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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago
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This is my opinion, I would copy and paste your text into Word or similar and get it checked over there. It's reads a little disjointed. Good otherwise though, except the age range thing. Would you meet a 99 year old? |
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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago
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This is my opinion, I would copy and paste your text into Word or similar and get it checked over there. It's reads a little disjointed. Good otherwise though, except the age range thing. Would you meet a 99 year old? |
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The sentences need to be sorted more than anything as you have put commas then started the line below, very confusing. The last sentence should be say not said. Overall, whilst it doesn't have a lot, its actually okay and you have had two verifications which is pretty good going for 7 months so it obviously works for you. Changing the profile, I have found, does attract people so maybe expand each sentence perhaps or adding whether you are interested in clubs, think about changing the age range, I mean would you really meet an 18 yr old or a 99 yr old, it can also come across as 'will shag anything any age as desperate'. You say cannot accommodate but nothing about why, people will jump to the conclusion that there is a significant other, it also puts a lot of people off a profile because they will have a criteria and if single guy is one of them, they would pass your profile by.
Good luck anyway, like I said the profile isn't too bad at all, maybe consider some more pictures ie a torso one and a bum picture |
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The layout of your profile looks like a poem with the first word of each line having a capital letter even if it's in the middle of a sentence - and because of that, it's quite difficult to read as it doesn't 'flow' very well and is a bit disjointed.
Your profile is your 'shop window' ... it's advertising YOU and should be balanced between what you're looking for and what you can offer.
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By (user no longer on site)
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"OP, why don't you refer to similar threads you have put up the past and act on the advice provided in them?
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Hmmmm.... is this a serial 'Look at me' thread then...? Poor show... 
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"OP, why don't you refer to similar threads you have put up the past and act on the advice provided in them?
Hmmmm.... is this a serial 'Look at me' thread then...? Poor show...
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Well, well - it would appear I was right.
Okay - now listen OP - a lot of people have taken a lot of time and trouble trying to help you over a large number of threads you have posted or contributed to, and it's about time you started listening to some of it!!!
You have good points to your profile and some less good. You also have a couple of bad points. The No 1 bad point for us is that you are claiming to be a single guy, but can't accom and have given no reason as to why. That would be a BIG no-no for us straight away.
Second, your profile looks like a Shakespeare sonnet, but not so, er, ... 'engaging'?? One of the above contributors has made a very good point. Write your profile in Word, spell check it, GRAMMAR check it (more important than spelling!!!) then copy and paste it into your profile. And while we're on the subject, unless you are going to propose shagging someone whilst wearing your snorkel, is your talent for that kind of watersports relevant to obtaining additional meets in the Swinging World..???? Hmmmm...??? No. So remove it.
And the age range thing is another thing that would put us off. It doesn't matter what your desired range is (that's your business) but - like ANYONE else on here - if you leave it at 18-99 it just tells us that you either couldn't be bothered or... you have not given it any proper consideration. Like someone has already said to you in this thread, do you really want to be shagging a 99 year old? You may well do, if that's your cup of tea, but I strongly doubt it. So give it some real thought - it will pay off in the long run.
Here endeth the sermon....
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Excellent points above. The key thing that jumps out to me is that you elaborate on what others can do for you, which clothing etc, but there's almost nothing, in comparison, about what you offer.
I do like guys in wet suits, but otherwise for most people, how you enjoy yourself in the water is a personal thing to you.
I haven't read your other posts, but if they're as numerous as people point out, then you'll become the fab version of spam if you keep it up, and be as unwanted as forum post diarrhea. |
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