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heavily re-written profile - please feel free to comment!
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By (user no longer on site) OP
over a year ago
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Hi all - following some really helpful responses to my request for feedback on my profile, I've re-written and put in a lot more detail. No doubt there's still loads to pick fault with though, so I'd be interested in any observations, if anyone fancies sparing a few minutes to give it a quick look?
thanks all xx |
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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago
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"I've read it and it seems fine to me, the pictures are nice you look great in the tree one, you've been truthful and stated what you have to offer  "
not sure your wife would regard your activity as "truthful"   |
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By *londeCazWoman
over a year ago
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I think it's just about the right length, not badly written at all and better than a heck of a lot on here
Now just get crafting some decent messages and see how you get on
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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago
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loving the pictures espically the one with the tree, but text is slightly too long takes a bit reading but as said before you are honest and that scores a lot of brownie points in my book   |
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I like it - reads well and I like the length/ amount of detail - much prefer a profile like yours to one a paragraph in length - personally, I like to find out enough to make me interested from a profile, not have to ask for the info |
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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago
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Hello Paragraphs one and two are great, paragraph three is a bit wordy and personally I think you can say much the same in about half the length. Paragraphs four and five I think just go on a bit, and I think paragraph six could just be a few words about your hobbies rather than an entire paragraph. You don't need to mention how educated and articulate you are because that shows in what you've already written. I also don't think you need to mention being married again, what you said at the start is fine and any more sounds like you feel the need to justify your life and that's a turn off to me |
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