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Couples Profile Critique 3

By (user no longer on site) OP over a year ago

If you saw the first couple of threads then you know what this is about. Please don't ask if you don't want an honest opinion.

It's simply an opportunity for couples to have some unbiased feedback on how their profiles present themselves from the perspective of singles on here.

For the brave couples amongst you, say that you're in and us singles will mark your profiles out of ten.

(Hopefully us singles will be honest and keep it nice).

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By *emini ManMan over a year ago

There and to the left a bit

Waits patiently for the first victi...I mean candidates

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

Well, took all your advice ( got rid of duplication etc).

We think it's better now, thanks.

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By *emini ManMan over a year ago

There and to the left a bit

"Well, took all your advice ( got rid of duplication etc).

We think it's better now, thanks. "

I didn't get a chance to review it last time round - but general comments are it looks good and reads well. Only comments I'd have are you need to move the bracketed (very) to before the word "long". You mention a preference for single guys to be Bi but Mr is listed as Straight - so you mightbwant to change that. Perhaps add some pics with both of you together that are just straight body shots?

Overall a good profile - gets a solid 7.5/10 from me

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

Changed.

The only reason I had straight on there was when I changed it last time to bi our messages went from about six to ten a week to none.

It was like getting the kiss of death.

But point noted and changed.

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By *emini ManMan over a year ago

There and to the left a bit

"Changed.

The only reason I had straight on there was when I changed it last time to bi our messages went from about six to ten a week to none.

It was like getting the kiss of death.

But point noted and changed. "

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By *illyjohnyCouple over a year ago

brighton

Go on then tell us ?

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By *emini ManMan over a year ago

There and to the left a bit

"Go on then tell us ? "

jillyjohnny - A general comment is that your profile blurb would benefit from being broken up a little bit more to make reading it easier. It currently comes across as a jumble of words that's possibly been added to as you've gone along.

I'd remove the "Updated to try to stop wasting time" line as it's the blurb that follows it that will hopefully stop the timewasting. Would then move the more negative bit from "We are now looking to meet..." to "...all you have done is wasted our time" to later in your blurb, and have it starting from the "We are a married couple..." line...that's the more positive bit that tells the reader who you are and what you're looking for.

You say you'll meet Bi/Bi-Curious couples but will only play straight, which is fine of course. You then later say you won't meet Bi/Bi-Curious single guys at all, just wondering why the distinction, what if a Bi/Bi-Curious guy was happy to play straight?

Your pics fall into the classic couple profile trap of lots of Mrs, but none of Mr apart from maybe a cock pic - so add some of Mr and perhaps some of you together.

Overall gets a 6/10 from me, but could be easily changed to make it better.

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By *illyjohnyCouple over a year ago

brighton

"Go on then tell us ?

Your pics fall into the classic couple profile trap of lots of Mrs, but none of Mr apart from maybe a cock pic - so add some of Mr and perhaps some of you together.

Overall gets a 6/10 from me, but could be easily changed to make it better.

Thank you very much a job for Sunday afternoon nice of you to take the time and get feed back

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By *ade_of_StarsCouple over a year ago

Whitburn

Crit us. Crit us hard x

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By *emini ManMan over a year ago

There and to the left a bit

"Crit us. Crit us hard x"

Made Of Stars: Don't need to be (too) hard as it's a very good profile, well written, articulate and lays out clearly who you are, what you are about and what you are looking for. Couple of things that would make it better - you mention twice about single men, in the first reference you say you don't meet them through this site, but later say it's unlikely you will, so update to remove the least relevant reference.

Your preference is obviously BDSM/kink and that's great and very clear, but you state you are "curious" about the swinging world, does that mean you are open to more vanilla non-kink play? If so you might want to clarify that a little more.

You may also want to consider changing the word slut as reference to Starlyte - know that's part of your dynamic, and totally respect that but it may put some people off, especially if you are open to non-kink play.

Great set of pics that do include both of you, although could possibly benefit from more of Him or you both together. I'd also consider moving the ones where Starlyte is "labelled" to private, again know and respect that is part of your dynamic but it may put off others who don't play that way, even in the kink world. That is however your choice entirely and just an observation.

Overall gets a solid 7.5/10 from me and would easily be an 8 or 8.5 with some fairly minor tweaks

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

go for it x

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By (user no longer on site) OP over a year ago

"Crit us. Crit us hard x"

Made of stars

I agree with much of what Gemini says but for me I have to wonder why you have the first paragraph at all. You've already blocked single guys so it just seems unnecessary and doesn't start your profile well. I'd move the second paragraph to the bottom. These changes would make it an 8/10 for me.

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By *emini ManMan over a year ago

There and to the left a bit

"go for it x"

coupleforfuntimes2017: A quick review as I need to get moving, but am sure someone will be along with more detail soon. To be honest it all reads a little bit ranty about what you do/don't want - perhaps lighten it a little and try and inject some of your personality into it.

Pics are good although could be enhanced by a few of you together and maybe some more body shots of Mr, especially as you're looking for bi guys.

Overall a 5.5/10 but could easily be higher with a more friendly approach.

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By *ink Panther.Woman over a year ago

Preston

"Changed.

The only reason I had straight on there was when I changed it last time to bi our messages went from about six to ten a week to none.

It was like getting the kiss of death.

But point noted and changed. "

I get that, bi or bi-curious men are a turn off for me, so clearly I'm not on my own x

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By *onny-n-clydeCouple over a year ago

cwmbran,

We'd like a critique please x

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

"go for it x

Pics are good although could be enhanced by a few of you together and maybe some more body shots of Mr, especially as you're looking for bi guys.

Overall a 5.5/10 but could easily be higher with a more friendly approach.

I understand the ranty bit and will inject some personality in it, when we had a posative profile we got inundated by awful people! we do have alot alot of friends only pictures that provide this x

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By (user no longer on site) OP over a year ago

"go for it x"

Couple for fun times

Good to see pictures of you both, maybe consider adding some of you together and reduce the close ups. I find the written part of your profile to be unwelcoming, rulesy and dominated by what you don't want people to do. It is negative. It doesn't start off too bad but deteriorates. I'd rewrite it 5/10.

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

"go for it x

Couple for fun times

Will have a change of pictures later, and re rhink the write up thank you x

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By (user no longer on site) OP over a year ago

"We'd like a critique please x"

Bonny and Clyde

Good pictures of you both and a very good start and end to your profile. For me what is a very good profile is spoilt by the mid 'how to pissed us off and get blocked section', is it really necessary? I can only assume that you've got fed up at some point with certain messages and added it but it seems so out of place with what is otherwise definitely one of the better profiles. Maybe consider using filters and rewording it? Without the midsection it's right up there with the top profiles, with it its 7/10 at best.

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By *onny-n-clydeCouple over a year ago

cwmbran,

"We'd like a critique please x

Bonny and Clyde

Great feedback will take it on board thanks x

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By *exysuzi and Mr.SCouple over a year ago

CONISTON .Stoke Suburbia. Staffs. BARMOUTH. The Lakes (Monthly)

You can critique ours if you want. However it works for us as it is. And we are adding, taking away regulary, as our journey progresses. Xxxxx Suzi

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By *alandNitaCouple over a year ago

Scunthorpe

Ok I doki... We'd love to know what all you fabulous guys'n'gals think of our profile.

Cal

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By (user no longer on site) OP over a year ago

"You can critique ours if you want. However it works for us as it is. And we are adding, taking away regulary, as our journey progresses. Xxxxx Suzi "

I like it. Good pictures of you both so that people can form an opinion on attraction. Before I started reading the descriptive I thought it looked too long, but it's such a positive pleasant and engaging read, I wouldn't change it. My only criticism is the very last sentence, do you need it? It ends a very good profile on a low point, get rid. 8.5/10 well done.

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

Gemini Man, your profile page is a novel !! Anymore than a page, we don't bother reading the profile.

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By (user no longer on site) OP over a year ago

"Ok I doki... We'd love to know what all you fabulous guys'n'gals think of our profile.

Cal"

Very good indeed. Informative, welcoming positive, good mix of pictures presenting you both as a couple and succinct. As I've mentioned before, I don't give 9's out but this goes into the bracket with a number of the other profiles I've looked at through the 3 threads as being very close. Solid 8.5/10.

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By *exysuzi and Mr.SCouple over a year ago

CONISTON .Stoke Suburbia. Staffs. BARMOUTH. The Lakes (Monthly)

Thanks hun. Yeh may just loose the NB part, it doesn't work anyway lol.

xxxx Suzi

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By (user no longer on site) OP over a year ago

"Gemini Man, your profile page is a novel !! Anymore than a page, we don't bother reading the profile."

Thank you for the observation but respectfully we are trying to keep this thread to a couples critique.

If we start critiquing singles then it loses what it's about.

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By *alandNitaCouple over a year ago

Scunthorpe

"Ok I doki... We'd love to know what all you fabulous guys'n'gals think of our profile.

Cal

Thanks for your kind words, it's nice to know we're doing ok.

Cal

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By *mojeeCouple over a year ago

Dunfermline

Go on let's see how badly we are doing

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By *emini ManMan over a year ago

There and to the left a bit

"Go on let's see how badly we are doing "

Emojee: As a general observation it looks like you've added to your profile as you've gone along and thought of new things to add, as there's a few duplications (e.g. mentioning Em playing on her own, and looking for single men) so you might want to re-write. It also comes across quite negatively from the start with lots of do's and don'ts - understand why but there's ways to put it across what you expect in a positive way.

I'd move the paragraph that starts "We are a good looking couple...." and the next two paragraphs to open your profile blurb, and perhaps add some more to follow that telling the reader more about you and what you are looking for. Then follow up with the do's and don'ts if you really feel you need them, but as mentioned above try and re-word in a positive fashion.

One other point, you mention no gay guys, which is unnecessary as can't imagine gay guys would contact a couples profile wherevone of you is a female.

Pics are good and include both of you, but maybe give some consideration to a few non-action shots thst show off your bodies to enhance your collection.

Overall a solid 6/10 from me but would be higher if you lost the negative tones.

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

updated hopefully it reads a little better.. however we're rather happy with our profile

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By *emini ManMan over a year ago

There and to the left a bit

"updated hopefully it reads a little better.. however we're rather happy with our profile

Like what you've done and certainy reads a lot lighter now. Hope it works for you and attracts more attention

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By *ubSirVient-DefinitionCouple over a year ago

dukinfield

We're in!

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By *emini ManMan over a year ago

There and to the left a bit

"We're in! "

SubSirVient-Definition: Your profile blurb is actually pretty good, although a few suggestions for what could make it even better: Your opening line states you're looking for a fem (which suggests single female) but you then go on to talk about meeting couples, so you might want to re-word that slightly to cover all combinations you're looking for. There are a few places where you write referring to "me" and "I" about yourselves, perhaps change that to "we" to give more of a sense of a couple, whuch is what you are after all.

You state "We love shibari and BDSM so should you like to join in, this would be advantageous." which is great but may deter some as it could suggest it's actually what you're looking for - perhaps re-word it to something like "We love shibari and BDSM so should you like to join in with that side of our play it would be great, however it's not essential, so if it's not for you that would be respected."

Where your profile really lets you down is your pictures, the shibari ones are good, but I'm afraid your other ones just aren't overly appealing. The 28th January one I've looked at a few times now and apart from a hand still haven't quite worked out what it is. Of the 19th December non-shibari ones, I'd either remove them all or possibly just keep the middle one. Try taking some pics that show both your bodies off a little, have a few of you together as well.

Overall currently gets a 6/10 from me, but with better pics and a few tweaks to the profile blurb could be so much higher

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By *ubSirVient-DefinitionCouple over a year ago

dukinfield

will take this on board!!

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By (user no longer on site) OP over a year ago

Still getting requests via PM. Please post them to the thread instead so that other singles have the opportunity to give you their feedback. Thanks.

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By (user no longer on site) OP over a year ago

Still getting PM requests. Please use the thread.

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

We are in

Kinky

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By *ud and BryanCouple over a year ago

Boston, Lincolnshire

We're in too

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By *emini ManMan over a year ago

There and to the left a bit

"We are in

Kinky

Signing back in for more

Noiretblanc2017: Exquisitely written profile blurb that is very clear and lays out exactly who you are and what you are looking for. Where your profile is lacking IMHO is a lack of pictures, that aren't cock pics, of MasterBlack (maybe post some body shots?), and perhaps some different ones of Kinky (kudos for being brave enough to post face pics though

Overall gets an 8/10 from me

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

Ok, do your worst/best depending on what you guys think x

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

We are in x

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

Love a bit of feedback

H x

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

Feedback always helps

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

Great profile great pics very sexy couple

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By *emini ManMan over a year ago

There and to the left a bit

"We're in too"

Pud and Bryan: A good well put together profile that clearly tells the reader who you are and what you are looking for, and gets across a little of your personalities. Good fun pics, could benefit from a few more of Mr, to balance out all the pics of Mrs.

Overall a good solid 8/10 from me

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

"Feedback always helps "

Some pics of him and you both together would be good. The only criticism Id say is your profile is clearly written by Mr and it comes across that this is lead by him rather than a joint venture? If Mrs is shy thats cool but Id maybe portray it a bit more like Shes into it rather than unsure. Maybe be clearer on what Youre specifically looking to do? X

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By *ud and BryanCouple over a year ago

Boston, Lincolnshire

"We're in too

Overall a good solid 8/10 from me

Great thank you, we'll have to work on getting more pics of Dave to put on.

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

"Love a bit of feedback

H x"

Woo how pics of you both! Great profile, very clear. My only cricism is the "put....in the subject" its a pet hate of mine! If Im going to the effort of sending a first message surely I shouldn't have to jump through hoops too?

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

Critique away but please be gentle

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By *emini ManMan over a year ago

There and to the left a bit

"Ok, do your worst/best depending on what you guys think x"

kandl74: Great profile that's clear, concise and leaves the reader in no doubt as to the type of couple you are , and the type of people you're looking for. A great set of pics too, and nice to see some of Mr - however would be good to see some new ones of him as the most recent are over a year old.

Overall gets a solid 8.5/10 from me

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

"Feedback always helps

Sure thank you, MisterJ did take the lead writing this we shall have a go rewriting it.

By pictures of us together what would you suggest?

Thank you though

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By *layfulCouple86Couple over a year ago

Lancashire

Would be interesting to get opinions.

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By *emini ManMan over a year ago

There and to the left a bit

"We are in x"

DandN2: Clear and concise profile blurb that reflects your personalities and tells the reader about you and your experience. Could possibly include a little more detail about what you're looking for, but that's a minor quibble. Pics are good and show both of you off well, would maybe benefit from some of you together.

Overall a solid 8.5/10 from me

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

Sure thank you, MisterJ did take the lead writing this we shall have a go rewriting it.

By pictures of us together what would you suggest?

Thank you though"

I love seeing a nice pic of a couple standing together having a hug. It shows you both off and that Youre doing it together (that might just be me being sentimental!) Im not a big fan of action shots but some people are x

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

Yes please

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

"We are in x

Overall a solid 8.5/10 from me

Thanks

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

"Would be interesting to get opinions."

Im not a big fan of close up pics but Thats personal taste. Some body pics of him would help.

You say Shes bi but youve put straight? If I was looking at your profile I wouldn't go past the orientation part as Im looking for at least bi curious and lots of people would be the same.

The bit about him reading messages isn't needed, if people are rude just ignore or block them, if they think its ok to send messages like that theyre unlikely to have read your profile either!

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By *ittlemisssassypantsCouple over a year ago

South East Wales

Aye, go on then...

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By *mmmMaybeCouple over a year ago

West Wales

Oh go on then, but Mr G did it already & we made a few amendments

so anyone else is welcome to pass comment?

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By *emini ManMan over a year ago

There and to the left a bit

"Love a bit of feedback

H x"

enticedxo: Short, sweet, simple and judging by the veris effective!! Struggling to find any criticism of the blurb. Similarly the pics are a stunning mix of body shots (of both of you

), and tasteful action shots - only suggestion I can make is perhaps add some body shots of you together.

Get's a solid 9/10 from me - great profile

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By *layfulCouple86Couple over a year ago

Lancashire

"Would be interesting to get opinions.

Im not a big fan of close up pics but Thats personal taste. Some body pics of him would help.

You say Shes bi but youve put straight? If I was looking at your profile I wouldn't go past the orientation part as Im looking for at least bi curious and lots of people would be the same.

The bit about him reading messages isn't needed, if people are rude just ignore or block them, if they think its ok to send messages like that theyre unlikely to have read your profile either!"

Thank you we'll take that into consideration and make a few adjustments. To answer your question it is mentioned on the profile that even when we had it as bi curious people become obsessed with female play and it becomes an expectation an whilst it's not completely ruled out it isn't primarily what we're looking for.

I hope that explains a little better, maybe there's a better way to handle it I'm unsure though by all means if you feel it could be expressed better, happy to take it on-board.

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

Sure thank you, MisterJ did take the lead writing this we shall have a go rewriting it.

By pictures of us together what would you suggest?

Thank you though

Might have to be of a selfie variety but do like that as an idea

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

"Yes please

Gorgeous pics but theyre all a bit samey and theres none of him.

Your profile comes across fun and bubbly and is clear on what you want. The whole "put...in the subject" puts me off. As I said before if Im making effort of messaging first I dont think I shouldnt have to jump through hoops.

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

I hope that explains a little better, maybe there's a better way to handle it I'm unsure though by all means if you feel it could be expressed better, happy to take it on-board.

Id make it clear in your profile that Shes "bi-playful" so if the mood takes her its an option but shouldn't be expected.

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

Be gentle

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

"Yes please

Gorgeous pics but theyre all a bit samey and theres none of him.

Thanks for that

Yes we definitely need to get some pics of him on and vary them of me a little. I've deleted the part about putting something in the subject line. Just gets really annoying when people who clearly haven't read your profile send messages!

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

"Yes please

Gorgeous pics but theyre all a bit samey and theres none of him.

Thanks for that

Its the curse of fab

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By *emini ManMan over a year ago

There and to the left a bit

Sure thank you, MisterJ did take the lead writing this we shall have a go rewriting it.

By pictures of us together what would you suggest?

Thank you though

Might have to be of a selfie variety but do like that as an idea "

You can always use the timer feature which is standard on most camera phones/tables these days...lean the camera against something, set the timer for 10 seconds get into pose (using the screen on the phone/tablet for guidance) and wait for the click...that's how I take most of mine anyway

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By *wo4FemCouple over a year ago

Birmingham

Open to critique.

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By *blasiansCouple over a year ago

Wakefield

Hello again sir if you could do the honours.

Waiting with baited breath gulp.

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

Sure thank you, MisterJ did take the lead writing this we shall have a go rewriting it.

By pictures of us together what would you suggest?

Thank you though

Might have to be of a selfie variety but do like that as an idea

I also sometimes take a video then screen shot stills. X

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

Always like to hear what people genuinely think

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

"Open to critique.

Perfect. Great pics of you both and your profile is short and to the point x

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

"Always like to hear what people genuinely think

Great profile and pics. Clear text showing what you want. Only thing Id say is you say Youre a young couple twice at the start, that might just be me being pedantic!

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By *emini ManMan over a year ago

There and to the left a bit

"Aye, go on then..."

_ittlemisssassypants: Must confess to having to double check that this was a couples profile going on your name - so might want to consider changing it to something more coupley.

Your blurb covers all the required angles, but is possibly a little disjointed as if you've added to it as you've gone along, perhaps move some of it around a little so it "flows" better e.g. consider opening it with a brief "Hello and welcome to our profile, we are a couple looking to meet fun, exciting, sexy, like minded couples to have fun with in various settings - clubs, parties, our home, your place etc." before then going into the individual descriptions of each of you.

There's a good selection of pics, but would benefit from some more recent bodyshot type pics of Mr, and maybe some of you together as a couple.

Overall 7/10 from me but with the few suggested tweaks would easily get higher

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By *emini ManMan over a year ago

There and to the left a bit

"Oh go on then, but Mr G did it already & we made a few amendments

so anyone else is welcome to pass comment?

Have given mine elsewhere but am sure bunnyhop will gladly give you the once over

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

No one want to critique us

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

"Oh go on then, but Mr G did it already & we made a few amendments

so anyone else is welcome to pass comment?

Have given mine elsewhere but am sure bunnyhop will gladly give you the once over

Great range of pics but eye ones freak me out

Your profile is maybe a bit long winded. Id say we dont really need to know how you got to where you are, live in the moment! It getsca bit rambly at times but maybe Thats a good thing, you come across as a chatty friendly couple x

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

"No one want to critique us"

Good to see you both in pics outbid maybe add a body pic of fem?

Its good to see humour in a profile but it maybe edges into the "dad joke" territory a bit.

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By *mmmMaybeCouple over a year ago

West Wales

"Oh go on then, but Mr G did it already & we made a few amendments

so anyone else is welcome to pass comment?

Have given mine elsewhere but am sure bunnyhop will gladly give you the once over

Great range of pics but eye ones freak me out

Thank you, will have a play with the wording..

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By *hickennchipsWoman over a year ago

up above the streets and houses

Lol or do what u want cos it's ur profile

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By *emini ManMan over a year ago

There and to the left a bit

"No one want to critique us"

Sorry, thought bunnyhop had done you already

Jaytray40: A very lighthearted profile, that maybe tries too hard to be humourous and might put some people off. Personally like to see some humour, the content is good, but maybe tone the humour down a little. Pics are a good mix, but would benefit from maybe a few more recent ones of Mr and some of you together.

Overall gets a solid 7/10 from me

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

Im sorry if we've missed anyone, its hard to keep up!

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

Oo- could you "do us" please?

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By *emini ManMan over a year ago

There and to the left a bit

"Im sorry if we've missed anyone, its hard to keep up! "

Yep ditto that..if we've missed you give us a nudge and we'll try to do better

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

"Oo- could you "do us" please?

Great pics of you both. Starting your profile with negativity and rules is a bit off putting, if you feel the need to have them I'd maybe do it a bit further down. Great tone to the text but maybe a wee bit too rambly (I'm a straight to the point kinda girl though!). The only other thing is your header says no single guys but your profile says otherwise x

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By *emini ManMan over a year ago

There and to the left a bit

"Oo- could you "do us" please?

wheresfrancis: OK the easy bit first, your pics - a fabulous mix of pics of both of you separately and together - good stuff. Profile blurb reads a little bit too much about what you want and not what you can offer and would possibly put me off if looking to meet, also touches very slightly on coming across as negative in terms of what you don't want. That said it's clear and well written and puts your personality across well. I'd also ask if you are a FWB couple rather than a full time couple as you reference having "families" plural, so you might want to clarify that.

A solid 7.5/10 for me but with some tweaks to the profile blurb would easily be much higher.

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By *imandher84Couple over a year ago

Leeds

Have been trying to find the time to rewrite ours so opinions would be appreciated;).

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

"We are in

Kinky

Signing back in for more

Overall gets an 8/10 from me

Thank you, will take on board what you've said

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By *wo4FemCouple over a year ago

Birmingham

"Open to critique.

Perfect. Great pics of you both and your profile is short and to the point x"

Thank you for critique. Perfect

Just need to find a lady to join us now.

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

Anyone one want to give ours a look.. ?

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By *emini ManMan over a year ago

There and to the left a bit

"Have been trying to find the time to rewrite ours so opinions would be appreciated;)."

Himandher84: To be honest it doesn't tell the reader a great deal about you or what you are looking for and overall impression is that it comes across a little negatively, with it mainly being about what you don't want. I'd suggest to startvit off with maybe a welcoming paragraph that summarises who you are as a couple, and then perhaps provide a brief piece about both of you as individuals then move on to who you are hoping to meet and what interests you. A good mix of pics, although moght benefit from a few more of Mr, and maybe another couple of you together.

Overall a 6.5/10 from me but with a few improvements could easily be much higher.

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By *imandher84Couple over a year ago

Leeds

"Have been trying to find the time to rewrite ours so opinions would be appreciated;).

Overall a 6.5/10 from me but with a few improvements could easily be much higher.

That's pretty much the issues we have with our profile, all good advice much appreciated.

Thank you

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By *emini ManMan over a year ago

There and to the left a bit

"Anyone one want to give ours a look.. ? "

Bangin barge couple: Brief, to the point, clear, and manages to convey your personalities nicely - not a lot more needed to be honest, especially taking into account the excellent set of veris. Maybe more detail around what you're looking for and can offer, but that's maybe being too picky. Fantastic set of pics too, that clearly show what a happy, relaxed and fun couple you are (nice scooter by the way!!).

Gets a 9.5/10 from me

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By *urtleJRCouple over a year ago

Ystradgynlais

Ooh, can we have a bashing?

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

"Anyone one want to give ours a look.. ?

Gets a 9.5/10 from me

How kind of you..

will give your points some thought. Thanks

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

"Ooh, can we have a bashing?

Theres no pics of him but I think your situation doesn't call for them!

The bits about being professionals and having careers is a bit off putting as it doesn't really mean much. Normally Id say its not good to read like a single person has written it but I think it works in your dynamic, Id maybe just mention he doesn't play nearer the start x

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By *urtleJRCouple over a year ago

Ystradgynlais

Thanks Bunnyhop.

Will have a go at (yet another) rewrite!

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By *emini ManMan over a year ago

There and to the left a bit

"Ooh, can we have a bashing?

TurtleJR: No bashing needed, it's an articulately written profile that clearly lays out who you are and what you are looking for. Some might think it's a little too long, but I'm struggling to see how you could shorten it without losing the flow, feel and key points. The only line I'd maybe query would be the one about taking pics and vids, how are you going to 'guarantee' they'll be for your own use early - but guess that's for potential meets to decide for themselves. Would you agree to not take them if a meet said no, or would no pics/vids mean no meet? Pics are good but lacking any of Mr - even though he doesn't play would still be good to see him if he's going to be present.

Overall a solid 8-8.5/10

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By *urtleJRCouple over a year ago

Ystradgynlais

As with Bunny's points above, food for thought. Thanks, Gemini. Looks like the weekend is for updating pics... of *both* of us!

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

Does that mean ours is ok?

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By *emini ManMan over a year ago

There and to the left a bit

"Does that mean ours is ok?

Sorry, looks like we might have missed yours in the flurry

TwiceAsNice2017: Well written and clearly laid out profile blurb that makes it clear who you are and what you're looking for (and what you're not) in a positive way. The only bit I'd query is where you mention boundaries around bi-fem play - might want to clarify what they are (also slight typo with "boundaries"

) - I think you're saying you're ok with kissing, anything else will be dependent on how you feel at the time?

A good set of pics, that would benefit perhaps from a few more body shot type pics of Mr and maybe a couple showing you both together.

Overall a good solid 8/10 from me

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By (user no longer on site) OP over a year ago

"Hello again sir if you could do the honours.

Waiting with baited breath gulp."

I like it.

Pictures of you both (although may benefit of less close up). It has a certain flow to how you've written it that works well. The only part that doesn't work for me is the 'Indian takeaway' humour, but others may find it funny. Not sure you need the first line either telling people to read your profile, if they haven't then that can act as a filter for you. 8/10.

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

"Does that mean ours is ok?

Sorry, looks like we might have missed yours in the flurry

) - I think you're saying you're ok with kissing, anything else will be dependent on how you feel at the time?

A good set of pics, that would benefit perhaps from a few more body shot type pics of Mr and maybe a couple showing you both together.

Overall a good solid 8/10 from me

Thankyou kind sir for your analysis and honest opinion

We have rectified the typo

auto correct failed us miserably there!

We have also added a slightly altered face pic of us together and I am working on getting Mr in front of the camera for a few more pics this weekend, maybe a few extra glasses of red will help!

Again, Thankyou xx

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By (user no longer on site) OP over a year ago

"Does that mean ours is ok?

Sorry, looks like we might have missed yours in the flurry

) - I think you're saying you're ok with kissing, anything else will be dependent on how you feel at the time?

A good set of pics, that would benefit perhaps from a few more body shot type pics of Mr and maybe a couple showing you both together.

Overall a good solid 8/10 from me

Twice as nice

I can understand why you've done it but it does start off too rulesy for me. It's so well written further down but the first impression will certainly put some nice couples off, I'm not sure that part reflects your personality. Apart from that I agree with Gemini. 7.5/10.

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By (user no longer on site) OP over a year ago

"As with Bunny's points above, food for thought. Thanks, Gemini. Looks like the weekend is for updating pics... of *both* of us!

Turtle JR

You may have already made slight changes to it, I think it works 8.5/10.

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

"Twice as nice

Thanks for your honesty, very much appreciated

Unfortunately the "rulesy" part will be staying. It in no way reflects our personality as we would prefer not to have it there, but it does serve its purpose. It's the old saying "you can't please everyone all the time" that prevails.

Thankyou x

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By *emini ManMan over a year ago

There and to the left a bit

"Does that mean ours is ok?

Sorry, looks like we might have missed yours in the flurry

) - I think you're saying you're ok with kissing, anything else will be dependent on how you feel at the time?

A good set of pics, that would benefit perhaps from a few more body shot type pics of Mr and maybe a couple showing you both together.

Overall a good solid 8/10 from me

Thankyou kind sir for your analysis and honest opinion

We have rectified the typo

auto correct failed us miserably there!

We have also added a slightly altered face pic of us together and I am working on getting Mr in front of the camera for a few more pics this weekend, maybe a few extra glasses of red will help!

Again, Thankyou xx "

A pleasure and have fun with the pic taking

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By (user no longer on site) OP over a year ago

"Have been trying to find the time to rewrite ours so opinions would be appreciated;).

Overall a 6.5/10 from me but with a few improvements could easily be much higher.

That's pretty much the issues we have with our profile, all good advice much appreciated.

Thank you

Him and her 84

Gemini is being kind in my opinion. Your profile pictures are very good but I'm afraid the written part is very negative. I'd suggest a full rewrite. Your pictures deserve much better. 5/10

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By (user no longer on site) OP over a year ago

"Anyone one want to give ours a look.. ? "

Banging barge.

Very good profile, up there with the top ones. 8.5/10

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

Ours has been up a while, we'll risk it for a biscuit.

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

Happy to have ours critiqued . Please bare in mind while me takes part he doesn't play with others

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By (user no longer on site) OP over a year ago

"Ours has been up a while, we'll risk it for a biscuit. "

A naughty twosome.

Good profile that works well for me. Maybe add another picture of Mr for more balance, but it's inviting, positive with a splash of humour. 8.5/10.

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By *emini ManMan over a year ago

There and to the left a bit

"Ours has been up a while, we'll risk it for a biscuit. "

A_naughty_twosome: Forum regulars, so know your profile pretty well and to be honest have always been impressed by it - it's warm, friendly and inviting with just the right dash of humour about it. If I were to criticise anything it would be that you've not really said what you're looking for anywhere. There's also two uses of the word 'encounter' very close together that doesn't scan well, so perhaps find a simile for one of them. A great set of pics of Mrs, with some nice ones of you as a couple together - really need to add some of Mr showing body shots and maybe a naked/partially clothed one of you together.

Overall a good solid 8/10 would be a 9/10 with pics of Mr.

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

"Love a bit of feedback

H x

enticedxo: Short, sweet, simple and judging by the veris effective!! Struggling to find any criticism of the blurb. Similarly the pics are a stunning mix of body shots (of both of you

), and tasteful action shots - only suggestion I can make is perhaps add some body shots of you together.

Get's a solid 9/10 from me - great profile

Thank you! And good point, we will try some of those.

H xx

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By *angbang_loverCouple over a year ago

Staines

Go for it... am a married girl but didn't do single profile for some stupid reason

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

We are in

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By *ssexcouple2000Couple over a year ago

Colchester

Happy to be critiqued!! Waits nervously.....gulp.

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By *itmanAndHerrCouple over a year ago

st helens

Criticism is necessary for growth.

Please fire away x

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By *emini ManMan over a year ago

There and to the left a bit

"We are in "

Notorious888: First up, know you have the rider at the top about who usually runs the profile, although I'd query if it was necessary to explain if you're effectively using the site as a couple, perhaps you should project that you're acting as a couple, if that makes sense? Which leads neatly onto the next point which is the blurb, though very good and clear reads very much as if it's from one of you only and not both, I'm referring to the regular use of "I" instead of "we" - if it works for you, then fine but might either put others off, or lead them to believe you have a cuck or D/s scenario going on (which I don't think you do). As I said though the look and feel of the blurb generally is good, just need to make it feel more "coupley".

The four pics you have are good, if a little samey (of Mrs), and the one of Mr doesn't give a lot away. So consider some more of both of you, showing off your bodies and maybe some of you together as a couple.

As it stands I'd give this a 6/10 but with a few relatively minor tweaks could be a lot more

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By *uriousCouple999Couple over a year ago

edinburgh

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

We are in....

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By *eovilcouple76Couple over a year ago

yeovil

Be nice to know I suppose,, oh dear here we go !! We are in !!

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By *blasiansCouple over a year ago

Wakefield

"Hello again sir if you could do the honours.

Waiting with baited breath gulp.

I like it.

Thank you, great feedback and much appreciated. All points noted. The first line added due to overload of messages asking question already answered.

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By *emini ManMan over a year ago

There and to the left a bit

"Happy to be critiqued!! Waits nervously.....gulp. "

_ssexcouple2000: No gulps needed!!

Short, sweet, to the point and covers all the bases in doing so, I like it. Some people dislike the "professional" thing, suggesting it's overused and therefore lacks value in a profile, personally I'm neither here nor there, but removing it might open doors if you wanted to. The usual advice about lack of pics of Mr applies and perhaps some of you both together.

Overall gets a strong 7.5/10 for me that would increase with more pics of Mr

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

Repeating as overlooked x

Happy to have ours critiqued . Please bear in mind while me takes part he doesn't play with others

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By *uriousCouple999Couple over a year ago

edinburgh

We're in

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

Aaah why not !!

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By *ssexcouple2000Couple over a year ago

Colchester

Thanks Gemini Man, much appreciated, we'll sort some Mr pics and aim to get photo verified too. Point noted re Professional comment, true as it is we wouldn't want to appear up ourselves in any way, as that's certainly not us! Xx

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By *andomfodCouple over a year ago

walsall

Sure why not!

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By *emini ManMan over a year ago

There and to the left a bit

"Criticism is necessary for growth.

Please fire away x"

HitmanAndHerr: An excellent well written profile that clearly details who you are and what you are looking for, seeking to provide reassurance to your particular preference as well. The only observation I'd make is that in one line you say you're not into pain, yet in the very next line you state you don't believe in boundaries - pain's a boundary surely, as are any other things you're not into (e.g. you don't list SM in your interests). You also list spanking in your interests, which to some would be seen as painful. So you might want to re-word those two lines accordingly. Great set of pics, but again would benefit from some more of the male half of the couple.

Overall a good solid profile that gets an 8/10 from me

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By *emini ManMan over a year ago

There and to the left a bit

"We are in.... "

CBD2: For me, it doesn't really tell me a great deal about you both, or your personalities. Also wondering if you're a FWB couple as opposed to being in a relationship, which some won't mind, others will. Either way you should perhaps add a little more to describe yourselves and let your personality shine through. A good range of pics, but would benefit from some body (not cock) shots of the male half and maybe some of you together.

Overall gets a 6/10 from me but with more personality to the profile would be higher

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By *ollypop2000Woman over a year ago

Derby

"Crit us. Crit us hard x"

Great profile a few more pics of him wouldn't go amiss but yeah it's one of the few profiles that if I came across it and i fitted your needs I'd message first!

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By *emini ManMan over a year ago

There and to the left a bit

"Be nice to know I suppose,, oh dear here we go !! We are in !!"

_eovilcouple76: A good well written profile blurb, that lays out clearly who you are and what you are looking for. Am guessing it was written by the male half, as it lacks that feminine feel, which given who you prefer to meet may not matter, but may add to the way it reads a little. You state that S is 40ish yet it clearly shows her age in the stats above, so maybe remove that bit from the blurb (as it's unnecessary) or amend to match the stats. Great pics too and for a change with a couples profile I'm not going to suggest it needs some pics of Mr, as you're not looking to meet anyone other than single males. Might be nice to have just one in there though so prospective meets at least have an idea of who they'll be meeting, but not totally necessary.

A solid 8/10 bordering on an 8.5/10 from me

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

"We are in....

Overall gets a 6/10 from me but with more personality to the profile would be higher

Fully real couple... But thanks for your feedback. X

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By *eovilcouple76Couple over a year ago

yeovil

"Be nice to know I suppose,, oh dear here we go !! We are in !!

A solid 8/10 bordering on an 8.5/10 from me

Thanks for the feedback. We do have a pic of Mr but it's in the private collection as it's hardly ever asked for.

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By (user no longer on site) OP over a year ago

"Go for it... am a married girl but didn't do single profile for some stupid reason "

As you've indicated yourself it's not really a couples profile, you even mention on it that you have a separate couples profile.

This thread is specifically for critiquing couples profile.

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By *emini ManMan over a year ago

There and to the left a bit

"Repeating as overlooked x

Happy to have ours critiqued . Please bear in mind while me takes part he doesn't play with others"

avoncouple987: To be honest there's nothing to go on at all - nothing that tells the reader about you, or what you're looking for beyond single men. That said it appears to be working for you judging by your veris, but if I were meeting couples I'd certainly want to see a lot more information and get a feel for the personality behind the profile. It's also not clear if Mr is present during meets, if he's not, should this really be a couples profile? A good variety of pics of the lady and probably doesn't matter that there are none of him if he doesn't play.

Overall gets a 4.5/10 from me - needs more info

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By (user no longer on site) OP over a year ago

"We are in....

Overall gets a 6/10 from me but with more personality to the profile would be higher

Fully real couple... But thanks for your feedback. X"

CBD2

I'd have to agree with Gemini on this one, it comes across as FWB and clearly you're not trying to portray that. Also requires body picture of him, not cock. I don't think it's far off being a good profile though 7/10.

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By (user no longer on site) OP over a year ago

"Happy to have ours critiqued . Please bare in mind while me takes part he doesn't play with others "

Good selection of pictures but it stops there. I'm sure it works for you (and that's all that matters really) but I wouldn't respond to it because there's nothing there really. It's all about opinions. 4/10.

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By *emini ManMan over a year ago

There and to the left a bit

"We're in

CuriousCouple999: A good, simple basic profile blurb - would maybe benefit from a brief description of both of you. Quick typo alert, you missed the second 'e' out of "experience". You state "preferably" hoping to meet single guys under 30, which I take to mean that when it comes to single guys you'd rather they were under 30, as opposed to single guys under 30 would be your preference over anyone else (which would be another way of reading that line).

Pics are good, although possibly a few too many close ups and perhaps replace some of the cock shots with some body shots of Mr.

Overall I like it and would give it a 7/10

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By (user no longer on site) OP over a year ago

"Criticism is necessary for growth.

Please fire away x"

Hitman and her

I like it, ticks all the boxes. Well written, good pictures showing you both. I'd lose the 'don't believe in boundaries' line though. It doesn't work with the rest. 8.5/10.

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

"Happy to have ours critiqued . Please bare in mind while me takes part he doesn't play with others

That's fair . Mr wrote it when we first started and we've never got round to changing it .

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By *rx1Couple over a year ago

North of Okehampton, South of Bideford

ok..Heads on our own chopping block..fill ya boots....(nicely please)

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By *emini ManMan over a year ago

There and to the left a bit

"Aaah why not !!

HazedNConfused: To be honest and as a general point it reads a little like the male half of the couple wrote it with minimal input from the lady, so you might want to consider a re-write where you both sit down to do it. You indicate you're looking for lesbians/bi females to help explore CBs bi side while D watches or joins in. No lesbian (and indeed a lot of single bi females) is going to be comfortable with that situation, so I'd remove that as a possibility. Regarding meeting couples and same room fun - you previously mentioned you don't swap (which is of course fine) so you might want to make it clearer that same room fun to you means both couples playing in their couples, especially as the line that starts "If I look at you..." then muddies the water further. Who is "I" anyway? Suggests that one of you has the overriding decision of who/how you play. It's absolutely fine to be nervous and to be exploring boundaries just maybe need to be clearer about that.

Good varied set of pics, perhaps add some with you together as a couple.

Overall gets a 5.5/10 from me, but with a bit more clarity and a feminine touch would be much better. (And apologies if I've called the writer of the profile wrong!!)

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By *emini ManMan over a year ago

There and to the left a bit

"Sure why not!

_andomfod: A good, well written profile, that clearly reflects your personalities, and shows what a loving couple you are. Honestly can't think of anything I'd change as you've clearly laid out who you are and what you're looking for as well as what you're not, in a very positive way.

Where you let yourselves down is your pics, which don't really give a great deal away about you. Consider a few body shots of each of you, as well as some of you together as a couple that aren't sex shots, not that there's anything wrong with action shots as such, just would be nice to see a few well posed ones.

Overall a strong 7.5/10 with potential for better with a few more pics

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By (user no longer on site) OP over a year ago

"Sure why not!

Random fod

I think you could be more succinct. One example is you've blocked single guys so don't need a paragraph directed at them. The content is good but you could say it with less words. Your pictures don't give enough clarity on body shape. You can achieve that with a fully clothed picture of you standing together. You come across as a nice genuine couple but your profile could be better, 7/10.

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By *areBares7778Couple over a year ago

glasgow

Hi we are new and still building profile, so advice would be good.

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By (user no longer on site) OP over a year ago

"Aaah why not !!

Hazed n confused

Good pictures but the rest just doesn't work I'm afraid. I'd recommend you rewrite it because it's disjointed. What you want is very reasonable, just needs to be clearer.

Do you really need to push the whole 420 thing? It's going to put a lot of people off. 4/10.

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By (user no longer on site) OP over a year ago

"Hi we are new and still building profile, so advice would be good.

Kare bares

Good profile! Like the pictures, maybe consider adding one or two of you both together? Well written, positive, welcoming and shows some of your character. 8/10.

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

I have no energy to scroll and see who needs done sorry!

Im up for helping if anyone would like a girls view just give me a shout x

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

Go on, mortify us......

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

"Go on, mortify us......"

Great pics of you both. I dont get the whole third person approach and the text is a little bit long winded. You also have a note about blocking people but if theyre blocked they wont see it?! Same as before the "put.....in the subject" is a pet hate, if Im going to the effort of messaging first I dont think I should have to jump through hoops. Your profile clearly shows who you are and what you want and can offer though so well done.

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

"In "

Some more recent photos would be good, and some of him! Your profile starts on a very negative note but has good content regarding who you are and what you want.

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By *ust looking500Couple over a year ago

We're in ??

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

"We're in ??"

Id say your text is good, its a wee bit confusing whether you are looking to meet in person or just on cam? Your pics are great but get some of him in there! His cock doesnt count

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By *ust looking500Couple over a year ago

"We're in ??

Id say your text is good, its a wee bit confusing whether you are looking to meet in person or just on cam? Your pics are great but get some of him in there! His cock doesnt count

Thanks for that will have a re read and see where the confusion is. Will also look at getting him in front of the camera for a change over the next couple of days

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By *emini ManMan over a year ago

There and to the left a bit

"ok..Heads on our own chopping block..fill ya boots....(nicely please)

_rx1: Ah one of the first profiles I can remember looking at via the couples profile when we first joined the site a year ago

It's maybe a little over long but is well written and clearly lays out who you are and what you are looking for, with a dash of humour in there too. You're obviously doing a lot of things right as your veris show, although ine comment on veris, you say you don't hide your veris in your text but your summary indicates you have more than you show (which I'm guessing is due to the sheer volume of them) so you might want to clarify that a little. An awesome array of pics, sadly lacking too many of Mr, so perhaps consider including him in more of them

All told a very good profile that obviousky works for you. Gets an 8/10 from me

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

"We are in

As it stands I'd give this a 6/10 but with a few relatively minor tweaks could be a lot more

Good points. I will try changing the wording a bit but not much can be done about the pictures as we really don't like having picures taken and we don't really have others. We have face pictures on hand to swap privately.

Tbh, we get enough attention, but I can see the point of changing the wording and will give it a try.

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

"Go on, mortify us......

Third person was to make it stand out.

Blocking, good point

Putting stuff in the subject was in the pious belief that peeps might read it. Naïve aren't we? Thanks for the comments, much appreciated and will be acted on.

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By *rx1Couple over a year ago

North of Okehampton, South of Bideford

Thank you, much appreciated. To clarify then, the only veri's we are not showing are a few that actually mention our names. We believe everyone deserves a mention

Thanks again x

"ok..Heads on our own chopping block..fill ya boots....(nicely please)

_rx1: Ah one of the first profiles I can remember looking at via the couples profile when we first joined the site a year ago

All told a very good profile that obviousky works for you. Gets an 8/10 from me

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By (user no longer on site) OP over a year ago

Getting towards the end of the third thread and just wanted to thank Gemini Man and Bunnyhop for a sterling effort at helping couples see their profiles from the perspective of singles. You'd be surprised how time consuming it is!

Apologies to any couples we've missed and thank you to all the couples who accepted the feedback in the spirit it was given.

I'm sure we'll be able to squeeze in a few more before the threads end.

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

"We're in ??

Id say your text is good, its a wee bit confusing whether you are looking to meet in person or just on cam? Your pics are great but get some of him in there! His cock doesnt count

Thank you, time to do a refresh

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By *emini ManMan over a year ago

There and to the left a bit

"Getting towards the end of the third thread and just wanted to thank Gemini Man and Bunnyhop for a sterling effort at helping couples see their profiles from the perspective of singles. You'd be surprised how time consuming it is!

Apologies to any couples we've missed and thank you to all the couples who accepted the feedback in the spirit it was given.

I'm sure we'll be able to squeeze in a few more before the threads end."

BoT...to paraphrase if you didn't build it...they wouldn't come, so all credit to you for having the idea in the first place..has been both an interesting and fun thing to do, and if I've offended anyone at any point, my apologies it was purely unitentional!!

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By *ab and funCouple over a year ago

FIFE

We are in

Xx Lou

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

"We are in

Xx Lou "

Great pics but none of him!!

I kinda like the shortness of your profile but it might put people off. I never get that whole if you know us verify us, surely if you're back talking to old friends you could ask them?

But kudos for being near me

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By *ab and funCouple over a year ago

FIFE

"We are in

Xx Lou

Great pics but none of him!!

I kinda like the shortness of your profile but it might put people off. I never get that whole if you know us verify us, surely if you're back talking to old friends you could ask them?

I think your right, it's time to update xx

But kudos for being near me

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