The total lack of punctuation, sentences, or anything makes the paragraph almost completely unreadable.
It took me 2 minutes to read something that would normally take about 15 seconds.
As a result, as soon as I saw that paragraph I would just click onto the next profile. |
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I don't want to come across as a grammar nazi but I found it quite difficult to understand your text because of the complete lack of any CAPITALS or punctuation marks. A few full stops (periods) and maybe a comma or two would really make it come across so much better.
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"The total lack of punctuation, sentences, or anything makes the paragraph almost completely unreadable.
It took me 2 minutes to read something that would normally take about 15 seconds.
As a result, as soon as I saw that paragraph I would just click onto the next profile."
In fact on the reading, it is complete gibberish: what does " where even just down the chat are even ...."
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"I don't want to come across as a grammar nazi but I found it quite difficult to understand your text because of the complete lack of any CAPITALS or punctuation marks. A few full stops (periods) and maybe a comma or two would really make it come across so much better.
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I'm glad it wasn't any longer or I'd have passed out (that's not the first time I've said that!)  |
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"Is the text less selfish and are the pics hot on our page is there any reason why we shouldn't swim lol we made a lot of up dates to our profile "
You made updates? What was it like before?
It read like a verse from the Jabberwocky, only it made less sense. My recommendation, for what it is worth, is to use sentences. Stream of conscientious has a place but I would leave that to James Joyce. |
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Looks like you've listened to advice and made changes.
This suggested that you're serious about enjoying a swinging lifestyle, that you're respectful, that you're not up you're own arse, that you're willing to listen to ideas and be open minded. All good qualities.
Good luck and happy swinging  |
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"Looks like you've listened to advice and made changes.
This suggested that you're serious about enjoying a swinging lifestyle, that you're respectful, that you're not up you're own arse, that you're willing to listen to ideas and be open minded. All good qualities.
Good luck and happy swinging "
Thank you  for all the help |
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