FabSwingers.com > Forums > The Lounge > Couples Profile Critique 2
Jump to: Newest in thread
| |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
| |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
| |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
| |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
| |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
| |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
| |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
| |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Us " Good pictures of you both, positive friendly profile but littered with text speak which will definitely put some off. Is the Facebook warning really necessary on here? It dominates your written profile. 7/10. | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
" Did you do ours OP?" It says that yours is a singles profile? | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
| |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"We're in " Id say you guys have it spot on. Photos of you both and its clear what you want x | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
| |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
| |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"We're in....." Woodland couple Good profile, well written, positive with a bit of humour. Pictures of you both but lacking any that show his body shape. Surely your couple and bi fem target audience want a view on whether he ticks their box too. Ps. Why don't you consider taking out the single guy line because you already have them blocked? 7.5/10 | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
| |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Us too..." Fire X Good profile. Well written, positive, to the point and clear in what you want and offer. Pictures of you both 8/10. | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"We're in Id say you guys have it spot on. Photos of you both and its clear what you want x" Thank you, if you mean us x | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"We're in Id say you guys have it spot on. Photos of you both and its clear what you want x" Great to see a single women giving feedback. I'm sure most of the couples would value your opinion above mine. | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"We're in Id say you guys have it spot on. Photos of you both and its clear what you want x" Purespice I agree with bunnyhop. Very good profile. Good pictures of you both well written. I like to see a splash of humour but I'm being picky solid 8.5/10, probably higher but then I'd have to increase Gotham finest, enticedxo and one or two others. | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Go on....." Mischief Good profile, positive, well written, friendly and to the point. Good pictures of you both showing body shape solid 8/10. | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
| |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Us too..." Fire X Ice - good solid profile that clearly states who you are and what you are looking for. Would benefit from a few pics of Mr that aren't cock shots or face down S&M ones. Perhaps some body shots of you together? Gets 7.5/10 from me. | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Go for it Jade x" I like it. Good to see pics of you both and a bit of humor in your text. The only thing that would put me off is that youre not always together so arranging a net with both might be tricky but as Thats not something you can change then top marks x | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
| |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"We are open to criticism" Good pictures but unless Mr is that black guy there's none of him which is not good. Written profile starts off well but gives off a negative feel about it in the middle. Maybe highlight what you will do not just what you won't? 6/10. | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"We're in " PureSpice: Great profile blurb that clearly lays out who you are and what you are looking for - pics are good, if a little too dark in places to be able to make out features (but that's being really picky). Would perhaps benefit from some more of both of you together. A solid 8.5/10 | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Us Good pictures of you both, positive friendly profile but littered with text speak which will definitely put some off. Is the Facebook warning really necessary on here? It dominates your written profile. 7/10." Thanks will rewrite without the text speak And Facebook warning? J | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Please critique ours, thank you." Double The Delight - great well written profile blurb that very clearly and concisely lays out who you are and what you are looking for, as well as being totally clear about your BDSM preferences - all backed up by some amazing pictures of Mrs DTD showing her enjoying that particular lifestyle. A fantastic collection of veris too. Only thing that lets it down is a distinct lack of pictures of Mr DTD which will likely put some people off. Gets an 8.5/10 from me - would have been higher with some pics of Mr | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Wot abous us OP..no pics of Mr as such due to his profession. Mazza x" Good pictures but none of him and I don't buy the profession excuse, you don't need to show faces. A lot of good written substance but it's too much and very disjointed, splattered with text speak. I think you could have a really good profile but in my opinion it needs work 5.5/10 | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Go for it Jade x I like it. Good to see pics of you both and a bit of humor in your text. The only thing that would put me off is that youre not always together so arranging a net with both might be tricky but as Thats not something you can change then top marks x" Aw thanks I am trying to change that part by getting him to move here x | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Please critique ours, thank you. Double The Delight - great well written profile blurb that very clearly and concisely lays out who you are and what you are looking for, as well as being totally clear about your BDSM preferences - all backed up by some amazing pictures of Mrs DTD showing her enjoying that particular lifestyle. A fantastic collection of veris too. Only thing that lets it down is a distinct lack of pictures of Mr DTD which will likely put some people off. Gets an 8.5/10 from me - would have been higher with some pics of Mr " Yes, I'd agree with all that apart from the score. Lack of Mr pictures makes it a 8. | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Go for it Jade x I like it. Good to see pics of you both and a bit of humor in your text. The only thing that would put me off is that youre not always together so arranging a net with both might be tricky but as Thats not something you can change then top marks x Aw thanks I am trying to change that part by getting him to move here x" Jade x I agree, very good profile, I would maybe put some of the 'we do not' stuff a little lower down but I'm being picky. 8.5 | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
" Did you do ours OP? It says that yours is a singles profile?" Our couples profile name is in my profile.. | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Us Good pictures of you both, positive friendly profile but littered with text speak which will definitely put some off. Is the Facebook warning really necessary on here? It dominates your written profile. 7/10. Thanks will rewrite without the text speak And Facebook warning? J " Looking better already. Read the warning that you have in your profile, do you need it? | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
" Did you do ours OP? It says that yours is a singles profile? Our couples profile name is in my profile.." Come on Clem be fair, haven't got time to go searching for profiles | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
" Did you do ours OP? It says that yours is a singles profile? Our couples profile name is in my profile.. Come on Clem be fair, haven't got time to go searching for profiles " Would have taken less time than that took to write! | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
" Did you do ours OP? It says that yours is a singles profile? Our couples profile name is in my profile.. Come on Clem be fair, haven't got time to go searching for profiles Would have taken less time than that took to write! " That's true | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
| |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"If you saw the first thread then you know what this is about. Please don't ask if you don't want an honest opinion. Increasingly seen couples putting up rant updates or the odd post about struggling to get meets but rarely if ever see any that want feedback on their profile. For the brave couples amongst you, say that your in and us singles will mark your profiles out of ten. (Hopefully us singles will be honest and keep it nice)." We noticed your comment about our conversation on your other thread. Agreed, all sorted and no offence taken. For those who got the wrong end of the stick on our response, you got the wrong end of the stick on our response. | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Why not! Critique away!" Great pics showing you both but your profile is a tad negative. A lot of rules and what you dont want rather than saying what you want and can offer x | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Why not! Critique away!" MikeAndMillie - another good solid profile that clearly lays out what you're looking for. If there's a (minor) criticism it reads a little clinical and could maybe do with some personality being injected but that's being picky. Good set of pics too that show you both at play and in body shots - good to see some of Mr too, although might benefit from one or two more. Overall (and I'm getting predictable here!!) an 8.5/10 although borders on a 9 | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Us Good pictures of you both, positive friendly profile but littered with text speak which will definitely put some off. Is the Facebook warning really necessary on here? It dominates your written profile. 7/10. Thanks will rewrite without the text speak And Facebook warning? J Looking better already. Read the warning that you have in your profile, do you need it?" Need something there as had my photos from my single profile used by other people on here and on another site... thanks again for the advice J | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
" Need something there as had my photos from my single profile used by other people on here and on another site... thanks again for the advice J " It literally means nothing and has no legal standing whatsoever. If you read the FAQs it gives tips if youre worried x | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
| |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
" Need something there as had my photos from my single profile used by other people on here and on another site... thanks again for the advice J It literally means nothing and has no legal standing whatsoever. If you read the FAQs it gives tips if youre worried x" Ok thank you will have a look xx | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
| |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Why not! Critique away!" Mike and Millie Good pictures of you both, well written but comes across a bit rulesy. Suggest you put the'We love the social side as much' paragraph at the top to soften it a little that will make it an 8/10. | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Go on then we got thick skin lol" twowrongsmakearight - Apart from the two line second paragraph the profile blurb is very negative and more about what you're not looking for than what you are. The Sydney thing (even though you have treated it lightheartedly) is worthless and has no standing, so is unnecessary. Pics are good but would benefit from some of you both as a couple. The ones of Mr whilst good of him, do suffer from cluttered backgrounds (washing drying, toilet and mug of tea for example). So maybe consider re-doing those. Obviously doing something right though if veris are anything to go by. Get's a 6/10 from me | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Go on then we got thick skin lol" Rulesy and a big negative im afraid, just doesn't welcome the reader. The positive is it does have pictures of you both. 6/10. | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
| |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
| |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Don't think we got any last time (or at least could t find it it was so popular!) so we are in again " Id say a good pic of his body is needed. The bit about winks isnt really needed, those who wink get it and those who dont will ignore it. You maybe want to say a bit more what you can offer rather than what you want? X | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
| |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
| |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Why not, take a peek at ours." Good pics although again itd be nice to see more of him. I like the humor in your profile but if anything maybe a wee bit too much? Im probably just being fussy though! Are you looking for single girls? Your text seems you are but you havent ticked them in your looking for section x | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
" Id say a good pic of his body is needed. The bit about winks isnt really needed, those who wink get it and those who dont will ignore it. You maybe want to say a bit more what you can offer rather than what you want? X" Thanks! That's an awesome red dress by the way | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Go on then " Lol dont be scared! More pus of him, more of what you can offer and that legal bit at the bottom means nothing x | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
" Id say a good pic of his body is needed. The bit about winks isnt really needed, those who wink get it and those who dont will ignore it. You maybe want to say a bit more what you can offer rather than what you want? X Thanks! That's an awesome red dress by the way " Thank you. Its a bugger to get on | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Don't think we got any last time (or at least could t find it it was so popular!) so we are in again " Fitbit - interesting profile that reads well. The whole wink thing is a little convaluted though and as not everyone looks at/pays attention to winks might mean you're missing out. Why not just send a message from the start? Nice to see a top 3 list of things you'd like to try if circumatances are right, although some might read that as being all about what you want and be put off as a result. Pics are good and varied and nice to see some of you both together, perhaps add a few more? Overall a solid 7/10 from me | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Go on then " Pand Kent A good well written profile that is unfortunately let down by the lack of body pictures of Mr. Maybe lose the Sydney university thing? 7.5/10. | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
" Thank you. Its a bugger to get on " Well the effort is sure worth it! Thanks Gemini, will have a bit of an update later. | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
| |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Don't think we got any last time (or at least could t find it it was so popular!) so we are in again " Fetbit I like it. Lose the wink paragraph, get another picture of you both and it's an 8/10. | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Do us then ....... " No pics of him or you both together, your text reads a bit negative and doesn't say much about what you wan or can offer x | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"We're in Id say you guys have it spot on. Photos of you both and its clear what you want x Purespice I agree with bunnyhop. Very good profile. Good pictures of you both well written. I like to see a splash of humour but I'm being picky solid 8.5/10, probably higher but then I'd have to increase Gotham finest, enticedxo and one or two others." Thank you | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"We're in PureSpice: Great profile blurb that clearly lays out who you are and what you are looking for - pics are good, if a little too dark in places to be able to make out features (but that's being really picky). Would perhaps benefit from some more of both of you together. A solid 8.5/10 " Thank you for taking the time to look. If you get the chance please let us know which pictures seem too dark. Thank you | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Go on then " pandskent - clear and concise profile blurb that tells the reader all they need to know. The Sydney thing has no standing so is totally pointless and should be removed. While there are some good pics of Mrs the only ones of Mr are either disembodied ones of his cock, or a solitary one of him in his boxers. Add some more of him showing his body/torso and a few of both of you together. A solid 7/10 from me | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Why not, take a peek at ours. Good pics although again itd be nice to see more of him. I like the humor in your profile but if anything maybe a wee bit too much? Im probably just being fussy though! Are you looking for single girls? Your text seems you are but you havent ticked them in your looking for section x" Thanks for the feedback... More photos of Mr to come. No apologies for the humour, it's just the way we are but can see it wouldn't appeal to all. Thought we had ticked the single females box so a big thank you for pointing it out! x | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"We're in PureSpice: Great profile blurb that clearly lays out who you are and what you are looking for - pics are good, if a little too dark in places to be able to make out features (but that's being really picky). Would perhaps benefit from some more of both of you together. A solid 8.5/10 Thank you for taking the time to look. If you get the chance please let us know which pictures seem too dark. Thank you " To be honest there are a few - think it's a case of overdoing filters for an arty effect as much as anything, for example the first two 4th March ones or the 2nd March one with the white shirt or 16th Feb seated might just benefit from being a tad brighter so features can be made out better. As I said that's being really picky though. | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Go on then pandskent - clear and concise profile blurb that tells the reader all they need to know. The Sydney thing has no standing so is totally pointless and should be removed. While there are some good pics of Mrs the only ones of Mr are either disembodied ones of his cock, or a solitary one of him in his boxers. Add some more of him showing his body/torso and a few of both of you together. A solid 7/10 from me " Thank you, best get the camera out. | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Do us then ....... " lottiedothe - profile blurb doesn't really tell us a great deal about you or what you're looking for and appears to be more about what you don't want. Understandable being as you appear to be just starting out and finding your way in this world. Would suggest expanding to include more detail and try and make it positive rather than negative as it comes across now - take a look around at other couples profiles for ideas (there are some very good ones on this thread) - pics need to include some of Mr and some of you together. Gets a 5/10 from me currently but with some simple changes that would increase. | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Go on then Pand Kent A good well written profile that is unfortunately let down by the lack of body pictures of Mr. Maybe lose the Sydney university thing? 7.5/10. " Thanks | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
| |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Is that at all better? Was going to add some stuff about forumites, helium and lightening our profile up but felt that may be a bit much... Hopefully a bit less "rulesy" and a bit more playful? All critique still welcome!" Much better, just seems a lot friendlier | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Do us then ....... lottiedothe - profile blurb doesn't really tell us a great deal about you or what you're looking for and appears to be more about what you don't want. Understandable being as you appear to be just starting out and finding your way in this world. Would suggest expanding to include more detail and try and make it positive rather than negative as it comes across now - take a look around at other couples profiles for ideas (there are some very good ones on this thread) - pics need to include some of Mr and some of you together. Gets a 5/10 from me currently but with some simple changes that would increase. " lottiedothe I echo Gemini on this one. You're new so it can take a bit of time for your profile to develop. Try and avoid the negative and rules as you start to fill it out. 5/10 but very much a work in progress. | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
| |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Us too... Fire X Ice - good solid profile that clearly states who you are and what you are looking for. Would benefit from a few pics of Mr that aren't cock shots or face down S&M ones. Perhaps some body shots of you together? Gets 7.5/10 from me." I'll take that! Sounds like a good idea, thank you | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Why not, take a peek at ours. Good pics although again itd be nice to see more of him. I like the humor in your profile but if anything maybe a wee bit too much? Im probably just being fussy though! Are you looking for single girls? Your text seems you are but you havent ticked them in your looking for section x Thanks for the feedback... More photos of Mr to come. No apologies for the humour, it's just the way we are but can see it wouldn't appeal to all. Thought we had ticked the single females box so a big thank you for pointing it out! x" Naughty couple sex I like it! Good pictures of you both showing body shape, witty humorous and well written. Solid 8/10 maybe 8.5! | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Is that at all better? Was going to add some stuff about forumites, helium and lightening our profile up but felt that may be a bit much... Hopefully a bit less "rulesy" and a bit more playful? All critique still welcome!" Yup much better...although the losing feeling in the lower half of your bodies joke may cause offence to some (even with the apology) but will leave you to judge whether to leave it on or not. | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Us please. We know it's not very good so some critique would be welcome. " I really like it. Very open about yourselves and great mix of pics. X | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Us please. We know it's not very good so some critique would be welcome. I really like it. Very open about yourselves and great mix of pics. X" | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Us please. We know it's not very good so some critique would be welcome. " It's a good profile, friendly, honest, welcoming and good pictures of you both. You seem a nice couple. I'd take out some of the duplication and it's an 8/10 for me. | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Go on then we got thick skin lol Rulesy and a big negative im afraid, just doesn't welcome the reader. The positive is it does have pictures of you both. 6/10. " ..........thats because it cuts out a lot of fcktards n time wasters n dreamers we tried the nice n softly approach h and a very large portion of single gents think I does not apply to them hence no mercy given .........best one we found yet I when posting meets put w/e in capitals cuts out 80%a the dreamers n weirdos instantly lol | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Go on then we got thick skin lol Rulesy and a big negative im afraid, just doesn't welcome the reader. The positive is it does have pictures of you both. 6/10. ..........thats because it cuts out a lot of fcktards n time wasters n dreamers we tried the nice n softly approach h and a very large portion of single gents think I does not apply to them hence no mercy given .........best one we found yet I when posting meets put w/e in capitals cuts out 80%a the dreamers n weirdos instantly lol" Happy it works for you and delivers what you want. It will put off a lot of nice 'non weird' couples and singles though. | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
| |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Go on then we got thick skin lol Rulesy and a big negative im afraid, just doesn't welcome the reader. The positive is it does have pictures of you both. 6/10. ..........thats because it cuts out a lot of fcktards n time wasters n dreamers we tried the nice n softly approach h and a very large portion of single gents think I does not apply to them hence no mercy given .........best one we found yet I when posting meets put w/e in capitals cuts out 80%a the dreamers n weirdos instantly lol Happy it works for you and delivers what you want. It will put off a lot of nice 'non weird' couples and singles though." ...........so be the price of not having a in box full of cock pics n guys asking I they can fuck us both......we can live with it lol | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Is that at all better? Was going to add some stuff about forumites, helium and lightening our profile up but felt that may be a bit much... Hopefully a bit less "rulesy" and a bit more playful? All critique still welcome! Yup much better...although the losing feeling in the lower half of your bodies joke may cause offence to some (even with the apology) but will leave you to judge whether to leave it on or not." I'd figured as much but to be perfectly honest that's our personalities to a T. If someone does take offence at something that was meant very tongue n cheek then that's their prerogative and I highly doubt we'd get along anyway. We poke fun at ourselves a hundred times more than we do at others, ww're at least being jokey about it rather than abusive like we've seen on some profiles! | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
| |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Is that at all better? Was going to add some stuff about forumites, helium and lightening our profile up but felt that may be a bit much... Hopefully a bit less "rulesy" and a bit more playful? All critique still welcome! Yup much better...although the losing feeling in the lower half of your bodies joke may cause offence to some (even with the apology) but will leave you to judge whether to leave it on or not. I'd figured as much but to be perfectly honest that's our personalities to a T. If someone does take offence at something that was meant very tongue n cheek then that's their prerogative and I highly doubt we'd get along anyway. We poke fun at ourselves a hundred times more than we do at others, ww're at least being jokey about it rather than abusive like we've seen on some profiles! " Oh wasn't a criticism on my part at all more an observation - if you're happy with it then go for it. I'm much the same, learned at an early age if I can't laugh at myself who can I laugh at!! | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
| |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Sure, we'll play " kandl74 - what a lovely well written profile that lays out in a positive way what you are about and what you're looking for. You missed an "in" after culminating by the way Lovely pics too - although would benefit from some more recent ones of Mr (had to scroll a way to get to him) and also some of you both together. All told a very solid 8/10 from me | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
| |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
" Did you do ours OP?" No but I'll do you | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Sure, we'll play " Pictures of you both showing body shape, friendly, positive well written profile. Portrays you well. Edges towards an 8.5/10 for me. | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Intrigued to see how you rate our profile." Whilst your profile blurb is friendly and open it doesn't really provide any detail of what you are looking for or can offer, so you might want to address that. Could do with some pics of Mr that aren't just cock shots too. Thumbs up for the face pics although not everyone will scroll to the bottom to get to the ones of Mr. Gets a 6.5/10 from me - but with a few tweaks would be higher. | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Us please. We know it's not very good so some critique would be welcome. It's a good profile, friendly, honest, welcoming and good pictures of you both. You seem a nice couple. I'd take out some of the duplication and it's an 8/10 for me." Thank you. That's the problem with updating our profile and not writing it anew. Maybe a rewrite is due. | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"We're in again, feedback is always useful! H xx" I gave you guys an 8.5 in the first thread. I must say that you Gotham Finest, Purespice and a couple others maybe should have been a 9 but..... | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
| |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"We're in again, feedback is always useful! H xx I gave you guys an 8.5 in the first thread. I must say that you Gotham Finest, Purespice and a couple others maybe should have been a 9 but....." But...? | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Us please. We know it's not very good so some critique would be welcome. It's a good profile, friendly, honest, welcoming and good pictures of you both. You seem a nice couple. I'd take out some of the duplication and it's an 8/10 for me. Thank you. That's the problem with updating our profile and not writing it anew. Maybe a rewrite is due. " Won't take you long | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
| |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
| |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
| |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"We are in " Justthe2ofusXXX - Have to confess to being a little confused as to why you'd want same room/same partner if meeting couples, but also are looking for single males who would presumably play with one/both of you (which is another confusion as you mention bi males but both list as straight). How you choose to play is of course your prerogative, but you might want to clarify that a little. Also a small typo in the line about Tom/Dick or Harry's you say "unless you can't agree" think you meant "unless you can agree". Pics need some of Mr that aren't just his cock, and some of you both together. Gets a 6.5/10 from me | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"What about us?" Some clearer photos would be good. Theres no need to use capitals, it comes across as aggressive. The bit about Sydney uni means nothing x | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
| |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Could you do ours pleas " your pics although nice are very samey and apart from a few Dick shots there are none showing him off. Profile is a bit muddled and tge bit about use/you comes across as mean. X | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"What about us? Some clearer photos would be good. Theres no need to use capitals, it comes across as aggressive. The bit about Sydney uni means nothing x" Ok thanks | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"We're in Id say you guys have it spot on. Photos of you both and its clear what you want x Great to see a single women giving feedback. I'm sure most of the couples would value your opinion above mine." Ooo I'd love to know bunnyhops opinion on our profile!!! be gentle! X | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"We're in Id say you guys have it spot on. Photos of you both and its clear what you want x Great to see a single women giving feedback. I'm sure most of the couples would value your opinion above mine. Ooo I'd love to know bunnyhops opinion on our profile!!! be gentle! X" Again the pics dont show him off at all, itd be nice to see some body shots of you both. Your profile is clear but maybe a little long winded. The whole put ....in the message title puts me off. If im making the effort to message first surely I shouldnt have to jump through hoops? X | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
| |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"We are in (again) haha last post was very popular. X" I hadn't noticed till new you ladies really dont like showing off your men lol. Pics of him would be nice. Your text is nice and short and to the point, it Dorset say F will play with girls but youre both listed as straight. X | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"We're in Id say you guys have it spot on. Photos of you both and its clear what you want x Great to see a single women giving feedback. I'm sure most of the couples would value your opinion above mine. Ooo I'd love to know bunnyhops opinion on our profile!!! be gentle! X Again the pics dont show him off at all, itd be nice to see some body shots of you both. Your profile is clear but maybe a little long winded. The whole put ....in the message title puts me off. If im making the effort to message first surely I shouldnt have to jump through hoops? X" Changed it about abut and got rid of the put in title bit! Will have fun playing tonight taking pics of hubby to add! Thanks for the comments! | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Can we play " Twisted-firestarters - Great profile with clear blurb - it could do with some grammar/spell checks though but that's being overly picky - there's also a couple of duplicated bits (e.g. You say you're a young couple twice) - but the intent and message are very good. Pictures are excellent with a good variety of both of you. Overall very impressive and gets a 9/10 from me | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Could you do ours pleas your pics although nice are very samey and apart from a few Dick shots there are none showing him off. Profile is a bit muddled and tge bit about use/you comes across as mean. X" we don't like bad grammar and won't meet anyone who uses it, that's not mean that's choice x | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Could you do ours pleas " Some nice pictures but not enough of him, non showing his body shape. You may be very nice people but the end of your profile doesn't portray that, in fact suggests your not nice 6/10. | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Can we play " Twisted fire starters Good profile, pictures of you both which are good. Well written, clear, concise. 8.5/10. | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Ow go on then it don't seem to work to well would be nice to know we're we are going wrong!!" Puk pair No pictures of him and your profile is dominated by what you won't do instead of what you will. Doesn't work for me I'm afraid 5/10. | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
| |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
| |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"I feel like we should hi 5 for a job well done! The forums will be quiet now we've sorted all these profiles, they'll all be out shagging like rabbits! " Oh definitely high 5s all round... ....so that's what that noise was!! | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
| |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
| |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Please critique ours, thank you. Double The Delight - great well written profile blurb that very clearly and concisely lays out who you are and what you are looking for, as well as being totally clear about your BDSM preferences - all backed up by some amazing pictures of Mrs DTD showing her enjoying that particular lifestyle. A fantastic collection of veris too. Only thing that lets it down is a distinct lack of pictures of Mr DTD which will likely put some people off. Gets an 8.5/10 from me - would have been higher with some pics of Mr " Thank you. | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
| |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"We're in!! " summer99 - Liking the concise simplicity of your profile blurb - could maybe flesh it out a little more with some more detail about what you're looking for/can offer. Pics fall into the couples profile trap of being pretty much all of Mrs with just one cock pic of Mr and those of Mrs are all very much alike - so consider more varied pics of both of you with perhaps some of you together. Gets a solid 7/10 from me | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
| |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
| |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"We made a bit of an effort with ours,it seems to work." pullmypantiesdown - Great light hearted profile blurb that doesn't take itself too seriously but gets across a sense of who you are and what you're looking for very well. Would maybe give consideration to changing your username only because it suggests a single profile with the use of the word 'my' but if you're comfortable with it, go for it!! Limited pictures are good but again fall into the couples profile trap of all being of Mrs and none of Mr. Know you acknowledge that in your profile blurb but male pics don't have to be cock pics - try a few torso/bum shots and perhaps add some of you both together. Gets a solid 7/10 from me | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"We made a bit of an effort with ours,it seems to work." A well written friendly profile that is good at explaining what you want and gives an impression of your relaxed approach. Pictures of her but no pictures of him? It's as if you've got something to hide. Many couples and singles are disappointed that they have to ask or worse still guess what Mr looks like, they don't mean cock pictures, they mean body shape. 7/10. | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"In in" Presumably you mean to give honest feedback to couples profiles, which is great. | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"We're in!! " Summer99 A new profile and a good start, if you balance your pictures out with some body shots of him (not cock) then you'll definitely appeal more to the women and female half of couples on here. Do that and it's an 8/10. | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
| |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
| |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
| |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Okay I'd like to know what folk think " BlkDomWhtSubBiCple - A profile I've long admired from a discreet distance Very clear profile blurb that shows exactly who you are and what you're looking for and more importantly goes into detail about your particular interests in the BDSM side of the lifestyle. Great pics too that include both of you, although could probably benefit from a few more of Him and maybe some of you together. Gets a 9/10 from me | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Okay I'd like to know what folk think " Black dom white sub It's a good profile, very good actually. You get the basics right. Pictures include you both and have body type shots. Clear description of who you are and what you want. I think I'd only change one sentence, it's a solid 8.5/10 for me. | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
| |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
| |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Go on then, why not Mrs blue eyes " Good pictures of you both and a friendly profile descriptive but you've been here over a year so should have more of an idea of what you're looking for. A picture together would work well and better punctuation on your first paragraph (first impression). Small changes would make yours a very good profiles 8/10. | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Us please x" Bump and Grind A very good profile. Good selection of pictures showing body type. Welcoming, positive, concise and well written descriptive. Up there with the top ones for me 8.5/10. | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Go on then, why not Mrs blue eyes Good pictures of you both and a friendly profile descriptive but you've been here over a year so should have more of an idea of what you're looking for. A picture together would work well and better punctuation on your first paragraph (first impression). Small changes would make yours a very good profiles 8/10." . A little laziness really, keep meaning to go back and redo punctuation, we do have pics of us together in our friends only, we are a little careful as we can be easily recognised by tatt's, but well as for the not knowing what we like, well although we have been on fab over a year, we actually still haven't swung as such we like to watch and be watched in clubs, but we are still not sure what we want, so we try not to lead people on with our profile, do you think we should add more about the voyuer and exhibtionist side?? Thanks btw, Mrs blue eyes | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Go on then, why not Mrs blue eyes Good pictures of you both and a friendly profile descriptive but you've been here over a year so should have more of an idea of what you're looking for. A picture together would work well and better punctuation on your first paragraph (first impression). Small changes would make yours a very good profiles 8/10.. A little laziness really, keep meaning to go back and redo punctuation, we do have pics of us together in our friends only, we are a little careful as we can be easily recognised by tatt's, but well as for the not knowing what we like, well although we have been on fab over a year, we actually still haven't swung as such we like to watch and be watched in clubs, but we are still not sure what we want, so we try not to lead people on with our profile, do you think we should add more about the voyuer and exhibtionist side?? Thanks btw, Mrs blue eyes " Definitely! There are lots of couples and singles looking for exactly that. | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Go on then, why not Mrs blue eyes Good pictures of you both and a friendly profile descriptive but you've been here over a year so should have more of an idea of what you're looking for. A picture together would work well and better punctuation on your first paragraph (first impression). Small changes would make yours a very good profiles 8/10.. A little laziness really, keep meaning to go back and redo punctuation, we do have pics of us together in our friends only, we are a little careful as we can be easily recognised by tatt's, but well as for the not knowing what we like, well although we have been on fab over a year, we actually still haven't swung as such we like to watch and be watched in clubs, but we are still not sure what we want, so we try not to lead people on with our profile, do you think we should add more about the voyuer and exhibtionist side?? Thanks btw, Mrs blue eyes Definitely! There are lots of couples and singles looking for exactly that." . Thankyou muchly | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
| |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"*creeps in at the back..* hey OP, come on in, but be gentle " Peach fuzz This profile could be so so good, it's all there! Good pictures of you both showing body shape, good descriptive but it's spoilt by terrible punctuation and what are all the X's for? Lose them, punctuate it, use paragraphs and lose the warning at the end and you've got a better! (Should take you 5 minutes). At the moment it's just below an 8/10. | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
| |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Any better? Mrs blue eyes " Brilliant, it just reads so much better and you really come across as fun people. | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"*creeps in at the back..* hey OP, come on in, but be gentle Peach fuzz This profile could be so so good, it's all there! Good pictures of you both showing body shape, good descriptive but it's spoilt by terrible punctuation and what are all the X's for? Lose them, punctuate it, use paragraphs and lose the warning at the end and you've got a better! (Should take you 5 minutes). At the moment it's just below an 8/10." Sorry sir, on it now...;-) | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Any better? Mrs blue eyes Brilliant, it just reads so much better and you really come across as fun people. " . Aww Thankyou, it's really hard as we don't do arranged meets as such, we just attend clubs with a see what happens kind of attitude our reasoning for this is that we are not keen on all the pressure of meets, especially as we really don't know where our swinging journey will go but we don't want to sound negative in our profile, with we don't do this and we don't do that, and we don't want to string people along, we are very honest with our messaging though and our way of swinging seems to be working for us at the minute, thanks lots for all the advice Mrs blue eyes | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"*creeps in at the back..* hey OP, come on in, but be gentle Peach fuzz This profile could be so so good, it's all there! Good pictures of you both showing body shape, good descriptive but it's spoilt by terrible punctuation and what are all the X's for? Lose them, punctuate it, use paragraphs and lose the warning at the end and you've got a better! (Should take you 5 minutes). At the moment it's just below an 8/10. Sorry sir, on it now...;-)" All revised and ready for a remark please | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"*creeps in at the back..* hey OP, come on in, but be gentle Peach fuzz This profile could be so so good, it's all there! Good pictures of you both showing body shape, good descriptive but it's spoilt by terrible punctuation and what are all the X's for? Lose them, punctuate it, use paragraphs and lose the warning at the end and you've got a better! (Should take you 5 minutes). At the moment it's just below an 8/10. Sorry sir, on it now...;-) All revised and ready for a remark please " A remarkable transformation, very good. It's a solid 8.5/10 now and like some select other profiles could possibly be a 9, but I don't give 9's. Try and add a picture of the two of you together if you can. | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Us please x Bump and Grind A very good profile. Good selection of pictures showing body type. Welcoming, positive, concise and well written descriptive. Up there with the top ones for me 8.5/10." Ah thank you. Have been told we need more male pics - it's something were working on | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
| |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"*creeps in at the back..* hey OP, come on in, but be gentle Peach fuzz This profile could be so so good, it's all there! Good pictures of you both showing body shape, good descriptive but it's spoilt by terrible punctuation and what are all the X's for? Lose them, punctuate it, use paragraphs and lose the warning at the end and you've got a better! (Should take you 5 minutes). At the moment it's just below an 8/10. Sorry sir, on it now...;-) All revised and ready for a remark please A remarkable transformation, very good. It's a solid 8.5/10 now and like some select other profiles could possibly be a 9, but I don't give 9's. Try and add a picture of the two of you together if you can." Thanks Op! It's been a pleasure, I'll jump the old man as soon as he gets in from work and get my homework done | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Go on then " Pure-karnage - Profile blurb is a little confusing with typos and duplications (e.g. You've two lines about each of you both prefaced with Miss K/Mr K, consider combining them into single paragraphs and removing the second Miss K/Mr K in each instance - you also have a line that starts "Head game is...", guessing that should be "Her game is..." - likewise you make reference to Mr K "also has his own pride" guessing should be "profile"?). There's reference to a bucket list - either give some clues to what's on it, or make it clear it can be discussed if there's mutual interest. Maybe include the names of your solo profiles as a cross-reference and for anyone that might be interested in meeting you alone? Pics are good and varied, although some are a little indistinct and there's too many cock pics of Mr, so maybe replace with some body pics. Overall a 6.5/10 but can easily be improved with just a few small changes | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"*creeps in at the back..* hey OP, come on in, but be gentle Peach fuzz This profile could be so so good, it's all there! Good pictures of you both showing body shape, good descriptive but it's spoilt by terrible punctuation and what are all the X's for? Lose them, punctuate it, use paragraphs and lose the warning at the end and you've got a better! (Should take you 5 minutes). At the moment it's just below an 8/10. Sorry sir, on it now...;-) All revised and ready for a remark please A remarkable transformation, very good. It's a solid 8.5/10 now and like some select other profiles could possibly be a 9, but I don't give 9's. Try and add a picture of the two of you together if you can. Thanks Op! It's been a pleasure, I'll jump the old man as soon as he gets in from work and get my homework done " Have to agree with the OP didn't see the original so looking at this fresh, but couldn't add more to what BOT's already said. A pic of you together would for sure finish it off nicely. Definitely an 8.5/10 | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
| |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
| |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
| |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"*creeps in at the back..* hey OP, come on in, but be gentle Peach fuzz This profile could be so so good, it's all there! Good pictures of you both showing body shape, good descriptive but it's spoilt by terrible punctuation and what are all the X's for? Lose them, punctuate it, use paragraphs and lose the warning at the end and you've got a better! (Should take you 5 minutes). At the moment it's just below an 8/10. Sorry sir, on it now...;-) All revised and ready for a remark please A remarkable transformation, very good. It's a solid 8.5/10 now and like some select other profiles could possibly be a 9, but I don't give 9's. Try and add a picture of the two of you together if you can. Thanks Op! It's been a pleasure, I'll jump the old man as soon as he gets in from work and get my homework done Have to agree with the OP didn't see the original so looking at this fresh, but couldn't add more to what BOT's already said. A pic of you together would for sure finish it off nicely. Definitely an 8.5/10 " Thank you Gemini x Great thread op! | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Go on then do your best.. " Corfu Connie john: A detailed profile that clearly lays out who you are and what you are looking for once you get past the first couple of lines, which had me a little confused to be honest - if I've understood correctly you're in Corfu and will be until November 2017? If so then you need to make that clear as I wondered if your profile was out of date and you meant last November. Would also change the line that says "no chance of meeting until the summer season starts" as a lot of people will read that and move on to the next profile - why not put something like "If you're ever in Corfu and fancy a no pressure relaxed meet in the sun, why not drop us a message?". The line about offering info about Corfu is a nice touch but has got kind of confused in with the previous line about reading profiles, so maybe make it a separate line and perhaps ask people to message rather than wink - might be a way to open up a chat The Sydney University thing is worthless and has no standing, so I'd remove that. Finally one pic of one of you (can't tell which) in the distance is going to put a lot of people off - so time to get the camera out. Doesn't have to be rude pics, or even face pics but would be good to have some that give an idea of body shape etc. Gets a 6.5/10 from me but with some small changes and pics would easily reach an 8 or better. | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Just wanted to give you 3 reviewers a big thank you for posting to this fun yet informative thread which will undoubtably actually help people on here. It's a bit refreshing having the help thrown towards couples rather than the couples helping with the single male profiles. Hope to see a number 3 when this one fills!" Thank you for that, it's been fun. | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
| |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Let's hear it then... " Twice as nice Good pictures of you both but would benefit from a body shape picture of Mr. Then I'm afraid it's very much a profile of two halves. The first half has an air of negativity and is very 'glass half full' and then the second half is great apart from the last paragraph. I'd lose most of the first half or word it differently. Your profile should start with the 'we like the social' paragraph you've got, at least it would get them in before hitting them with all the rules, demands and what you won't do. 5.5/10 but could easily be much higher. | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Let's hear it then... " TwiceAsNice2017 - Once you get to the paragraph that starts "We have had many meets..." it's a great, positive, well written and appealing profile but the negative paragraphs before it read a bit rulesy - understand the need for them but perhaps consider moving them to after the positives. Appears you have single men blocked so is there really any need to include the paragraph (if they can't message you anyway) about them beyond saying "we will find you". Pics are good but would benefit from more of Mr and perhaps some more shots of you together. Gets a 7/10 from me | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
| |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
| |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Ooo what have I missed?!? Haha x" You've missed a request for a third one of these threads when this one is full! | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Ooo what have I missed?!? Haha x You've missed a request for a third one of these threads when this one is full! " Well we are only 5 posts away from filling this one!! | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
| |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
| |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Im up for more judging. Just call me Mr Cowell " Bagsy not be Louis Walsh!! | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
"Im up for more judging. Just call me Mr Cowell Bagsy not be Louis Walsh!!" You can be Cheryl x | |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |
| |||
Reply privately (closed, thread got too big) |