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By (user no longer on site) OP
over a year ago
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It's a quiet Sunday afternoon and I thought I would put something different on the forum for a change.
This is a piece I wrote in response to a creative writing challenge on another site, it is about THAT Moment, that moment when he or she or you cum
please post your contribution in the reply spaces below i'm sure we will have some very talented writers of short pieces out there
This is mine 
Shaking and heaving our bodies slick with exertion
breathing shallow'd and rapid,
I claw at his flesh trying not to drown in the sensations he is driving from me,
I'm unable to focus my eyes, I can feel the blood vessels pop from the pressure of his hand on my throat, cutting off my air and making me light headed
I can hear only the guttural grunting of his involuntary song as he pushes us towards the edge
Hard flesh engulfs me and fills me till I scream, silently, the non sound swallowed by the rasp of his breath
and then I feel it, time stands still, the swelling that tells my body 'THAT moment' is here, a calling, a joining, my body dragging his release from his very core
His head goes back as the first wave of that moment hits him and his howl rents the air asunder
white heat explodes inside me, burning into my body like molten lava forcing me to join his dance of ecstasy, squeezing, pulsing, driving into me till there is nothing left but tremors
We lay peaceful |
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By (user no longer on site)
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"I mean lets face it this has to be better than, makeup tips, what are you having for lunch, Sunday roast, shark films yada yada yada  "
Sorry, I'd much rather the makeup tips. Most writing makes me cringe.  I don't think the English language lends itself well to erotic writing. (And I don't know if any others do either.) The real power for me is in imagination, rather than someone else's words. And I realise this is a bit hypocritical from someone with a poem on their profile. |
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"I mean lets face it this has to be better than, makeup tips, what are you having for lunch, Sunday roast, shark films yada yada yada "
Sorry Miss.
I'm off out but I might have a go later.
Everyone do as she says.
Write Write Write!! |
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"then tosh runs out to the balcony thinking hes back on a cruise ship.. throws his arms out wide and bursts out in song, singing 'my heart will go on'  "
He looked beautiful in that evening gown as well  |
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By (user no longer on site)
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"I mean lets face it this has to be better than, makeup tips, what are you having for lunch, Sunday roast, shark films yada yada yada
Sorry, I'd much rather the makeup tips. Most writing makes me cringe. I don't think the English language lends itself well to erotic writing. (And I don't know if any others do either.) The real power for me is in imagination, rather than someone else's words. And I realise this is a bit hypocritical from someone with a poem on their profile. "
Have to agree that most writing, which is meant to be erotic, just ends up cringe worthy and full of cliches. Poems can work better as they're more open to interruption by the reader. |
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By (user no longer on site) OP
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"I don't need to write it.. The whole bloody block of flats can hear that moment! "
none of us need to write it, I just thought it would be something a little different from the norm to amuse us a little on a rainy Sunday
not to worry eh  |
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By (user no longer on site)
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"I don't need to write it.. The whole bloody block of flats can hear that moment!
none of us need to write it, I just thought it would be something a little different from the norm to amuse us a little on a rainy Sunday
not to worry eh "
Keep it up...plenty folk will like it....
Stick some stuff in the stories/fanasies section maybe |
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"I don't need to write it.. The whole bloody block of flats can hear that moment!
none of us need to write it, I just thought it would be something a little different from the norm to amuse us a little on a rainy Sunday
not to worry eh "
It's not raining here but I'll put my writing cap on |
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e.e.cummings - she being Brand
.
.
she being Brand
-new;and you
know consequently a
little stiff I was
careful of her and (having
thoroughly oiled the universal
joint tested my gas felt of
her radiator made sure her springs were O.
K.)i went right to it flooded-the-carburetor cranked her
up,slipped the
clutch (and then somehow got into reverse she
kicked what
the hell) next
minute i was back in neutral tried and
again slo-wly;bare,ly nudg. ing(my
lev-er Right-
oh and her gears being in
A 1 shape passed
from low through
second-in-to-high like
greasedlightning) just as we turned the corner of Divinity
avenue i touched the accelerator and give
her the juice,good
(it
was the first ride and believe I we was
happy to see how nice and acted right up to
the last minute coming back down by the Public
Gardens I slammed on
the
internalexpanding
&
externalcontracting
breaks Bothatonce and
brought allofher tremB
-ling
to a:dead.
stand-
;Still)
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"e.e.cummings - she being Brand
.
.
she being Brand
-new;and you
know consequently a
little stiff I was
careful of her and (having
thoroughly oiled the universal
joint tested my gas felt of
her radiator made sure her springs were O.
K.)i went right to it flooded-the-carburetor cranked her
up,slipped the
clutch (and then somehow got into reverse she
kicked what
the hell) next
minute i was back in neutral tried and
again slo-wly;bare,ly nudg. ing(my
lev-er Right-
oh and her gears being in
A 1 shape passed
from low through
second-in-to-high like
greasedlightning) just as we turned the corner of Divinity
avenue i touched the accelerator and give
her the juice,good
(it
was the first ride and believe I we was
happy to see how nice and acted right up to
the last minute coming back down by the Public
Gardens I slammed on
the
internalexpanding
&
externalcontracting
breaks Bothatonce and
brought allofher tremB
-ling
to a:dead.
stand-
;Still)
"
Class. |
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