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First attempt at writing- what do you think?
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By (user no longer on site) OP
over a year ago
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So this was written for a delicious man on here. He knows who he is. Hope the rest of you like 
Deep
My favourite place to be is on your lap impaled on your cock watching you suck my nipples as I massage the nape of your neck and shoulders with my hands.
The thought of being filled by you, to have you inside me as we kiss and talk is so sexy as it indicates a level of intimacy and comfort in each other’s company that is perfect. The ability to stop you in conversation by just clenching my muscles or by devouring your mouth intoxicates me. How your eyes move from mine to my mouth to my breasts and then how you spread my legs further apart, open my lips with one hand while lifting my arse cheeks with the other to indicate your desire to watch your proud hard cock appear and disappear into me makes my mind buzz with lust. Of course I oblige you, entranced by how you’re watching and the raw desire evident on your face, so turned on by your reaction to our actions.
I reluctantly get off your lap- immediately missing the feel of you in me- take your hand and walk over to the bed. I ask you to lie on your back, head propped up by pillows so you can comfortably watch me and straddle your thighs facing away from you. Spreading my arse cheeks while leaning forward revealing the most intimate part of my body to you as I position myself on the tip of your member and slowly move down until the whole length of your shaft is in me. You groan in delight as I lean forwards and place my hands on your knees and begin to ride you reverse cow girl style.
Your hands grab my cheeks needing to feel my soft skin and to spread them for a better view and I shudder as I feel your finger slip into my arse. The orgasm hits me violently but I don’t stop my rhythm so my juices run down your cock making it glisten and slippery. Your hands guide me off you as we change positions and now I’m lying on my back with you between my legs. You place my legs over your shoulders and without warning thrust deep and hard into my hot, wet pussy. “Fuck!” I exclaim as you gather momentum and I watch you looking at my mouth. I can’t help licking my lips as I raise my hands above my head to grab the headboard to help me meet your thrusts with those of my own.
I see you look at my hard, brown nipples as you tell me you’re going to cum and the thought of that makes me groan with desire again. As you start to orgasm deep inside me, I can feel you spasm and that causes me to cum again too, responding to your body and delighting in the thought that we’ll be repeating this again soon...  |
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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago
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Immensely talented writing !
Highly arousing, intense and descriptive.
Oozes feminine power, confidence and sexuality.....so vivid, it's like being there.
Easily the most captivating and classy piece of erotica I've read on here ! |
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By (user no longer on site) OP
over a year ago
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"Very arousing, seduction of the mind and then the body - you’re certainly got both aspects covered! Plus your fabulous pictures of course!  "
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By (user no longer on site) OP
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"Immensely talented writing !
Highly arousing, intense and descriptive.
Oozes feminine power, confidence and sexuality.....so vivid, it's like being there.
Easily the most captivating and classy piece of erotica I've read on here !"
Sounds like you have the words to seduce too Thank you. |
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By (user no longer on site) OP
over a year ago
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"Super hot, from a super hot lady.
Well written and fires an imagination.....
All can say is that's one lucky guy!
1000/10
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Oh thank you beautiful. Actually I think I’m the lucky one |
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By *eliWoman
over a year ago
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I feel like I've now read something I didn't ever want to know about you.
Being serious, I enjoyed it a lot. I liked the voice, the pacing, the clear delight you take in describing carnal pleasures. Very hot and easy to get into.
P.S You'll now have to give me reverse cowgirl tips.
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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago
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"Super hot, from a super hot lady.
Well written and fires an imagination.....
All can say is that's one lucky guy!
1000/10
Oh thank you beautiful. Actually I think I’m the lucky one "
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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago
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Hi,
It is a lovely piece of writing which creates an erotic vignette.
From a writing technique point of view some of the sentences could be broken down into two or more shorter ones.
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Lovely to hear experiences from a woman’s perspective - bit of give and take, all in the moment!! Keep writing x
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