"With all the posts on profile advice ....I'm not adverse to a critique of mine  "
I know what you are trying to achieve with it, but it just doesn't read well. It feels contrived and rather bitty. If that makes sense.
I think it would work better with proper paragraphs and grammar. It currently reads more like a list.
Nice to see your face though 
Nita |
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By *exysuzi and Mr.SCouple
over a year ago
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No, he doesn't say he can't show his face. He is on about other profiles that say they can't show face because of jobs .... Easy to see how you thought that though. I had to read it twice xxxxx Suzi |
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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago
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"Paragraphs 
Photos are good as is the text and you've proved it by getting a meet so soon after joining. Don't mend what ain't broke. "
You will get different reactions from different people.
I think it is different and I like the substance. On the other hand, the grammatical construction is dreadful and that puts me off. It will not put everyone off but why not correct it - then you won't be putting anyone off. |
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