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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago
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I would rewrite it, using complete sentences and share a bit more of what you’re looking for.
It reads confusingly without sentences, and when I mentally insert punctuation, it reads a bit aggressively to me.
It’s great you aren’t a sissy and you want to meet women who are well presented, but the way you’ve worded it sounds a bit weird. |
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"No!
Don't change it.
It's perfect.
Tells me everything I need to know... And that I wouldn't meet you
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This  make sure the ‘sissy’ remark stays in, I truly hope your Profile and general attitude gets you all the luck you deserve. |
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By (user no longer on site) OP
over a year ago
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Is it really that bad... Jesus, better get it on the mend haha I’m not one for selling myself as you can clearly tell, thanks for the feedback tho guys it’s much appreciated and very helpful so thanks. |
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By *emini ManMan
over a year ago
There and to the left a bit |
And breath....which is what I just did after reading that without any punctuation to speak of.
As others have said OP the "no men" thing is a bit ranty and actually pretty insulting - just block men from messaging you, problem solved
Other than that there really is not a lot to go on - if you're happy with that and think it will work, then stick to what you have - if not give some thought to how to get some personality and positivity across, tell people a little about you, what you think you can offer and what you are looking for. |
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"OP what makes you a ‘proper man’ compared to the others?
Oh. Eww. Yuck.
Middle "leg" is a 'proper' isn't it?
To me a man is someone who identifies as a man. Maybe is 15 or over. "
Monkey is a man ... monkey man  |
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By (user no longer on site) OP
over a year ago
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"No!
Don't change it.
It's perfect.
Tells me everything I need to know... And that I wouldn't meet you
Ouch  "
Don’t think I’ll be on her Christmas card list then do you haha |
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By (user no longer on site) OP
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"No!
Don't change it.
It's perfect.
Tells me everything I need to know... And that I wouldn't meet you
Ouch
Don’t think I’ll be on her Christmas card list then do you haha
Her block list maybe "
Ano bleeding hell, she only read my profile anyone would of thought I’d of insulted her haha but any feedback is good feedback so I’ll take it and work with it. |
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"No!
Don't change it.
It's perfect.
Tells me everything I need to know... And that I wouldn't meet you
Ouch
Don’t think I’ll be on her Christmas card list then do you haha
Her block list maybe
Ano bleeding hell, she only read my profile anyone would of thought I’d of insulted her haha but any feedback is good feedback so I’ll take it and work with it. "
Some people are of the school that giving profile advice allows people to hide who they really are. Therefore it shouldn't be given, no matter how dire a profile is.
I'm not of that school, although the advice I give has changed with that in mind. |
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"No!
Don't change it.
It's perfect.
Tells me everything I need to know... And that I wouldn't meet you
Ouch
Don’t think I’ll be on her Christmas card list then do you haha
Her block list maybe
Ano bleeding hell, she only read my profile anyone would of thought I’d of insulted her haha but any feedback is good feedback so I’ll take it and work with it. "
Incidentally, better text ... but if I may be so bold, you need a hook .. something that will very people wanting to know more about you that isn't said in the text ... you need to stand out from a lot of men on here saying much the same thing as you ... to try and help you more |
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By (user no longer on site) OP
over a year ago
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"No!
Don't change it.
It's perfect.
Tells me everything I need to know... And that I wouldn't meet you
Ouch
Don’t think I’ll be on her Christmas card list then do you haha
Her block list maybe
Ano bleeding hell, she only read my profile anyone would of thought I’d of insulted her haha but any feedback is good feedback so I’ll take it and work with it.
Incidentally, better text ... but if I may be so bold, you need a hook .. something that will very people wanting to know more about you that isn't said in the text ... you need to stand out from a lot of men on here saying much the same thing as you ... to try and help you more "
I done another forum on that topic last night called “newbies”
It’s a funny thing how you need a hook just to become more approachable.
Someone commented on there what if you don’t want to clarify your verifications? You still get treated as a “newbie”
It’s like the chicken /egg conundrum haha. |
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By (user no longer on site) OP
over a year ago
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"So OP, what makes you a proper man?"
I’m a man’s man, wouldn’t most men like to think of themselves as a proper man?
Maybe people have different perspectives of the meaning proper man, it’s just a figure of speech. |
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By (user no longer on site)
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"So OP, what makes you a proper man?
I’m a man’s man, wouldn’t most men like to think of themselves as a proper man?
Maybe people have different perspectives of the meaning proper man, it’s just a figure of speech. "
But in your profile it’s implied you’re a proper man because you’re straight, not a ‘sissy’
Which just seems offensive to me
And I’m not sure - it depends what being a ‘proper man’ entails. Saying you’re a ‘man’s man’ isn’t really saying anything imo |
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By (user no longer on site) OP
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"So OP, what makes you a proper man?
I’m a man’s man, wouldn’t most men like to think of themselves as a proper man?
Maybe people have different perspectives of the meaning proper man, it’s just a figure of speech.
But in your profile it’s implied you’re a proper man because you’re straight, not a ‘sissy’
Which just seems offensive to me
And I’m not sure - it depends what being a ‘proper man’ entails. Saying you’re a ‘man’s man’ isn’t really saying anything imo "
Well maybe you’d have to be a man to understand what a mans man entails then,
some people use the word femboy and terms like that where as I’m very much the opposite and that’s what I mean by mans man,
Doesn’t mean I have anything against anyone or anything like that or I mean to offend anyone, it’s just the word I chose to use,
Maybe your just taking it a bit too far on the fact a man likes to call himself a proper man,
Where’s the harm in that? |
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By (user no longer on site)
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"So OP, what makes you a proper man?
I’m a man’s man, wouldn’t most men like to think of themselves as a proper man?
Maybe people have different perspectives of the meaning proper man, it’s just a figure of speech.
But in your profile it’s implied you’re a proper man because you’re straight, not a ‘sissy’
Which just seems offensive to me
And I’m not sure - it depends what being a ‘proper man’ entails. Saying you’re a ‘man’s man’ isn’t really saying anything imo
Well maybe you’d have to be a man to understand what a mans man entails then,
some people use the word femboy and terms like that where as I’m very much the opposite and that’s what I mean by mans man,
Doesn’t mean I have anything against anyone or anything like that or I mean to offend anyone, it’s just the word I chose to use,
Maybe your just taking it a bit too far on the fact a man likes to call himself a proper man,
Where’s the harm in that? "
I aspire to be a proper man. If only I was. |
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By (user no longer on site) OP
over a year ago
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"I always thought the notion of a "Man's man" was an oxymoron.
The kind of man another man is attracted to is basically a gay one."
So what you saying I’m contradicting myself?
A man’s man does not mean a man who is attracted to another man, that’s the way your looking at it and other people will have a different take on it aswell,
Basically what I meant was I’m a manly man, not that I’m gay haha. |
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"So OP, what makes you a proper man?
I’m a man’s man, wouldn’t most men like to think of themselves as a proper man?
Maybe people have different perspectives of the meaning proper man, it’s just a figure of speech. "
It's one that implies other men are lesser or inferior, and it comes across poorly. |
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"I always thought the notion of a "Man's man" was an oxymoron.
The kind of man another man is attracted to is basically a gay one.
So what you saying I’m contradicting myself?
A man’s man does not mean a man who is attracted to another man, that’s the way your looking at it and other people will have a different take on it aswell,
Basically what I meant was I’m a manly man, not that I’m gay haha. "
So can you be both?
Just wanna make sure I understand |
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"I always thought the notion of a "Man's man" was an oxymoron.
The kind of man another man is attracted to is basically a gay one.
So what you saying I’m contradicting myself?
A man’s man does not mean a man who is attracted to another man, that’s the way your looking at it and other people will have a different take on it aswell,
Basically what I meant was I’m a manly man, not that I’m gay haha. "
But you say this by putting yourself down as straight |
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By (user no longer on site) OP
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"I always thought the notion of a "Man's man" was an oxymoron.
The kind of man another man is attracted to is basically a gay one.
So what you saying I’m contradicting myself?
A man’s man does not mean a man who is attracted to another man, that’s the way your looking at it and other people will have a different take on it aswell,
Basically what I meant was I’m a manly man, not that I’m gay haha.
So can you be both?
Just wanna make sure I understand "
That all depends on the individual I’d say,
what type of person they are and what personality they have,
Everybody is different. |
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"I always thought the notion of a "Man's man" was an oxymoron.
The kind of man another man is attracted to is basically a gay one.
So what you saying I’m contradicting myself?
A man’s man does not mean a man who is attracted to another man, that’s the way your looking at it and other people will have a different take on it aswell,
Basically what I meant was I’m a manly man, not that I’m gay haha.
But you say this by putting yourself down as straight "
Because I am straight |
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"I always thought the notion of a "Man's man" was an oxymoron.
The kind of man another man is attracted to is basically a gay one.
So what you saying I’m contradicting myself?
A man’s man does not mean a man who is attracted to another man, that’s the way your looking at it and other people will have a different take on it aswell,
Basically what I meant was I’m a manly man, not that I’m gay haha.
But you say this by putting yourself down as straight "
Have you followed everything that as been said? |
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"I always thought the notion of a "Man's man" was an oxymoron.
The kind of man another man is attracted to is basically a gay one.
So what you saying I’m contradicting myself?
A man’s man does not mean a man who is attracted to another man, that’s the way your looking at it and other people will have a different take on it aswell,
Basically what I meant was I’m a manly man, not that I’m gay haha.
But you say this by putting yourself down as straight
Have you followed everything that as been said? "
I ave
I shall walk away at this point ... ultimately it's your profile ...
But many people have given you some useful pointers here ... good luck with Fab |
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"I always thought the notion of a "Man's man" was an oxymoron.
The kind of man another man is attracted to is basically a gay one.
So what you saying I’m contradicting myself?
A man’s man does not mean a man who is attracted to another man, that’s the way your looking at it and other people will have a different take on it aswell,
Basically what I meant was I’m a manly man, not that I’m gay haha.
But you say this by putting yourself down as straight
Have you followed everything that as been said?
I ave
I shall walk away at this point ... ultimately it's your profile ...
But many people have given you some useful pointers here ... good luck with Fab"
Yes I no and it’s much appreciated aswell, i have took it on board and applied it to my profile, I just didn’t want people to think I came across as something I’m not, so thank you for all your feedback good and bad it all helps and I’m great full of it. |
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"I always thought the notion of a "Man's man" was an oxymoron.
The kind of man another man is attracted to is basically a gay one.
So what you saying I’m contradicting myself?
A man’s man does not mean a man who is attracted to another man, that’s the way your looking at it and other people will have a different take on it aswell,
Basically what I meant was I’m a manly man, not that I’m gay haha.
But you say this by putting yourself down as straight
Have you followed everything that as been said?
I ave
I shall walk away at this point ... ultimately it's your profile ...
But many people have given you some useful pointers here ... good luck with Fab
Yes I no and it’s much appreciated aswell, i have took it on board and applied it to my profile, I just didn’t want people to think I came across as something I’m not, so thank you for all your feedback good and bad it all helps and I’m great full of it. "
Good to see you took action on the feedback- many don’t. |
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"I always thought the notion of a "Man's man" was an oxymoron.
The kind of man another man is attracted to is basically a gay one.
So what you saying I’m contradicting myself?
A man’s man does not mean a man who is attracted to another man, that’s the way your looking at it and other people will have a different take on it aswell,
Basically what I meant was I’m a manly man, not that I’m gay haha.
But you say this by putting yourself down as straight
Have you followed everything that as been said?
I ave
I shall walk away at this point ... ultimately it's your profile ...
But many people have given you some useful pointers here ... good luck with Fab
Yes I no and it’s much appreciated aswell, i have took it on board and applied it to my profile, I just didn’t want people to think I came across as something I’m not, so thank you for all your feedback good and bad it all helps and I’m great full of it.
Good to see you took action on the feedback- many don’t."
Thank you |
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