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So here i am posting my first serious thread of my fab life.
After hearing people comment and say my profile is too long and too much do's and dont's. Is there anyway I could shorten it but without loosing the important informatin that's in it due to all the stupid messages I get which is why it's so long. Just helpful comments please. Thanks all in advance  .
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Your profile is perhaps too long for some people. It would be just right for us.
Depends who you want to attract - if you are hoping to meet the illiterate/busy/indiscriminate, then a shorter profile will help.
Just a bit of constructive profile advice - cut down the ALL CAPS as it's a bit shouty, and do a double check through for spelling and grammar.
The bit about what you are looking for is great to include. Good stuff! The bit about your 'rules' is not so great, too long and reads like you are an arse.
Also, no mixed messages - if you're an occasional smoker, put your profile as a smoker. Not doing so looks like a bit of a disservice to your potential meets who don't want to meet smokers.
One (last) thing to include (bear with me) is that (usually) including too many items in brackets (like this) can get annoying to read. Read your profile out loud, and for every bit in brackets, say it in a comedy high pitched accent. If it sounds like it's too much, you might want to reword it!
Hope that helps, good luck!
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Set your filters so men can't message you and you can remove the 2 times where you say no men, you're not gay.
I understand why you might want your rules in your profile but you could consider cutting them down a little and move them to the end. Having them at the top is very off putting and I didn't want to read further. Try having the bit where you sell yourself at the top - that way you can pique someone's interest before they get to the ranty bit.
Also what is a hotty? A lot of people on here are quite modest about themselves and wouldn't ever refer to themselves as such. |
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over a year ago
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It's fine
Funny how single guys always get heavily critiqued on their profiles compared to couples and single females!
It's long but so is ours, no one has ever moaned about ours...... |
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Yes, it's long but that isn't my problem with it, I have and would read longer if the content tells me what I want to know.
It's all the rules which come over as patronising and demanding. Dollars to doughnuts the people guilty of the sins you list won't have read them so either scrap or condense them. Some of the things you cover are the sort of things imo that you cover when messaging. I'm afraid I don't have a clue what you're looking for as I couldn't bring myself to read beyond the rules. Plus the way you've formatted it isn't easy on the eye on the mobile version at least. |
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"So here i am posting my first serious thread of my fab life.
After hearing people comment and say my profile is too long and too much do's and dont's. Is there anyway I could shorten it but without loosing the important informatin that's in it due to all the stupid messages I get which is why it's so long. Just helpful comments please. Thanks all in advance .
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Hey, personally i love your profile. Granted there is alot of information but it sets clear expectations and demonstrates your a straight talker.
I think those who read it are most likely the ones you want to speak to, socialise with and maybe meet.. if someone 'cba' to read the profile... Can they to develop the sexual relationship you desire? |
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One thing I will say before I go is thank you all for your comments as I thought I'd get loads of sarcastic bs like I usually see when men in particular start a thread like this,so again thank you all very much. D out  |
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"One thing I will say before I go is thank you all for your comments as I thought I'd get loads of sarcastic bs like I usually see when men in particular start a thread like this,so again thank you all very much. D out "
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By *dwalu2Couple
over a year ago
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It's not that long. It would take the average person about four minutes to read, which doesn't seem to onerous when deciding if they want to have sex with you or not.
You could remove the bit about 'disgusting offers' from bi men though, as it makes you sound like a bigot, which probably isn't your intention. If you don't want messages from men, just block them. |
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Personally I wouldnt read your profile. Too much text and I look at it as a block and get bored reading it all. Just my opinion but seems there are some that dont mind. So you will find that you meet the right people at least. |
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By *pider-WomanWoman
over a year ago
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I lost interest around the apply within paragraph think it was paragraph 39 hah only joking! The first part I liked.
More pictures maybe.
The other comment would be if the female half had that many rules as well on top of yours you would never get undress.
All the best
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"Your profile is perhaps too long for some people. It would be just right for us.
Depends who you want to attract - if you are hoping to meet the illiterate/busy/indiscriminate, then a shorter profile will help.
Just a bit of constructive profile advice - cut down the ALL CAPS as it's a bit shouty, and do a double check through for spelling and grammar.
The bit about what you are looking for is great to include. Good stuff! The bit about your 'rules' is not so great, too long and reads like you are an arse.
Also, no mixed messages - if you're an occasional smoker, put your profile as a smoker. Not doing so looks like a bit of a disservice to your potential meets who don't want to meet smokers.
One (last) thing to include (bear with me) is that (usually) including too many items in brackets (like this) can get annoying to read. Read your profile out loud, and for every bit in brackets, say it in a comedy high pitched accent. If it sounds like it's too much, you might want to reword it!
Hope that helps, good luck!
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The caps are so people can't ask me what's clearly there. Spelling I didn't notice any and grammar I'm not sure what exactly you mean?.
Wow..reads like I'm an arse thanks  . They are there because that's what I don't want people to do and most who do message say least they know where stand with me from the get go,so I'm not sure how I can put if differently but still include all?.
My profile changes all sorts when i try to change it that's why I added the bit about smoking .
The brackets part was to hopefully break up the profile and show some humour?
A bit yea but not really no as you haven't said how I could reword it? |
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"Set your filters so men can't message you and you can remove the 2 times where you say no men, you're not gay.
I understand why you might want your rules in your profile but you could consider cutting them down a little and move them to the end. Having them at the top is very off putting and I didn't want to read further. Try having the bit where you sell yourself at the top - that way you can pique someone's interest before they get to the ranty bit.
Also what is a hotty? A lot of people on here are quite modest about themselves and wouldn't ever refer to themselves as such. "
Filters no as one of my good friends I met on here is male and even though I do get the odd guy trying it on the most respect that and we have a good chat about gym,meets etc.
I have them there because before I did people used to do all or a lot of them so that's why they're at the top.
Well that part is kinda to maybe get people who I wouldn't usually speak to or meet to message and some have messaged and asked what do I class as a hotty and there I have a concerstaion/possible meet . I try to have some method to my madness ha. |
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"It's fine
Funny how single guys always get heavily critiqued on their profiles compared to couples and single females!
It's long but so is ours, no one has ever moaned about ours......"
Thank you very much. Well I did think that but was waiting for someone else to say it to be honest with you ha. I know I won't and can't please all but some people who I believe I'd get on with have said they wouldn't meet me based on my profile which I can understand but still seems daftvas I'm not going to meet someone and start spouting rules to them am I.. so that's where I was confused a bit? |
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"Nothing wrong with your profile and mr sour grapes here sez you ain't getting no advice from me cos your body is better than mine "
Haha. Nice one mate. Ay. If you want any advice I'm happy to help. No filters remember lol |
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"Yes, it's long but that isn't my problem with it, I have and would read longer if the content tells me what I want to know.
It's all the rules which come over as patronising and demanding. Dollars to doughnuts the people guilty of the sins you list won't have read them so either scrap or condense them. Some of the things you cover are the sort of things imo that you cover when messaging. I'm afraid I don't have a clue what you're looking for as I couldn't bring myself to read beyond the rules. Plus the way you've formatted it isn't easy on the eye on the mobile version at least. "
All rules will seem patronising to some and not to others won't they?. My profile has become this because if the types of mail I get from people so I thought if I put them then the idiots and the people I probably won't get along with wint message me.
What sort of things in my profile could be talked about in messages. Give me an example?.
Well obviously you probably aren't the type of person I'm looking for and vice versa if you couldn't be bothered reading further because of what I don't want from a meet.
How else could I format it to be more user friendly? |
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"If I was a women it would be the perfect profile for me, its clear, funny and to the point. "
Omg. Are you gay?. Thank you very much. I think my problem is trying to please everyone which we all know can't be done but even I know it's too long. What I need to know is how to change not what can be changed. Surely ? |
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"So here i am posting my first serious thread of my fab life.
After hearing people comment and say my profile is too long and too much do's and dont's. Is there anyway I could shorten it but without loosing the important informatin that's in it due to all the stupid messages I get which is why it's so long. Just helpful comments please. Thanks all in advance .
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I love your profile "
Aww thank you hun. But aren't you a little bias? Lol. Surely some can be shortened? |
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"And the fact that you sound like you have no idea what one is,is probably why you wouldn't be my type and vice versa?"
I know what I consider to be a hotty and I'm perfectly aware that not everyone else would share my opinion. What you consider hot may be totally different to others so maybe you could say what you find attractive. You could be missing out on some very sexy people who don't think they are that hot whilst fielding messages from some not so sexy people who think they are god's gift!
As to your message filters; if you have sent a message to somebody they bypass any filters you put on. You can still talk to your friend and block others from contacting you. |
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"Hey, personally i love your profile. Granted there is alot of information but it sets clear expectations and demonstrates your a straight talker.
I think those who read it are most likely the ones you want to speak to, socialise with and maybe meet.. if someone 'cba' to read the profile... Can they to develop the sexual relationship you desire?"
Thank you hun . Well that was the plan. I'm very straight talking and if someone isn't I don't really have the time or energy to piss about,none of us do on here I'd imagine.
I think you've hit the nail on the head.
This is a fact by the way. All who do read my profile properly I can honestly say if we speak then I get on with them perfectly and in most cases become real friends,not fab friends. They know what I expect so all that talk is out of the way from early. They even go on to say it's refreshing for a guys profile to be so detailed,granted it is bloody long and we have a laugh about it. All who don't for whatever reason i either talk for a bit then it stops or it never starts,or people tell me I think I'm nice,I'm arrogant etc. Go figures. |
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"That's the longest profile I've ever read from a guy! At least it's clear what you're after
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Erm...thanks I think. Sure there was a compliment in there somewhere?. So again what can I change and how? |
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"One thing I will say before I go is thank you all for your comments as I thought I'd get loads of sarcastic bs like I usually see when men in particular start a thread like this,so again thank you all very much. D out
Come talk to me and I will give you a grammar lesson one to one free of charge "
Free you say? . 100% free with no hidden charges? Lol |
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"It's not that long. It would take the average person about four minutes to read, which doesn't seem to onerous when deciding if they want to have sex with you or not.
You could remove the bit about 'disgusting offers' from bi men though, as it makes you sound like a bigot, which probably isn't your intention. If you don't want messages from men, just block them."
Jeez. Is that how long it takes 4 minutes. That's long. Did you time it?. If you read some of the mail I used to get you'd understand ha. No of course it wasn't my intention at all  . As i mentioned about filters loads of guys who respect my profile talk to me about the gym,how I go about meets etc so thays why I have none. Since that's been in there I haven't received one disgusting message. I've received mail from bi and gay men but all have been polite and very respectable so....? |
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"Personally I wouldnt read your profile. Too much text and I look at it as a block and get bored reading it all. Just my opinion but seems there are some that dont mind. So you will find that you meet the right people at least. "
So let me get this right. You wouldn't read it because it's too long and you'd get bored more than if you were attracted to what you saw as in the pictures?. Most things worth while aren't easy to come by . It's people on fab that have made my profile so long. When I first did it,it had 2 short paragraphs lol. Look at it now after nearly 2 years. It's fab I tells ya haha |
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"I lost interest around the apply within paragraph think it was paragraph 39 hah only joking! The first part I liked.
More pictures maybe.
The other comment would be if the female half had that many rules as well on top of yours you would never get undress.
All the best
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Ay cheeky lol. I've got over 30 pictures. I chop and change them to keep people interested. I always between 3-12 pictures public at any given time.
That is a bit of a exaggeration. 33 meets would testify to that fact. You're a cheeky one I can tell but thank you all the same |
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"And the fact that you sound like you have no idea what one is,is probably why you wouldn't be my type and vice versa?
I know what I consider to be a hotty and I'm perfectly aware that not everyone else would share my opinion. What you consider hot may be totally different to others so maybe you could say what you find attractive. You could be missing out on some very sexy people who don't think they are that hot whilst fielding messages from some not so sexy people who think they are god's gift!
As to your message filters; if you have sent a message to somebody they bypass any filters you put on. You can still talk to your friend and block others from contacting you."
As I said somewhere in here it's a way to get people to message and maybe ask hence starting a conversation. I don't think anyone I've met doesn't think they're Hot,even if they say it jokingly which most if the times means they so think it but don't want to be seen as cocky or arrogant.
Thanks for the dumb lesson. I know how filters work and if you read my post about filters and not just posting you'd have your answer to that . |
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"Very happy for you to be all straight and that but to suggest man on man fun is disgusting is pretty offensive. "
Another one who posts without reading posts. Read the whole thread and you will know why I said. Don't comment unless you can be arsed to read the replies which will allow you to write a better informed response |
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"One thing I will say before I go is thank you all for your comments as I thought I'd get loads of sarcastic bs like I usually see when men in particular start a thread like this,so again thank you all very much. D out
Come talk to me and I will give you a grammar lesson one to one free of charge
Free you say? . 100% free with no hidden charges? Lol"
Well mayb a little charge just as a goodwill gesture you understand. |
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"One thing I will say before I go is thank you all for your comments as I thought I'd get loads of sarcastic bs like I usually see when men in particular start a thread like this,so again thank you all very much. D out
Come talk to me and I will give you a grammar lesson one to one free of charge
Free you say? . 100% free with no hidden charges? Lol
Well mayb a little charge just as a goodwill gesture you understand. "
No I bloody don't understand!. Free is Free,don't misslead the consumer |
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Right. I've taken on board all comments.. yes even the I cba to read all posts comments. How's it looking now then my fellow fabsters. I know it's late so comment as and when. Thank you all again. |
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By *pider-WomanWoman
over a year ago
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"I lost interest around the apply within paragraph think it was paragraph 39 hah only joking! The first part I liked.
More pictures maybe.
The other comment would be if the female half had that many rules as well on top of yours you would never get undress.
All the best
Ay cheeky lol. I've got over 30 pictures. I chop and change them to keep people interested. I always between 3-12 pictures public at any given time.
That is a bit of a exaggeration. 33 meets would testify to that fact. You're a cheeky one I can tell but thank you all the same"
Rule number 346 show 12 pictures at any one time that way we dont have to read 347 and I/we get 4 mins of our lives back!!
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"I lost interest around the apply within paragraph think it was paragraph 39 hah only joking! The first part I liked.
More pictures maybe.
The other comment would be if the female half had that many rules as well on top of yours you would never get undress.
All the best
Ay cheeky lol. I've got over 30 pictures. I chop and change them to keep people interested. I always between 3-12 pictures public at any given time.
That is a bit of a exaggeration. 33 meets would testify to that fact. You're a cheeky one I can tell but thank you all the same
Rule number 346 show 12 pictures at any one time that way we dont have to read 347 and I/we get 4 mins of our lives back!!
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You never get time back..hence why reading all will save you time  |
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By *pider-WomanWoman
over a year ago
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"I lost interest around the apply within paragraph think it was paragraph 39 hah only joking! The first part I liked.
More pictures maybe.
The other comment would be if the female half had that many rules as well on top of yours you would never get undress.
All the best
Ay cheeky lol. I've got over 30 pictures. I chop and change them to keep people interested. I always between 3-12 pictures public at any given time.
That is a bit of a exaggeration. 33 meets would testify to that fact. You're a cheeky one I can tell but thank you all the same
Rule number 346 show 12 pictures at any one time that way we dont have to read 347 and I/we get 4 mins of our lives back!!
You never get time back..hence why reading all will save you time "
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Even if you were a woman OP (and you are not) or if I was interested in men (and I'm not), I wouldn't read such a long profile.
My profile is about the right length.
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"I lost interest around the apply within paragraph think it was paragraph 39 hah only joking! The first part I liked.
More pictures maybe.
The other comment would be if the female half had that many rules as well on top of yours you would never get undress.
All the best
Ay cheeky lol. I've got over 30 pictures. I chop and change them to keep people interested. I always between 3-12 pictures public at any given time.
That is a bit of a exaggeration. 33 meets would testify to that fact. You're a cheeky one I can tell but thank you all the same
Rule number 346 show 12 pictures at any one time that way we dont have to read 347 and I/we get 4 mins of our lives back!!
You never get time back..hence why reading all will save you time
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"Even if you were a woman OP (and you are not) or if I was interested in men (and I'm not), I wouldn't read such a long profile.
My profile is about the right length.
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Why wouldn't you?. Sure you're not into men? What's wrong with taking the time to read sonething if it means you'll actually get a meet. Most people talk for more than the 4 minutes it takes to read my profile,(stated by another post). And not to seem arrogant but if yours is the right length and all that how have I managed a decent amount of meets compared to time on here if it's soo bad? So no constructive criticism just sarcasm. Knew they'd be one and look it's from a single guy with less meets than me. Not sure you're someone I should be taking advice from mate . But thank you all the same. Needed a chuckle before bed  |
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By *inkySeeKinkyDoWoman
over a year ago
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Ive read the profile, and read the entire thread...honest opinion?
You come across as quite needy, dictatorial and very self centred. There are other male profiles with a lot less fuss with equally as good pics which id personally choose over yours.
I also struggle to believe that you've put all those rules in place because your overrun with the wrong type of messages...that is a generally an issue fab women have who don't use their filters properly.
Having previously had a long and rule laden profile I found it attracted more of the wrong types than the right ones. Keeping it simple has had much better results for me.
Much of the criticism on this thread has been constructive but you've chosen to ridicule or belittle the author if you don't quite agree...again that shows a personality trait that isn't a pleasant one. |
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"So here i am posting my first serious thread of my fab life.
After hearing people comment and say my profile is too long and too much do's and dont's. Is there anyway I could shorten it but without loosing the important informatin that's in it due to all the stupid messages I get which is why it's so long. Just helpful comments please. Thanks all in advance .
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Why are you moaning you are getting meets! |
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By (user no longer on site)
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Wow some of these comments really are over the top. You aren't the firing squad. The guy asked a question surely a simple answer would be good. I've had the pleasure of chatting to him for weeks and he's neither needy or desperate and was very kind to offer to let me come along to an event because I was on my own. A very unselfish attitude. So give him a break. Mine is long but it says what I want to get it across to those I don't want. He's doing the same. Carry on its very interesting. |
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"That's the longest profile I've ever read from a guy! At least it's clear what you're after
Erm...thanks I think. Sure there was a compliment in there somewhere?. So again what can I change and how?"
At a quick glance the club part can easily be shortened as can the friend request statement. The social meet is repeated twice so that can be adjusted too |
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"Your profile is perhaps too long for some people. It would be just right for us.
Depends who you want to attract - if you are hoping to meet the illiterate/busy/indiscriminate, then a shorter profile will help.
Just a bit of constructive profile advice - cut down the ALL CAPS as it's a bit shouty, and do a double check through for spelling and grammar.
The bit about what you are looking for is great to include. Good stuff! The bit about your 'rules' is not so great, too long and reads like you are an arse.
Also, no mixed messages - if you're an occasional smoker, put your profile as a smoker. Not doing so looks like a bit of a disservice to your potential meets who don't want to meet smokers.
One (last) thing to include (bear with me) is that (usually) including too many items in brackets (like this) can get annoying to read. Read your profile out loud, and for every bit in brackets, say it in a comedy high pitched accent. If it sounds like it's too much, you might want to reword it!
Hope that helps, good luck!
The caps are so people can't ask me what's clearly there. Spelling I didn't notice any and grammar I'm not sure what exactly you mean?.
Wow..reads like I'm an arse thanks . They are there because that's what I don't want people to do and most who do message say least they know where stand with me from the get go,so I'm not sure how I can put if differently but still include all?.
My profile changes all sorts when i try to change it that's why I added the bit about smoking .
The brackets part was to hopefully break up the profile and show some humour?
A bit yea but not really no as you haven't said how I could reword it?"
Without rewriting it for you completely, I pretty much did say what I thought you should adjust - but again only in my opinion, and I was being constructive. Writing style is a personal thing, and it's a tough balance between saying what to adjust because it's a turn-off, and saying what to write which could be better but wouldn't be in your own voice.
If you can't see any spelling or grammar errors in what you've written, then don't worry about it - it's a fair profile that represents you.
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"Even if you were a woman OP (and you are not) or if I was interested in men (and I'm not), I wouldn't read such a long profile.
My profile is about the right length.
Why wouldn't you?. Sure you're not into men? What's wrong with taking the time to read sonething if it means you'll actually get a meet. Most people talk for more than the 4 minutes it takes to read my profile,(stated by another post). And not to seem arrogant but if yours is the right length and all that how have I managed a decent amount of meets compared to time on here if it's soo bad? So no constructive criticism just sarcasm. Knew they'd be one and look it's from a single guy with less meets than me. Not sure you're someone I should be taking advice from mate . But thank you all the same. Needed a chuckle before bed "
Well well, my post wasn't meant to bring out the worst in you...
As I said, I never read such long profiles. You can either learn or ignore but trying to be aggressive is the wrong attitude when staring a thread.
One person's opinion is an indication that others may have similar views. So if I say, it's so long that I can't be bothered to read it, then surely many others may think the same. (and some on this thread have said it already).
As far as my meets are concerned...? Lol, you are making a laugh, surely. You have no certain information how many meets I've had. Is there a rule that every meet has to be verified?
More importantly, I'm not here to meet everyone who is interested. My real life and real meets are outside fab. Fab is just one of 1001 things that I'm involved in.
There was no need to digress. Keep it to your original question. If you feel there's nothing you can learn from a post, say "Thank you" and move on to the following post.
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"So here i am posting my first serious thread of my fab life.
After hearing people comment and say my profile is too long and too much do's and dont's. Is there anyway I could shorten it but without loosing the important informatin that's in it due to all the stupid messages I get which is why it's so long. Just helpful comments please. Thanks all in advance .
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Why are you moaning you are getting meets!"
I'm not moaning I just thought it was a bit long so wanted some help in how I could shorten it |
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"Ive read the profile, and read the entire thread...honest opinion?
You come across as quite needy, dictatorial and very self centred. There are other male profiles with a lot less fuss with equally as good pics which id personally choose over yours.
I also struggle to believe that you've put all those rules in place because your overrun with the wrong type of messages...that is a generally an issue fab women have who don't use their filters properly.
Having previously had a long and rule laden profile I found it attracted more of the wrong types than the right ones. Keeping it simple has had much better results for me.
Much of the criticism on this thread has been constructive but you've chosen to ridicule or belittle the author if you don't quite agree...again that shows a personality trait that isn't a pleasant one."
Well thanks for the opinion. I am neither any of those things you've mentioned so that kind of ends my reply for that one lol. Again you're not the type of person i'd go for so that's probably why you think the way you do and that's fine.
You've not said what to change just criticised so not sure how the post is ment to help?. Well that's cool but how people reacted to yours isn't the same to me and if you read earlier posts the rule part has stopped a lot of those people from messaging me so it works for the majority .
That's fine again but you're quick to jump on how I reply but not to some posts like yours who haven't actually stated how to change it. Figures lol. And I've glanced your profile and you're not what I would be looking for which is interesting to say the least. But thank you for the dig all the same |
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"Hey hey you.... read it yourself and time how long it takes to read it. Answer? too long lol
You also repeat yourself so it could be condensed massively but cutting out that...."
That's the thing..too long for you but fine for others?. I think it's personal opinion as I don't mind reading a long profile to be honest with you.
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"Wow some of these comments really are over the top. You aren't the firing squad. The guy asked a question surely a simple answer would be good. I've had the pleasure of chatting to him for weeks and he's neither needy or desperate and was very kind to offer to let me come along to an event because I was on my own. A very unselfish attitude. So give him a break. Mine is long but it says what I want to get it across to those I don't want. He's doing the same. Carry on its very interesting. "
Thank you hun. But it's fine anyone who has met me knows I'm none of those things lol. So it's funny that that post said that having never met me and nobody else picked up on that opinion. |
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"That's the longest profile I've ever read from a guy! At least it's clear what you're after
Erm...thanks I think. Sure there was a compliment in there somewhere?. So again what can I change and how?
At a quick glance the club part can easily be shortened as can the friend request statement. The social meet is repeated twice so that can be adjusted too "
Omd lol. How can it be shortened. I've looked at it and I'm bloody struggling here?. Repeated twice. Okay thanks I'll have a look . |
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"Your profile is perhaps too long for some people. It would be just right for us.
Depends who you want to attract - if you are hoping to meet the illiterate/busy/indiscriminate, then a shorter profile will help.
Just a bit of constructive profile advice - cut down the ALL CAPS as it's a bit shouty, and do a double check through for spelling and grammar.
The bit about what you are looking for is great to include. Good stuff! The bit about your 'rules' is not so great, too long and reads like you are an arse.
Also, no mixed messages - if you're an occasional smoker, put your profile as a smoker. Not doing so looks like a bit of a disservice to your potential meets who don't want to meet smokers.
One (last) thing to include (bear with me) is that (usually) including too many items in brackets (like this) can get annoying to read. Read your profile out loud, and for every bit in brackets, say it in a comedy high pitched accent. If it sounds like it's too much, you might want to reword it!
Hope that helps, good luck!
The caps are so people can't ask me what's clearly there. Spelling I didn't notice any and grammar I'm not sure what exactly you mean?.
Wow..reads like I'm an arse thanks . They are there because that's what I don't want people to do and most who do message say least they know where stand with me from the get go,so I'm not sure how I can put if differently but still include all?.
My profile changes all sorts when i try to change it that's why I added the bit about smoking .
The brackets part was to hopefully break up the profile and show some humour?
A bit yea but not really no as you haven't said how I could reword it?
Without rewriting it for you completely, I pretty much did say what I thought you should adjust - but again only in my opinion, and I was being constructive. Writing style is a personal thing, and it's a tough balance between saying what to adjust because it's a turn-off, and saying what to write which could be better but wouldn't be in your own voice.
If you can't see any spelling or grammar errors in what you've written, then don't worry about it - it's a fair profile that represents you.
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"Even if you were a woman OP (and you are not) or if I was interested in men (and I'm not), I wouldn't read such a long profile.
My profile is about the right length.
Why wouldn't you?. Sure you're not into men? What's wrong with taking the time to read sonething if it means you'll actually get a meet. Most people talk for more than the 4 minutes it takes to read my profile,(stated by another post). And not to seem arrogant but if yours is the right length and all that how have I managed a decent amount of meets compared to time on here if it's soo bad? So no constructive criticism just sarcasm. Knew they'd be one and look it's from a single guy with less meets than me. Not sure you're someone I should be taking advice from mate . But thank you all the same. Needed a chuckle before bed
Well well, my post wasn't meant to bring out the worst in you...
As I said, I never read such long profiles. You can either learn or ignore but trying to be aggressive is the wrong attitude when staring a thread.
One person's opinion is an indication that others may have similar views. So if I say, it's so long that I can't be bothered to read it, then surely many others may think the same. (and some on this thread have said it already).
As far as my meets are concerned...? Lol, you are making a laugh, surely. You have no certain information how many meets I've had. Is there a rule that every meet has to be verified?
More importantly, I'm not here to meet everyone who is interested. My real life and real meets are outside fab. Fab is just one of 1001 things that I'm involved in.
There was no need to digress. Keep it to your original question. If you feel there's nothing you can learn from a post, say "Thank you" and move on to the following post.
This is what intelligent people do anyway. "
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By *anky_PankyWoman
over a year ago
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"Hey hey you.... read it yourself and time how long it takes to read it. Answer? too long lol
You also repeat yourself so it could be condensed massively but cutting out that....
That's the thing..too long for you but fine for others?. I think it's personal opinion as I don't mind reading a long profile to be honest with you.
I thought you'd have done better missy. What bloody parts? Lol"
Put it this way - I've met you and still never actually read all your profile til this thread! Got bored past the bullet points 
You repeat yourself about quality over quantity and social etc the last paragraphs go around in circles - sorry my dear but you wanted opinions |
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"Hey hey you.... read it yourself and time how long it takes to read it. Answer? too long lol
You also repeat yourself so it could be condensed massively but cutting out that....
That's the thing..too long for you but fine for others?. I think it's personal opinion as I don't mind reading a long profile to be honest with you.
I thought you'd have done better missy. What bloody parts? Lol
Put it this way - I've met you and still never actually read all your profile til this thread! Got bored past the bullet points
You repeat yourself about quality over quantity and social etc the last paragraphs go around in circles - sorry my dear but you wanted opinions "
I think i've done it now. I know I did. I'm not saying I didn't hun. Just some don't help is all. What about it now? |
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Hi OP
Like others have said, I suggest you restructure so rules are at the end as were I looking in your area they would put me off.
It does read as somewhat repetitive and 'stream of consciousness' stuff but that is maybe just my style preference.
You do say you're not looking for supermodel types, but then later say that you only want to hear from 'hotty[s]' sic so that seems a little contradictory, maybe cover the physical type you're looking for in one sentence?
Overall your profile left me feeling that you are a little pissed off? It's about the tone which put me off somewhat.
Finally, the opening paragraph about looking for a FWB came across as a little bitter and made me wonder what had happened to your last one! That may not have been your intention but it is how it seemed to me. I think it is hard to find someone who can fill the role of FWB, which includes socialising as well as play time, without expectations of a relationship/feelings developing so whilst being clear that it is a FWB you are looking for, it could be worded better (by that I mean more 'nicely').
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"Hi OP
Like others have said, I suggest you restructure so rules are at the end as were I looking in your area they would put me off.
It does read as somewhat repetitive and 'stream of consciousness' stuff but that is maybe just my style preference.
You do say you're not looking for supermodel types, but then later say that you only want to hear from 'hotty[s]' sic so that seems a little contradictory, maybe cover the physical type you're looking for in one sentence?
Overall your profile left me feeling that you are a little pissed off? It's about the tone which put me off somewhat.
Finally, the opening paragraph about looking for a FWB came across as a little bitter and made me wonder what had happened to your last one! That may not have been your intention but it is how it seemed to me. I think it is hard to find someone who can fill the role of FWB, which includes socialising as well as play time, without expectations of a relationship/feelings developing so whilst being clear that it is a FWB you are looking for, it could be worded better (by that I mean more 'nicely').
Good luck!"
Nice textual analysis.
No need for me to add anything, as there are so many comments in this thread. On a quick scan, people seem mostly in favour. And it's all about personal preference anyway - you have enough verifications to show that enough people are fine with your profile. (Or that might just be your hot body.)
Personally, we like better writing. Writing of all types, especially marketing, should be short and sharp, concise. There is repetition in your profile. And even of the things that aren't repetitive - why do people need to know every club you frequent? If you think that's essential to who you are, keep them all in. Otherwise, if you're looking for things to ditch, then just state you've been to a few, and maybe state your favourite.
But as the previous comment says - it's not just what you say, but how you say it. You like your friends not because of their views but because you like the way they express them.
We think a few nicely written sentences, briefly stating what someone's into and evoking a sense of who you are - at least, the better side of who you are.
But as I said, most people seem to like what you've written, so unless you particularly want to attract us you might as well ignore this.
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"Hi OP
Like others have said, I suggest you restructure so rules are at the end as were I looking in your area they would put me off.
It does read as somewhat repetitive and 'stream of consciousness' stuff but that is maybe just my style preference.
You do say you're not looking for supermodel types, but then later say that you only want to hear from 'hotty[s]' sic so that seems a little contradictory, maybe cover the physical type you're looking for in one sentence?
Overall your profile left me feeling that you are a little pissed off? It's about the tone which put me off somewhat.
Finally, the opening paragraph about looking for a FWB came across as a little bitter and made me wonder what had happened to your last one! That may not have been your intention but it is how it seemed to me. I think it is hard to find someone who can fill the role of FWB, which includes socialising as well as play time, without expectations of a relationship/feelings developing so whilst being clear that it is a FWB you are looking for, it could be worded better (by that I mean more 'nicely').
Good luck!"
Yeah I think the rules could do with being further down. Why would it put you off bcz they're at the top?
No I'm not bitter..i just wanted to pit in what i'd like from any potential FWB etc. I never said feelings aren't expected that's why it says something like can say how they're feeling or something like that as that is to be expected . I thought hard about how to word it and that's exactly how i'd say it and anyone who has asked about it i've said it like that with no ouch..that's a bit harsh. So I'm unsure how to reword it? |
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By *anky_PankyWoman
over a year ago
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"Hey hey you.... read it yourself and time how long it takes to read it. Answer? too long lol
You also repeat yourself so it could be condensed massively but cutting out that....
That's the thing..too long for you but fine for others?. I think it's personal opinion as I don't mind reading a long profile to be honest with you.
I thought you'd have done better missy. What bloody parts? Lol
Put it this way - I've met you and still never actually read all your profile til this thread! Got bored past the bullet points
You repeat yourself about quality over quantity and social etc the last paragraphs go around in circles - sorry my dear but you wanted opinions
I think i've done it now. I know I did. I'm not saying I didn't hun. Just some don't help is all. What about it now?"
Still kinda goes around the houses a bit my lovely....
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"Hi OP
Like others have said, I suggest you restructure so rules are at the end as were I looking in your area they would put me off.
It does read as somewhat repetitive and 'stream of consciousness' stuff but that is maybe just my style preference.
You do say you're not looking for supermodel types, but then later say that you only want to hear from 'hotty[s]' sic so that seems a little contradictory, maybe cover the physical type you're looking for in one sentence?
Overall your profile left me feeling that you are a little pissed off? It's about the tone which put me off somewhat.
Finally, the opening paragraph about looking for a FWB came across as a little bitter and made me wonder what had happened to your last one! That may not have been your intention but it is how it seemed to me. I think it is hard to find someone who can fill the role of FWB, which includes socialising as well as play time, without expectations of a relationship/feelings developing so whilst being clear that it is a FWB you are looking for, it could be worded better (by that I mean more 'nicely').
Good luck!
Nice textual analysis.
No need for me to add anything, as there are so many comments in this thread. On a quick scan, people seem mostly in favour. And it's all about personal preference anyway - you have enough verifications to show that enough people are fine with your profile. (Or that might just be your hot body.)
Personally, we like better writing. Writing of all types, especially marketing, should be short and sharp, concise. There is repetition in your profile. And even of the things that aren't repetitive - why do people need to know every club you frequent? If you think that's essential to who you are, keep them all in. Otherwise, if you're looking for things to ditch, then just state you've been to a few, and maybe state your favourite.
But as the previous comment says - it's not just what you say, but how you say it. You like your friends not because of their views but because you like the way they express them.
We think a few nicely written sentences, briefly stating what someone's into and evoking a sense of who you are - at least, the better side of who you are.
But as I said, most people seem to like what you've written, so unless you particularly want to attract us you might as well ignore this.
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I think I've delt with the repetitiveness now?.
The club bit was bcz I previously said i attended and every other weekend we were at them then the questions started which ones have you been to,so I decided to add them so all knew. I have stated my favourite haven't i?
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"Hey hey you.... read it yourself and time how long it takes to read it. Answer? too long lol
You also repeat yourself so it could be condensed massively but cutting out that....
That's the thing..too long for you but fine for others?. I think it's personal opinion as I don't mind reading a long profile to be honest with you.
I thought you'd have done better missy. What bloody parts? Lol
Put it this way - I've met you and still never actually read all your profile til this thread! Got bored past the bullet points
You repeat yourself about quality over quantity and social etc the last paragraphs go around in circles - sorry my dear but you wanted opinions
I think i've done it now. I know I did. I'm not saying I didn't hun. Just some don't help is all. What about it now?
Still kinda goes around the houses a bit my lovely....
I reckon i should rewrite it for you "
I can't see how it does now so i don't know ha.
Thank you sweetie but nah because then it'd represent you and not me because i clearly don't talk like you. Hence why we're different . Baring in mind this isn't an English essay. Just asked for a bit of help like. |
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Thank you to for taking part in this experiment. Nah only joking. But seriously thanks to all who posted. I may put the rules further down if the stupid messages stop reffering to what I don't like. Worded some parts differently,not sure if it's better or not and cba as I'm loosing the will with this profile now ha. FWB part stays as that's exactly how i'd say it. Erm. Shortened parts where I could and if the repetitiveness isn't sorted then sod ya'll lol. |
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By *inkySeeKinkyDoWoman
over a year ago
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"Ive read the profile, and read the entire thread...honest opinion?
You come across as quite needy, dictatorial and very self centred. There are other male profiles with a lot less fuss with equally as good pics which id personally choose over yours.
I also struggle to believe that you've put all those rules in place because your overrun with the wrong type of messages...that is a generally an issue fab women have who don't use their filters properly.
Having previously had a long and rule laden profile I found it attracted more of the wrong types than the right ones. Keeping it simple has had much better results for me.
Much of the criticism on this thread has been constructive but you've chosen to ridicule or belittle the author if you don't quite agree...again that shows a personality trait that isn't a pleasant one.
Well thanks for the opinion. I am neither any of those things you've mentioned so that kind of ends my reply for that one lol. Again you're not the type of person i'd go for so that's probably why you think the way you do and that's fine.
You've not said what to change just criticised so not sure how the post is ment to help?. Well that's cool but how people reacted to yours isn't the same to me and if you read earlier posts the rule part has stopped a lot of those people from messaging me so it works for the majority .
That's fine again but you're quick to jump on how I reply but not to some posts like yours who haven't actually stated how to change it. Figures lol. And I've glanced your profile and you're not what I would be looking for which is interesting to say the least. But thank you for the dig all the same "
The gist was shorten it as imo its too long, too repetitive, and portrays you in a negative light
It wasn't meant as a dig, it was a/my view on your profile which you've asked for in public forum. If what you've done works for you then great, its your profile and you are in control of it, you operate it how you like. I was merely sharing my experience having had a lengthy profile.
Im sure you're a decent chap but you've repeated in your response how I'm not what your looking for and managed once again to belittle a response and make it personal. I'm cool with that I'm not what you're looking for and vice versa based purely on our respective profile texts but I think youre making big assumptions about me and others here who havnt agreed with you and have been quute condesending and which wasn't really warranted.
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"Ive read the profile, and read the entire thread...honest opinion?
You come across as quite needy, dictatorial and very self centred. There are other male profiles with a lot less fuss with equally as good pics which id personally choose over yours.
I also struggle to believe that you've put all those rules in place because your overrun with the wrong type of messages...that is a generally an issue fab women have who don't use their filters properly.
Having previously had a long and rule laden profile I found it attracted more of the wrong types than the right ones. Keeping it simple has had much better results for me.
Much of the criticism on this thread has been constructive but you've chosen to ridicule or belittle the author if you don't quite agree...again that shows a personality trait that isn't a pleasant one.
Well thanks for the opinion. I am neither any of those things you've mentioned so that kind of ends my reply for that one lol. Again you're not the type of person i'd go for so that's probably why you think the way you do and that's fine.
You've not said what to change just criticised so not sure how the post is ment to help?. Well that's cool but how people reacted to yours isn't the same to me and if you read earlier posts the rule part has stopped a lot of those people from messaging me so it works for the majority .
That's fine again but you're quick to jump on how I reply but not to some posts like yours who haven't actually stated how to change it. Figures lol. And I've glanced your profile and you're not what I would be looking for which is interesting to say the least. But thank you for the dig all the same
The gist was shorten it as imo its too long, too repetitive, and portrays you in a negative light
It wasn't meant as a dig, it was a/my view on your profile which you've asked for in public forum. If what you've done works for you then great, its your profile and you are in control of it, you operate it how you like. I was merely sharing my experience having had a lengthy profile.
Im sure you're a decent chap but you've repeated in your response how I'm not what your looking for and managed once again to belittle a response and make it personal. I'm cool with that I'm not what you're looking for and vice versa based purely on our respective profile texts but I think youre making big assumptions about me and others here who havnt agreed with you and have been quute condesending and which wasn't really warranted.
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No I'm horrible but some seem to like me . Well sorry if you feel that way as that wasn't my intention at all. But I can't help how you feel. I was just saying that you wasn't my type. Obviously it's personal because I'm reffering to you. I'm purley going by what they said and their profiles. I can only assume as I don't know any of you personally. That is the only option at my disposal. Thanks again |
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Reas your whole profile and yea fair enough it says what you do and dont like, so dont see a problem with it, Doesn't come across in a horrible way at all imo, it clearly states what you want and that's completely fair
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"Reas your whole profile and yea fair enough it says what you do and dont like, so dont see a problem with it, Doesn't come across in a horrible way at all imo, it clearly states what you want and that's completely fair
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"Reas your whole profile and yea fair enough it says what you do and dont like, so dont see a problem with it, Doesn't come across in a horrible way at all imo, it clearly states what you want and that's completely fair
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OP the rewording of your profile is much better, it comes across as less aggressive now.
It's still long but I can't see how you would cut it down without removing sections that are important for you. It's clear from your posts that you feel you need to keep most of it and if it works for you that's all that matters.
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"Hi OP
Like others have said, I suggest you restructure so rules are at the end as were I looking in your area they would put me off.
It does read as somewhat repetitive and 'stream of consciousness' stuff but that is maybe just my style preference.
You do say you're not looking for supermodel types, but then later say that you only want to hear from 'hotty[s]' sic so that seems a little contradictory, maybe cover the physical type you're looking for in one sentence?
Overall your profile left me feeling that you are a little pissed off? It's about the tone which put me off somewhat.
Finally, the opening paragraph about looking for a FWB came across as a little bitter and made me wonder what had happened to your last one! That may not have been your intention but it is how it seemed to me. I think it is hard to find someone who can fill the role of FWB, which includes socialising as well as play time, without expectations of a relationship/feelings developing so whilst being clear that it is a FWB you are looking for, it could be worded better (by that I mean more 'nicely').
Good luck!
Yeah I think the rules could do with being further down. Why would it put you off bcz they're at the top?
No I'm not bitter..i just wanted to pit in what i'd like from any potential FWB etc. I never said feelings aren't expected that's why it says something like can say how they're feeling or something like that as that is to be expected . I thought hard about how to word it and that's exactly how i'd say it and anyone who has asked about it i've said it like that with no ouch..that's a bit harsh. So I'm unsure how to reword it?"
An analogy often used here is that our profile is our 'shop window'. If I could stretch that analogy further, having the rules at the top of your profile makes you seem (to me) like a shopkeeper standing at the door with crossed arms looking at every potential customer with suspicion in case they pinch something. But I (your potential customer) like to be welcomed into a profile, a metaphorical 'Hi come in have a look around' approach with a discreet notice that all shoplifters will be prosecuted at the tills as I'm about to make a purchase! I hope that flight of fancy makes sense
Ultimately we all have different preferences as to style of profiles, if yours is working for you then why change it?
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"Reas your whole profile and yea fair enough it says what you do and dont like, so dont see a problem with it, Doesn't come across in a horrible way at all imo, it clearly states what you want and that's completely fair
Your pictures are wicked!!!. "
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"Ive read the profile, and read the entire thread...honest opinion?
You come across as quite needy, dictatorial and very self centred. There are other male profiles with a lot less fuss with equally as good pics which id personally choose over yours.
I also struggle to believe that you've put all those rules in place because your overrun with the wrong type of messages...that is a generally an issue fab women have who don't use their filters properly.
Having previously had a long and rule laden profile I found it attracted more of the wrong types than the right ones. Keeping it simple has had much better results for me.
Much of the criticism on this thread has been constructive but you've chosen to ridicule or belittle the author if you don't quite agree...again that shows a personality trait that isn't a pleasant one.
Well thanks for the opinion. I am neither any of those things you've mentioned so that kind of ends my reply for that one lol. Again you're not the type of person i'd go for so that's probably why you think the way you do and that's fine.
You've not said what to change just criticised so not sure how the post is ment to help?. Well that's cool but how people reacted to yours isn't the same to me and if you read earlier posts the rule part has stopped a lot of those people from messaging me so it works for the majority .
That's fine again but you're quick to jump on how I reply but not to some posts like yours who haven't actually stated how to change it. Figures lol. And I've glanced your profile and you're not what I would be looking for which is interesting to say the least. But thank you for the dig all the same "
Well, I read your profile...twice, and then read the feedback others gave, a lot of which I agree with, and then I read your responses...especially the one I quoted.
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"OP the rewording of your profile is much better, it comes across as less aggressive now.
It's still long but I can't see how you would cut it down without removing sections that are important for you. It's clear from your posts that you feel you need to keep most of it and if it works for you that's all that matters.
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"Hi OP
Like others have said, I suggest you restructure so rules are at the end as were I looking in your area they would put me off.
It does read as somewhat repetitive and 'stream of consciousness' stuff but that is maybe just my style preference.
You do say you're not looking for supermodel types, but then later say that you only want to hear from 'hotty[s]' sic so that seems a little contradictory, maybe cover the physical type you're looking for in one sentence?
Overall your profile left me feeling that you are a little pissed off? It's about the tone which put me off somewhat.
Finally, the opening paragraph about looking for a FWB came across as a little bitter and made me wonder what had happened to your last one! That may not have been your intention but it is how it seemed to me. I think it is hard to find someone who can fill the role of FWB, which includes socialising as well as play time, without expectations of a relationship/feelings developing so whilst being clear that it is a FWB you are looking for, it could be worded better (by that I mean more 'nicely').
Good luck!
Yeah I think the rules could do with being further down. Why would it put you off bcz they're at the top?
No I'm not bitter..i just wanted to pit in what i'd like from any potential FWB etc. I never said feelings aren't expected that's why it says something like can say how they're feeling or something like that as that is to be expected . I thought hard about how to word it and that's exactly how i'd say it and anyone who has asked about it i've said it like that with no ouch..that's a bit harsh. So I'm unsure how to reword it?
An analogy often used here is that our profile is our 'shop window'. If I could stretch that analogy further, having the rules at the top of your profile makes you seem (to me) like a shopkeeper standing at the door with crossed arms looking at every potential customer with suspicion in case they pinch something. But I (your potential customer) like to be welcomed into a profile, a metaphorical 'Hi come in have a look around' approach with a discreet notice that all shoplifters will be prosecuted at the tills as I'm about to make a purchase! I hope that flight of fancy makes sense
Ultimately we all have different preferences as to style of profiles, if yours is working for you then why change it?
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Noted and thanks . Yes it does work but i think i'd now like to maybe attract a different kind of customer ha |
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"Reas your whole profile and yea fair enough it says what you do and dont like, so dont see a problem with it, Doesn't come across in a horrible way at all imo, it clearly states what you want and that's completely fair
Your pictures are wicked!!!.
Have to agree so much so I fabbed them "
Perve and a creep. Nice haha |
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"Ive read the profile, and read the entire thread...honest opinion?
You come across as quite needy, dictatorial and very self centred. There are other male profiles with a lot less fuss with equally as good pics which id personally choose over yours.
I also struggle to believe that you've put all those rules in place because your overrun with the wrong type of messages...that is a generally an issue fab women have who don't use their filters properly.
Having previously had a long and rule laden profile I found it attracted more of the wrong types than the right ones. Keeping it simple has had much better results for me.
Much of the criticism on this thread has been constructive but you've chosen to ridicule or belittle the author if you don't quite agree...again that shows a personality trait that isn't a pleasant one.
Well thanks for the opinion. I am neither any of those things you've mentioned so that kind of ends my reply for that one lol. Again you're not the type of person i'd go for so that's probably why you think the way you do and that's fine.
You've not said what to change just criticised so not sure how the post is ment to help?. Well that's cool but how people reacted to yours isn't the same to me and if you read earlier posts the rule part has stopped a lot of those people from messaging me so it works for the majority .
That's fine again but you're quick to jump on how I reply but not to some posts like yours who haven't actually stated how to change it. Figures lol. And I've glanced your profile and you're not what I would be looking for which is interesting to say the least. But thank you for the dig all the same
Well, I read your profile...twice, and then read the feedback others gave, a lot of which I agree with, and then I read your responses...especially the one I quoted.
She hit the nail on the head...why ask for advice if you aren't going to take it? "
Unless you read my profile on the day of this thread then you would know loads of it has been changed. Thank you |
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"So here i am posting my first serious thread of my fab life.
After hearing people comment and say my profile is too long and too much do's and dont's. Is there anyway I could shorten it but without loosing the important informatin that's in it due to all the stupid messages I get which is why it's so long. Just helpful comments please. Thanks all in advance .
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As a general rule i avoid any profile that says "you must/will" because it tells me everything i need to know about the profile
And its that your only out for yourself/selves and all those profiles go on about is what i must/will do for you....but then you never say what you can offer or do for the people you wanna meet |
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"So here i am posting my first serious thread of my fab life.
After hearing people comment and say my profile is too long and too much do's and dont's. Is there anyway I could shorten it but without loosing the important informatin that's in it due to all the stupid messages I get which is why it's so long. Just helpful comments please. Thanks all in advance .
D
As a general rule i avoid any profile that says "you must/will" because it tells me everything i need to know about the profile
And its that your only out for yourself/selves and all those profiles go on about is what i must/will do for you....but then you never say what you can offer or do for the people you wanna meet"
So me saying that someone must have good hygiene is wrong? . Okay then lol. It should be common knowledge but believe it aint  . No I'm clearly not out for myself. As my profile shows that in the verifications. But then again they could be a lie . I'm not a performing monkey. I won't do anything past meet someone if we don't get along. And that's something I find can be very sexy thing to talk about via messaging or on the meet. Thanks though |
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"So here i am posting my first serious thread of my fab life.
After hearing people comment and say my profile is too long and too much do's and dont's. Is there anyway I could shorten it but without loosing the important informatin that's in it due to all the stupid messages I get which is why it's so long. Just helpful comments please. Thanks all in advance .
D
As a general rule i avoid any profile that says "you must/will" because it tells me everything i need to know about the profile
And its that your only out for yourself/selves and all those profiles go on about is what i must/will do for you....but then you never say what you can offer or do for the people you wanna meet"
On further inspection of your profile. I'm not trying to attract the same types of people that you've met. So our profiles and what we look will be very much different. So you've said what to actually just the type of people you wouldn't go for? |
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Did i say that? No
And "you must/will" profiles are a dimond a doson on here and i know that me and others out there see those words and stop reading because i know i personally have read so many of those war and peace profiles that go on about you must do this and you will do that
And they are all basically the same, so i personally see that and just go "nope" without reading it
Also i have never met anyone on here that wasnt hygenic...if your attracting those kinds of people and getting to the point of meeting them then maybe your selection process needs changing |
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"Did i say that? No
And "you must/will" profiles are a dimond a doson on here and i know that me and others out there see those words and stop reading because i know i personally have read so many of those war and peace profiles that go on about you must do this and you will do that
And they are all basically the same, so i personally see that and just go "nope" without reading it
Also i have never met anyone on here that wasnt hygenic...if your attracting those kinds of people and getting to the point of meeting them then maybe your selection process needs changing"
So what the hell are you babbling on about then lol. And those who said they'd stop reading like yourself aren't my intended audience so...
In hygiene. Neither have I,and nowhere did I mention I had but so I don't ever end up in that situation I added that as a rule too. Right I'm not sure what you're actually trying to do because there has been no help on your part from any of your posts and just seems like you want someone to go back and forth with. Oh as you can clearly see..my selection process *cough* is going well thank you. So thanks again for your no help posts |
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"Did i say that? No
And "you must/will" profiles are a dimond a doson on here and i know that me and others out there see those words and stop reading because i know i personally have read so many of those war and peace profiles that go on about you must do this and you will do that
And they are all basically the same, so i personally see that and just go "nope" without reading it
Also i have never met anyone on here that wasnt hygenic...if your attracting those kinds of people and getting to the point of meeting them then maybe your selection process needs changing
So what the hell are you babbling on about then lol. And those who said they'd stop reading like yourself aren't my intended audience so...
In hygiene. Neither have I,and nowhere did I mention I had but so I don't ever end up in that situation I added that as a rule too. Right I'm not sure what you're actually trying to do because there has been no help on your part from any of your posts and just seems like you want someone to go back and forth with. Oh as you can clearly see..my selection process *cough* is going well thank you. So thanks again for your no help posts "
Just a thought, but - do you think saying "only hygienic people..." decreases the risk of unhygienic people? If they're not hygienic, would they admit it? Even to themselves? Or maybe they'd just ensure they shower for you and wear clean clothes.
And that probably goes for other don'ts as well. Not all - some people are into bareback, others wouldn't take the risk of sleeping with someone who would take that risk; some people smoke, others feel sick being that close to someone who smokes. But other rules, I fear, have little practical purpose. |
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"Did i say that? No
And "you must/will" profiles are a dimond a doson on here and i know that me and others out there see those words and stop reading because i know i personally have read so many of those war and peace profiles that go on about you must do this and you will do that
And they are all basically the same, so i personally see that and just go "nope" without reading it
Also i have never met anyone on here that wasnt hygenic...if your attracting those kinds of people and getting to the point of meeting them then maybe your selection process needs changing
So what the hell are you babbling on about then lol. And those who said they'd stop reading like yourself aren't my intended audience so...
In hygiene. Neither have I,and nowhere did I mention I had but so I don't ever end up in that situation I added that as a rule too. Right I'm not sure what you're actually trying to do because there has been no help on your part from any of your posts and just seems like you want someone to go back and forth with. Oh as you can clearly see..my selection process *cough* is going well thank you. So thanks again for your no help posts
Just a thought, but - do you think saying "only hygienic people..." decreases the risk of unhygienic people? If they're not hygienic, would they admit it? Even to themselves? Or maybe they'd just ensure they shower for you and wear clean clothes.
And that probably goes for other don'ts as well. Not all - some people are into bareback, others wouldn't take the risk of sleeping with someone who would take that risk; some people smoke, others feel sick being that close to someone who smokes. But other rules, I fear, have little practical purpose. "
Well you answered you own question about hygienic  . If they're not But shower b4 we meet then the rule did it's purpose lmfao wow!.
The 2nd part makes likkle to no sense to me. Sorry. I'm not into bareback so that part has me confused even more ha. But thanks |
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