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By *ohnjones3210 OP   Man  over a year ago

Chester

Hello everyone!

Last time i asked for constructive criticism on my profile, it helped me a lot. Last night, I updated my profile and changed some bits. I'm looking for more feedback to make sure that my profile is working the best it can for me.

From experience, women's feedback is usually more appropriate! So ladies, if you can spare an hour? Haha!

I'd be grateful for any feedback. I'd like it to sound positive, etc. Sometimes us guys don't always say the right things!

Be as cutting, nasty as you like!

Cheers! Xxx

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By *ollie_JCouple  over a year ago

London

Put the fact you can accomodate up in the first few paragraphs.

I would take out the lol and haha bits, but that's just me

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By (user no longer on site)  over a year ago

Just my opinion, but its a bit long

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By (user no longer on site)  over a year ago

I (the Mrs) think it's good. It gives the reader a good idea of your personality, likes and dislikes without sounding "off". The main thing that leaps out to me is that you've put a lot of thought into it

I agree with the previous poster that putting the fact you can accommodate further up the text would be a good idea.

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By (user no longer on site)  over a year ago

have to agree, the ha ha's are liked canned laughter on a sitcom.

if people find it funny, then they will smile anyway.

dont know if you should have the bit about being dominant in there, as you say it doesnt come out until you are comfortable, so that wont show for a good while. women that are looking for doms would want you to be dom, full stop, not when you are ready to be.

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By *ollie_JCouple  over a year ago

London

And you might think of rewording the boobie section, it does sound like the beginning of a tv script. Maybe use the word breast?

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By *ohnjones3210 OP   Man  over a year ago

Chester


"Put the fact you can accomodate up in the first few paragraphs.

I would take out the lol and haha bits, but that's just me"

Lol and haha reduced significantly... Will have a think about the accom thingy! Cheers hun!

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By *ohnjones3210 OP   Man  over a year ago

Chester


"Just my opinion, but its a bit long"

I agree with you but funnily enough, women seem to like that. I have positive feedback about it often and rarely negative.

I'll keep an eye out though and obv reduce it if others agree.

Cheers matey!

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By *ohnjones3210 OP   Man  over a year ago

Chester


"I (the Mrs) think it's good. It gives the reader a good idea of your personality, likes and dislikes without sounding "off". The main thing that leaps out to me is that you've put a lot of thought into it

I agree with the previous poster that putting the fact you can accommodate further up the text would be a good idea. "

Excellent... Accom bit will be moved up to the top later then.

Cheers hun. x

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By *ollie_JCouple  over a year ago

London

And if that is your proper name you are quite easy to track down on the net

If you want not to be discovered you may want to change your user name

(mr new, even if it wasn't mrs new wouldn't take too kindly to being called Hun)

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By *ohnjones3210 OP   Man  over a year ago

Chester


"have to agree, the ha ha's are liked canned laughter on a sitcom.

if people find it funny, then they will smile anyway.

dont know if you should have the bit about being dominant in there, as you say it doesnt come out until you are comfortable, so that wont show for a good while. women that are looking for doms would want you to be dom, full stop, not when you are ready to be."

Ok, I personally find sitcoms annoying for that reason. I hadn't thought of it like that. Should I remove all traces of haha and all that?

Ill have a think about the dom thing. Are there actually and men who would be fully Dom on first meet? Seems quite risky to me!

Cheers hun x

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By *ohnjones3210 OP   Man  over a year ago

Chester


"And you might think of rewording the boobie section, it does sound like the beginning of a tv script. Maybe use the word breast?"

Haha! Ok, ill look into that!

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By *ohnjones3210 OP   Man  over a year ago

Chester


"And if that is your proper name you are quite easy to track down on the net

If you want not to be discovered you may want to change your user name

(mr new, even if it wasn't mrs new wouldn't take too kindly to being called Hun)"

It's not my proper name!

Ahhh well you never know, he might secretly like it. haha!

Sorry Mr/Mrs new... Point taken...

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By (user no longer on site)  over a year ago

Its like reading a mills and boon book,

just state facts, straight, accommodate and travel.

when you do get a meet there will be nothing to reveal or talk about.

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By *ohnjones3210 OP   Man  over a year ago

Chester


"Its like reading a mills and boon book,

just state facts, straight, accommodate and travel.

when you do get a meet there will be nothing to reveal or talk about. "

Eeeeee, sorry pal, I disagree! This profile is my one and only first impression. Many guys have the raw basics on their profile. With 50:1 ratios of men to women, I have to stand out as different. But thanks anyway matey!

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By (user no longer on site)  over a year ago


"Its like reading a mills and boon book,

just state facts, straight, accommodate and travel.

when you do get a meet there will be nothing to reveal or talk about. "

i actually enjoyed reading it, apart from what i pointed out.

there are mens profiles on here that are so sparse there is nothing to grab your attention.

however, the length of it MAY be a consideration, but sure, is there really a cut off point to profiles?

have read 2 line ones that were too long and full of shit lol

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By *ohnjones3210 OP   Man  over a year ago

Chester


"Its like reading a mills and boon book,

just state facts, straight, accommodate and travel.

when you do get a meet there will be nothing to reveal or talk about.

i actually enjoyed reading it, apart from what i pointed out.

there are mens profiles on here that are so sparse there is nothing to grab your attention.

however, the length of it MAY be a consideration, but sure, is there really a cut off point to profiles?

have read 2 line ones that were too long and full of shit lol"

I agree with you. To be fair, I have never got complaints of it being too long, infact, quite the opposite, although personally, I do think its too long.

I might put some 'hooks' in it soon to get women curious about me... The skill lies in knowing how to go about doing that correctly.

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By (user no longer on site)  over a year ago

You only need 2 hooks.

one a pic of your eyes, which are the window to the soul and the fact your able to acc.

that's plenty for most women, there only after a shag after all, its not as if there looking for commitment.

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By (user no longer on site)  over a year ago


"You only need 2 hooks.

one a pic of your eyes, which are the window to the soul and the fact your able to acc.

that's plenty for most women, there only after a shag after all, its not as if there looking for commitment."

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By *ohnjones3210 OP   Man  over a year ago

Chester


"You only need 2 hooks.

one a pic of your eyes, which are the window to the soul and the fact your able to acc.

that's plenty for most women, there only after a shag after all, its not as if there looking for commitment."

I agree with you to am extent but it seems that there are hoops to jump though. You've got to earn the right. You've got to chat, prove yourself. As a guy, I do pretty well for myself on here, but I have never simply messaged a woman and got instant sex. Ever...

There's much more to it. A lot of psychological factors and things... For example, a woman may come across a brilliant guy, the best guy on the planet, but if he has a dark picture of himself or he isn't smiling, he is fucked.... First impressions. He comes across as having something to hide, dangerous even.

With competition too, more is required than showing your face pic and stating that you can accom...

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By (user no longer on site)  over a year ago


"Just my opinion, but its a bit long

I agree with you but funnily enough, women seem to like that. I have positive feedback about it often and rarely negative.

I'll keep an eye out though and obv reduce it if others agree.

Cheers matey!"

No problem. Only said it as I had it commented that mine was too long

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By *ohnjones3210 OP   Man  over a year ago

Chester


"Just my opinion, but its a bit long

I agree with you but funnily enough, women seem to like that. I have positive feedback about it often and rarely negative.

I'll keep an eye out though and obv reduce it if others agree.

Cheers matey!

No problem. Only said it as I had it commented that mine was too long"

Oh right! Do you get that often?

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By (user no longer on site)  over a year ago


"Just my opinion, but its a bit long

I agree with you but funnily enough, women seem to like that. I have positive feedback about it often and rarely negative.

I'll keep an eye out though and obv reduce it if others agree.

Cheers matey!

No problem. Only said it as I had it commented that mine was too long

Oh right! Do you get that often?"

Had it a couple if times, strangly from a couple who live too far away to meet and I didnt fit their want list on several counts, and a fem who only met fems

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