when I’m with them. It’s hard for anyone to tell you what to say or how to put that as it’s personal to everyone. |
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Your profile is better, and it's nice to see you have put effort in. It's hard as we all have our own opinions of what makes a good profile, including you.
Essentially a profile should consist of three areas. Who I am. What I offer. What I am looking for.
One suggestion I would make is that you consider this paragraph
'I am only available during the day due to having my daughter most evenings. I like kissing...lots of foreplay, oral sex giving & receiving nothing better than teasing each other'.
The two sentences in that paragraph are nothing to do with one another, and should not be joined. |
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By *emini ManMan
over a year ago
There and to the left a bit |
"Ive had 2 meets on here but they left the site so my veri's went hence I have 2 webcam ones.
The cerise from those who left would still show on your summery
This is true... So you should have four op.
Don't know what happened - updated everything, is it better"
Much better!!
I'd take out the thing about being a pushover and about people falling in live with you as neither statement will do you any favours.
As Elcee says it's still missing that spark of personality but I really don'T know how you get that across as it's a personal thing. |
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