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By (user no longer on site) OP
over a year ago
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Hiya I can't believe I'm posting a thread like this. Just wondered if anyone would fancy giving me a bit of feedback. I've been on here before and have a few meets. But it doesn't seem to be happening this time round. |
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By *ollie_JCouple
over a year ago
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Difficult to read because of the lack of paragraphs.
But the content seems fine..
Move the first sentence towards the end, the first should try and sell yourself (thinking of that I am not sure ours does) |
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