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By (user no longer on site) OP
over a year ago
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Hi all
can anyone give me any advise on how I can improve my profile is it too long? am I too honest
I am probably looking for the impossible on FAB, but as one of the genuinely single and honest men on here it’s getting even harder to not be grouped in with those with other agendas.
I would appreciate your thoughts |
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By *harAndBryCouple
over a year ago
Peterborough / Stamford |
I'd re-read it and check for spelling, capitals, etc. Bits of it are hard to read. Photos are a good mix and you seem genuine, though not really "stand out". It's more like a dating profile than a swinging one, but maybe you're looking for a life partner first and foremost.
If you weren't 100+ miles away we might visit
Bry (and Char) |
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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago
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It’s too wordy, I genuinely wouldn’t bother reading all of that.
So many men on here that I think bring succinct is def an advantage.
The bit about hold the door but slap him as pass is just shit unoriginal patter and I rolled my eyes.
Love the kilt tho and it’s obv just my opinion and only giving since you asked x |
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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago
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"Hi all
can anyone give me any advise on how I can improve my profile is it too long? am I too honest
I am probably looking for the impossible on FAB, but as one of the genuinely single and honest men on here it’s getting even harder to not be grouped in with those with other agendas.
I would appreciate your thoughts "
Ok... Total critique meant in the nicest and most constructive way.
Photo gallery:
what are you doing? You have a few really nice, well lit face pics (applause), you then have some really ropey ones showing the fact your sideburns need a trim and you’re a bit lacking in sleep. Body shots... too many knees in a kilt, yes we can see your tattoo, body shots which aren’t really that revealing. Honestly... streamline, take a few more and perhaps retake some of the body shots to be a bit more suggestive. Show yourself at your best... a few have potential!
Overview:
I got dumped last year (the fact you open with it kind of gives the impression you aren’t over it, you carry the baggage), delete that line, nobody is searching for a dumped guy.
“I’m not able to keep pace” - man who is down on himself is such a turn off... people won’t message saying poor you, they want attention grabbing positivity.
As the couple said earlier... it’s a bit like a dating ad...
My tip: humour, more fun, show the personality and don’t line list what you want... tell people about you, treat it more like a 60 second pitch and less like a set of requirements.
Conclusion... effort is high, impact is low
All said with sincerity and a hope you get banged loads if you apply the above advice
Mwah,
Charli x |
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By (user no longer on site)
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"Hi all
can anyone give me any advise on how I can improve my profile is it too long? am I too honest
I am probably looking for the impossible on FAB, but as one of the genuinely single and honest men on here it’s getting even harder to not be grouped in with those with other agendas.
I would appreciate your thoughts
Ok... Total critique meant in the nicest and most constructive way.
Photo gallery:
what are you doing? You have a few really nice, well lit face pics (applause), you then have some really ropey ones showing the fact your sideburns need a trim and you’re a bit lacking in sleep. Body shots... too many knees in a kilt, yes we can see your tattoo, body shots which aren’t really that revealing. Honestly... streamline, take a few more and perhaps retake some of the body shots to be a bit more suggestive. Show yourself at your best... a few have potential!
Overview:
I got dumped last year (the fact you open with it kind of gives the impression you aren’t over it, you carry the baggage), delete that line, nobody is searching for a dumped guy.
“I’m not able to keep pace” - man who is down on himself is such a turn off... people won’t message saying poor you, they want attention grabbing positivity.
As the couple said earlier... it’s a bit like a dating ad...
My tip: humour, more fun, show the personality and don’t line list what you want... tell people about you, treat it more like a 60 second pitch and less like a set of requirements.
Conclusion... effort is high, impact is low
All said with sincerity and a hope you get banged loads if you apply the above advice
Mwah,
Charli x"
Oh and display your veris!!! Other people’s words about you have a load more credibility x |
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