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By *nique breed OP   Man 8 weeks ago

london

To make your story sound more appealing, we can focus on enhancing the language, pacing, and emotional depth, adding more sensuality and allure while keeping the raw intimacy. Here’s a refined version:

Picture this:

The room is dimly lit, the warm glow of lights casting soft shadows on the walls. Music hums quietly in the background, blending with the gentle sound of our breathing. In the middle of the wide, luxurious hotel room is an invitingly large bed, its silky sheets whispering promises of passion. I step closer to you, and as I do, the air between us shifts, thick with anticipation.

My lips find the delicate curve of your neck, placing slow, lingering kisses along your skin. My hands move to your shoulders, gently massaging, as I slip the straps of your dress down, revealing the beauty beneath. You make the dress come alive, I whisper, admiring how your body gives it meaning. Without you, it’s just fabric. The dress falls away, pooling at your feet, and my tongue traces a path over your neck, teasing you as my hands grip your body, firm yet tender. I can feel the heat building between us, my touch growing bolder as I reach your ear, nibbling softly, making my way to the sensitive skin below.

As the fabric of your dress slides down, I catch glimpses of the softness beneath, and I can’t help but marvel at your beauty—both inside and out. My imagination, already ignited from admiring you all night, runs wild, and soon you can feel me pressing against you. My growing hardness is unmistakable, warm and eager as it aligns between the curve of your perfect, firm cheeks.

I explore your body with my mouth, starting at your neck, while my hands wander, teasing and caressing in rhythm. When I pinch your nipples and trail my tongue up to your ear, your body responds, a subtle gasp escaping your lips. My fingers wrap gently around your throat, turning you toward me, guiding you with soft insistence. Just as we reach the edge of the bed, my lips find yours, our kiss deep and heated.

Gently, I push you onto the bed, my hands kneading your upper thighs, moving ever closer to the sweet warmth between your legs. I kiss my way down your body, stopping at your firm, perked nipples, teasing them with my tongue until they harden. I suckle them just long enough to hear your breath catch before continuing my journey, down to your belly button, and then back to your lips. Each kiss is a promise of what’s to come.

Slowly, I make my way down again, this time to the prize I’ve been yearning for. I kiss and tease, letting my mouth hover before finally sliding my tongue between your lips, tasting the wetness that’s been building. Your body trembles as I flick your clit with my tongue, my fingers slipping inside you, exploring deeper with every stroke.

My other hand roams up your body, returning to your nipples, teasing them as I work you with my mouth. You moan as I quicken my pace, feeling you lose control beneath me. And just when you’re on the edge, I rise, positioning myself between your legs, the tip of my cock grazing your entrance as I kiss you again, hard and full of hunger.

I slide in, slow at first, savoring the warmth of you as I lift your leg and tap your ass, teasing you further. As I push deeper, I find your clit with my thumb, rubbing it in time with each thrust. You grow wetter with every touch, and when you can’t hold back any longer, I pull out, diving back down to taste you again. You beg for more, and I oblige, my cock sliding back in as I lift both of your legs, pushing into you deeply, rhythmically, each thrust sending waves of pleasure through us both.

Your body clenches around me, signaling you’re close. I speed up, thrusting harder and deeper until I feel you tighten and let go, your climax triggering my own. My body erupts with yours, the sheets damp with our release, as we collapse in a breathless heap of satisfaction.

Part Two:

After a few moments of catching our breath, I roll you gently onto your stomach, my lips brushing the back of your neck. “Do you mind?” I whisper, feeling your nod. My hands glide over your skin, massaging your back, sliding like feathers down to your hips. I can’t resist grabbing your ass, feeling the firmness beneath my fingers.

I’m hard again, my cock throbbing at the thought of sliding into you once more. I lift your waist, planting a cheeky bite on your ass cheek as I line myself up, teasing you by holding back. You try to push against me, desperate to feel me inside, but I pull away, giving you a playful slap. “Wait,” I whisper in your ear. “It’ll be worth it.”

My fingers find your clit, pinching gently as my tongue teases the back of your neck, until I hear your soft moans, begging for more. Only then do I slowly push in, inch by inch, letting you savor the feeling. “Do you like it?” I ask, my voice thick with desire. Your answer is a moan, urging me deeper. I pull you up slightly, slapping your ass again as I begin to thrust, each movement deeper than the last.

I speed up, feeling your body jerk with each thrust, your breasts bouncing with every motion. My hand reaches around, gently pulling your hair as I kiss your lips from behind. I push deeper, harder, losing myself in the moment. Your wetness spills over, dripping down, and as we both approach the edge, I explode inside you, my climax mingling with yours in a final, breathtaking release.

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By *igharryMan 8 weeks ago

Manchester

Which ai did you use to inprove your original story? I swear chatgpt wont write about sex!

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By *onnoisseur100Man 8 weeks ago

Woking-ish

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By *nique breed OP   Man 7 weeks ago

london

Anyone fancy a read

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