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By (user no longer on site) OP
over a year ago
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I wish...
I'm sat in a coffee shop reading some Charles Buksowki, specifically the book 'women'
I've got a coffee, and a pasta. I love this environment, calm, some light jazz in the background, clattering of this cup and that plate, conversation. Perfect.
Up ahead a waitress bends down to pick something up, my eyes flick and lock on.
The ass is rounded, a good hand full, the waitress must be a size 10/12. The ass is so peachy. She has an hour glass figure. You can tell if she bent over, that ass would demand respect. It would gently roll out from the body, producing a firm rounded piece of rear human.
I sipped my coffee, she looks back at me and clocks me looking at her. She bends down a little further then raises with haste, and walks behind the counter, not looking at me again.
Her eyes are BIG and brown, some people would call them blow job eyes. Eyes cannot give you a blow job. I would call them something along the lines of ;astounding.
She has a pony tail that hangs and bobs, her hair is dark ginger.
I cannot make out her name badge, but we'll call her 'ass girl' for now. Simple and affective.
She walks away from the counter and away from my table again, walking slower.
IS she doing this on purpose?! No.....surley not....
The ass wobbles left, right, up down, the trousers tighten around each cheek as the other lifts.
I want that ass.
i drink up and finish my chapter, leaving a few bits of pasta and a small tip.
As I leave she says thank you and winks.
First sexual SHORT SHORT story....
Should I continue?
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By (user no longer on site) OP
over a year ago
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With enough feedback I will continue, with far more detail! It will be great
I'm an ameture script writer, and trying to earn some money via writing, and I would love to eventually please every one through some erotic writing 
Ill wait for some more opinions and then continue, but this will be horribly long and drawn out! I LOVE the teasing factor, for days on end.   |
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By *waymanMan
over a year ago
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Nice effort.
The tense wobbles around a bit - are you sat in a coffee shop or sitting? Some of the spelling's a bit erratic as well.
However, there's a pretty clear effort to find a distinctive voice, and it has some tension too. |
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