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I'm thinking more pictures is a pretty obvious good shout.
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"Profile looks and sounds good tbh,but don't forget alot of people aren't meeting still, personally I wouldn't change anything,best of luck,and remember you unfortunately are just one fish in a very big sea, anyway,good luck" You raise a good point about people not meetings. Thanks for the kind words | |||
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"A functioning brain is a quality you find utmost attractive in others, not upmost. " Well. That's incredibly ironic. Thanks for pointing that one out  | |||
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"I love giving feedback like this. I do a bit of editing for a living so I'll give it a go. Your pictures I think could do work, men really overestimate how much women are turned on my big muscles and a penis in a photo. I find it actually helps to put more vanilla pics in, like you would on a dating site. Just cover your face with an emoji or something. You on a beach, or hiking? That kind of picture makes you approachable, and when your a strange man on the internet looking for people to fuck, you want to come across as trustworthy. Its fine to have the muscles and dick, but switch it up a bit! Your profile bio could use some work too, this site skews older, you want to sound mature, not childish. Say 'people' not 'Peeps'. You say " I think of myself as someone with a functioning brain. This is a quality I find the Utmost attractive in others." Now, I like intelligent conversation as much as anyone, but by saying this you are saying you think most people (potentially most women) don't have a brain. That's not attractive, its condescending. "You've probably just worked out that I'm a sarcastic bastard." Do people like this? Sounds like you are telling people you are annoying? In other ways your bio sounds unsure of yourself, a little rambley.... SO when you write "Pleasantries aside... I'm cool with meets beforehand. Cheeky coffee? Cheeky vimto? Cheeky 16" pizza? S'all good in this hood. It's a 2 way street, I'm keen to tick boxes for others, maybe try something you've always been curious about?" I would change that to: I'm happy to meet beforehand for coffee, drinks or food! I love helping people fulfil their fantasies - If you have something new you want to try, let me know and I'll see what I can do. Yeah, overall, you write a bit too much like a teen. You can say all the same things, but present them differently. More direct, confident, and to the point. " That's an interesting take on it. I'm on board with what you said about the pics, adding a few more of the casual variety sounds like a good plan. Your criticism of my bio is a bit more subjective I reckon. I realise the site skews older but I'm really not interested in people that are really uptight or too serious about life. With how you'd reword it you're taking the fun out of it. I don't want to sound older. It might work better with the majority but I'm not really aiming at the majority if that makes sense?
Thanks for the feedback nonetheless. Gave me a perspective I hadn't considered.
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Think it's just really quiet on here at the moment. Things are just opening up so people are going to be focused on seeing friends and family more than strangers off the web. But give it a few months  | |||
"I love giving feedback like this. I do a bit of editing for a living so I'll give it a go. Your pictures I think could do work, men really overestimate how much women are turned on my big muscles and a penis in a photo. I find it actually helps to put more vanilla pics in, like you would on a dating site. Just cover your face with an emoji or something. You on a beach, or hiking? That kind of picture makes you approachable, and when your a strange man on the internet looking for people to fuck, you want to come across as trustworthy. Its fine to have the muscles and dick, but switch it up a bit! Your profile bio could use some work too, this site skews older, you want to sound mature, not childish. Say 'people' not 'Peeps'. You say " I think of myself as someone with a functioning brain. This is a quality I find the Utmost attractive in others." Now, I like intelligent conversation as much as anyone, but by saying this you are saying you think most people (potentially most women) don't have a brain. That's not attractive, its condescending. "You've probably just worked out that I'm a sarcastic bastard." Do people like this? Sounds like you are telling people you are annoying? In other ways your bio sounds unsure of yourself, a little rambley.... SO when you write "Pleasantries aside... I'm cool with meets beforehand. Cheeky coffee? Cheeky vimto? Cheeky 16" pizza? S'all good in this hood. It's a 2 way street, I'm keen to tick boxes for others, maybe try something you've always been curious about?" I would change that to: I'm happy to meet beforehand for coffee, drinks or food! I love helping people fulfil their fantasies - If you have something new you want to try, let me know and I'll see what I can do. Yeah, overall, you write a bit too much like a teen. You can say all the same things, but present them differently. More direct, confident, and to the point. " This just proves you can't please everyone lol I actually really like OP's bio; it shows he's articulate and intelligent yet cheeky. The example bio you gave, while probably more appealing to an older demographic, seems a bit devoid of personality imo. I guess it all depends on who OP is trying to attract though  | |||
"I love giving feedback like this. I do a bit of editing for a living so I'll give it a go. Your pictures I think could do work, men really overestimate how much women are turned on my big muscles and a penis in a photo. I find it actually helps to put more vanilla pics in, like you would on a dating site. Just cover your face with an emoji or something. You on a beach, or hiking? That kind of picture makes you approachable, and when your a strange man on the internet looking for people to fuck, you want to come across as trustworthy. Its fine to have the muscles and dick, but switch it up a bit! Your profile bio could use some work too, this site skews older, you want to sound mature, not childish. Say 'people' not 'Peeps'. You say " I think of myself as someone with a functioning brain. This is a quality I find the Utmost attractive in others." Now, I like intelligent conversation as much as anyone, but by saying this you are saying you think most people (potentially most women) don't have a brain. That's not attractive, its condescending. "You've probably just worked out that I'm a sarcastic bastard." Do people like this? Sounds like you are telling people you are annoying? In other ways your bio sounds unsure of yourself, a little rambley.... SO when you write "Pleasantries aside... I'm cool with meets beforehand. Cheeky coffee? Cheeky vimto? Cheeky 16" pizza? S'all good in this hood. It's a 2 way street, I'm keen to tick boxes for others, maybe try something you've always been curious about?" I would change that to: I'm happy to meet beforehand for coffee, drinks or food! I love helping people fulfil their fantasies - If you have something new you want to try, let me know and I'll see what I can do. Yeah, overall, you write a bit too much like a teen. You can say all the same things, but present them differently. More direct, confident, and to the point. This just proves you can't please everyone lol I actually really like OP's bio; it shows he's articulate and intelligent yet cheeky. The example bio you gave, while probably more appealing to an older demographic, seems a bit devoid of personality imo. I guess it all depends on who OP is trying to attract though "Amen | |||
"I really like your profile, and your pics
Think it's just really quiet on here at the moment. Things are just opening up so people are going to be focused on seeing friends and family more than strangers off the web. But give it a few months "Thank you!
Funnily enough I've actually seen a bunch more interest in my profile recently vs a few months ago. I ain't complaining. Thanks for the kind words by the way
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"I smiled at the cheeky coffee.. cheeky vimto part - please don't change that and sound like a boring bastard rather than a cheeky one. And I like the bit about the doorways.... and the use of 'biblical' Hallelujah. Yeah I likes what I sees. (the pics are good too.. enough left to the imagination etc etc) Good luck." Thanks! I've come away from this feeling pretty confident. Biblical is in there for the benefit of the like minded hahaha | |||
"I love giving feedback like this. I do a bit of editing for a living so I'll give it a go. Your pictures I think could do work, men really overestimate how much women are turned on my big muscles and a penis in a photo. I find it actually helps to put more vanilla pics in, like you would on a dating site. Just cover your face with an emoji or something. You on a beach, or hiking? That kind of picture makes you approachable, and when your a strange man on the internet looking for people to fuck, you want to come across as trustworthy. Its fine to have the muscles and dick, but switch it up a bit! Your profile bio could use some work too, this site skews older, you want to sound mature, not childish. Say 'people' not 'Peeps'. You say " I think of myself as someone with a functioning brain. This is a quality I find the Utmost attractive in others." Now, I like intelligent conversation as much as anyone, but by saying this you are saying you think most people (potentially most women) don't have a brain. That's not attractive, its condescending. "You've probably just worked out that I'm a sarcastic bastard." Do people like this? Sounds like you are telling people you are annoying? In other ways your bio sounds unsure of yourself, a little rambley.... SO when you write "Pleasantries aside... I'm cool with meets beforehand. Cheeky coffee? Cheeky vimto? Cheeky 16" pizza? S'all good in this hood. It's a 2 way street, I'm keen to tick boxes for others, maybe try something you've always been curious about?" I would change that to: I'm happy to meet beforehand for coffee, drinks or food! I love helping people fulfil their fantasies - If you have something new you want to try, let me know and I'll see what I can do. Yeah, overall, you write a bit too much like a teen. You can say all the same things, but present them differently. More direct, confident, and to the point. " Agree, you’re clearly young and seem to believe in the ‘build a profile and they will come’ technique. If you really were a condescending, cocky kid you’ve nailed it | |||
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"I love giving feedback like this. I do a bit of editing for a living so I'll give it a go. Your pictures I think could do work, men really overestimate how much women are turned on my big muscles and a penis in a photo. I find it actually helps to put more vanilla pics in, like you would on a dating site. Just cover your face with an emoji or something. You on a beach, or hiking? That kind of picture makes you approachable, and when your a strange man on the internet looking for people to fuck, you want to come across as trustworthy. Its fine to have the muscles and dick, but switch it up a bit! Your profile bio could use some work too, this site skews older, you want to sound mature, not childish. Say 'people' not 'Peeps'. You say " I think of myself as someone with a functioning brain. This is a quality I find the Utmost attractive in others." Now, I like intelligent conversation as much as anyone, but by saying this you are saying you think most people (potentially most women) don't have a brain. That's not attractive, its condescending. "You've probably just worked out that I'm a sarcastic bastard." Do people like this? Sounds like you are telling people you are annoying? In other ways your bio sounds unsure of yourself, a little rambley.... SO when you write "Pleasantries aside... I'm cool with meets beforehand. Cheeky coffee? Cheeky vimto? Cheeky 16" pizza? S'all good in this hood. It's a 2 way street, I'm keen to tick boxes for others, maybe try something you've always been curious about?" I would change that to: I'm happy to meet beforehand for coffee, drinks or food! I love helping people fulfil their fantasies - If you have something new you want to try, let me know and I'll see what I can do. Yeah, overall, you write a bit too much like a teen. You can say all the same things, but present them differently. More direct, confident, and to the point. Agree, you’re clearly young and seem to believe in the ‘build a profile and they will come’ technique. If you really were a condescending, cocky kid you’ve nailed it "You've hit the nail on the head with that well renowned gandhi quote hahaha. It's mainly comedy, I'm not actually an asshole. Equally, the kinda people that'd find my bio funny are my kinda people hahaha | |||
"Ghandi btw. I’d meet you though because of the height "I've been reduced to a tall object hahaha | |||
"I smiled at the cheeky coffee.. cheeky vimto part - please don't change that and sound like a boring bastard rather than a cheeky one. And I like the bit about the doorways.... and the use of 'biblical' Hallelujah. Yeah I likes what I sees. (the pics are good too.. enough left to the imagination etc etc) Good luck." I fucking love your bio. That's some spicy shit  I'm guessing your niche is the kinda guy that knows their psychology? | |||
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"Comes across quite well Wish you the best "Thank you very much | |||
"I love giving feedback like this. I do a bit of editing for a living so I'll give it a go. Your pictures I think could do work, men really overestimate how much women are turned on my big muscles and a penis in a photo. I find it actually helps to put more vanilla pics in, like you would on a dating site. Just cover your face with an emoji or something. You on a beach, or hiking? That kind of picture makes you approachable, and when your a strange man on the internet looking for people to fuck, you want to come across as trustworthy. Its fine to have the muscles and dick, but switch it up a bit! Your profile bio could use some work too, this site skews older, you want to sound mature, not childish. Say 'people' not 'Peeps'. You say " I think of myself as someone with a functioning brain. This is a quality I find the Utmost attractive in others." Now, I like intelligent conversation as much as anyone, but by saying this you are saying you think most people (potentially most women) don't have a brain. That's not attractive, its condescending. "You've probably just worked out that I'm a sarcastic bastard." Do people like this? Sounds like you are telling people you are annoying? In other ways your bio sounds unsure of yourself, a little rambley.... SO when you write "Pleasantries aside... I'm cool with meets beforehand. Cheeky coffee? Cheeky vimto? Cheeky 16" pizza? S'all good in this hood. It's a 2 way street, I'm keen to tick boxes for others, maybe try something you've always been curious about?" I would change that to: I'm happy to meet beforehand for coffee, drinks or food! I love helping people fulfil their fantasies - If you have something new you want to try, let me know and I'll see what I can do. Yeah, overall, you write a bit too much like a teen. You can say all the same things, but present them differently. More direct, confident, and to the point. " Op,I wouldn't pay this post to much attention,I tried to read Thier profile,but fell asleep half way through | |||
"I love giving feedback like this. I do a bit of editing for a living so I'll give it a go. Your pictures I think could do work, men really overestimate how much women are turned on my big muscles and a penis in a photo. I find it actually helps to put more vanilla pics in, like you would on a dating site. Just cover your face with an emoji or something. You on a beach, or hiking? That kind of picture makes you approachable, and when your a strange man on the internet looking for people to fuck, you want to come across as trustworthy. Its fine to have the muscles and dick, but switch it up a bit! Your profile bio could use some work too, this site skews older, you want to sound mature, not childish. Say 'people' not 'Peeps'. You say " I think of myself as someone with a functioning brain. This is a quality I find the Utmost attractive in others." Now, I like intelligent conversation as much as anyone, but by saying this you are saying you think most people (potentially most women) don't have a brain. That's not attractive, its condescending. "You've probably just worked out that I'm a sarcastic bastard." Do people like this? Sounds like you are telling people you are annoying? In other ways your bio sounds unsure of yourself, a little rambley.... SO when you write "Pleasantries aside... I'm cool with meets beforehand. Cheeky coffee? Cheeky vimto? Cheeky 16" pizza? S'all good in this hood. It's a 2 way street, I'm keen to tick boxes for others, maybe try something you've always been curious about?" I would change that to: I'm happy to meet beforehand for coffee, drinks or food! I love helping people fulfil their fantasies - If you have something new you want to try, let me know and I'll see what I can do. Yeah, overall, you write a bit too much like a teen. You can say all the same things, but present them differently. More direct, confident, and to the point. Op,I wouldn't pay this post to much attention,I tried to read Thier profile,but fell asleep half way through" Savage! . Nah, to their credit there were some decent suggestions in there too. | |||
"Want some honest opinions please people .
I'm thinking more pictures is a pretty obvious good shout.
How do people think my bio reads? "Your pics have no effort and your age don't give me any indication you are experienced in anything especially since you seem to mention sub ... | |||
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"Want some honest opinions please people .
I'm thinking more pictures is a pretty obvious good shout.
How do people think my bio reads?
Your pics have no effort and your age don't give me any indication you are experienced in anything especially since you seem to mention sub ... "Each to their own. | |||
"Whilst not my cuppa I see it attracting the people that you want to attract and that's right for you I actually appreciate the way you handled yourself when you disagreed with the feedback from that other poster.... that shows maturity to me. Good luck "That's absolutely fair, cheers anyways . | |||
"Want some honest opinions please people .
I'm thinking more pictures is a pretty obvious good shout.
How do people think my bio reads? "I like it
Made me smile and shows personality, which is a bit of a rarity.
The only suggestion I have, would be to add more photos as and when, that are equally unique to you. | |||
"I smiled at the cheeky coffee.. cheeky vimto part - please don't change that and sound like a boring bastard rather than a cheeky one. And I like the bit about the doorways.... and the use of 'biblical' Hallelujah. Yeah I likes what I sees. (the pics are good too.. enough left to the imagination etc etc) Good luck. I fucking love your bio. That's some spicy shit I'm guessing your niche is the kinda guy that knows their psychology? "Thanks (brains and puns are my thing  ) | |||
"Want some honest opinions please people .
I'm thinking more pictures is a pretty obvious good shout.
How do people think my bio reads?
I like it
Made me smile and shows personality, which is a bit of a rarity.
The only suggestion I have, would be to add more photos as and when, that are equally unique to you."Thanks
I think that's fair criticism. They're not terribly personalised. Cheers | |||
"I smiled at the cheeky coffee.. cheeky vimto part - please don't change that and sound like a boring bastard rather than a cheeky one. And I like the bit about the doorways.... and the use of 'biblical' Hallelujah. Yeah I likes what I sees. (the pics are good too.. enough left to the imagination etc etc) Good luck. I fucking love your bio. That's some spicy shit I'm guessing your niche is the kinda guy that knows their psychology?
Thanks
(brains and puns are my thing )" excellent taste | |||
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"Why not colour photos ? Hate black and white ones " Each to their own again on that one 
Just like it | |||
"Why not colour photos ? Hate black and white ones " For the ( ( A R T ) ) | |||
"Why not colour photos ? Hate black and white ones " 
Just because you don't like black and white photos he shouldn't have them?
Thankfully, the lad has his own mind.
I rather like black and white photos myself. | |||
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"Your pics lack imagination. Most phones have self timers now so you can take pics without your phone in your hand. Good bio and you’ve come across well in the post but your pics aren’t selling you at all. Be more creative and show your personality "Yea I think the main takeaway from this is more personality in the pics. Cheers | |||
"This was a good read lol. I get why you asked and you dealt with the positive and negative feedback quite well. Yes somethings show your age, but your 23. I wish i could go back to my 23 year old body and mind. Lol. On this site. You wont meet 99.999% of people, but the 0.001% will meet you because your you. Everyone one on this is unique, be unique. " Wise words mate
Haters gonna hate. Doesn't phase me. | |||
"I’d meet you though because of the height
I've been reduced to a tall object hahaha "Not at all, you seem intelligent and lighthearted. But anyone's profile can be read differently by everyone that looks at it. I'm a gold digger to some, heightist to others. We red profiles, but a great first message is the real key | |||
"Why not colour photos ? Hate black and white ones " Are you hoping to meet him | |||
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