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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago
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If you're happy with it thats the impoftant bit, It won't suit everyone, none can or do, additions might enhance or detract
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The end copyright piece makes it seem like you don't understand how copyright laws etc work. It's as pointless as adding the piece about the Sydney Institute
Past that, honestly, if you're happy with it, that's all that matters |
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By *nitterWoman
over a year ago
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Hi OP, nice pictures and I like the the poem. The rest is a little wordy for me personally but as the others said, as long as you are happy with it then the jobs a goodon  |
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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago
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I see you have taken on the advise to re-organise it.
The flow is better. You come across less serious and your heritage isn’t the most verbose bit. I skimmed it so can’t comment in detail about the content. Also solely going off my memory of what it was last week. I do have a good memory so that’s reliable.
The addition of the poem is a nice change.
The question should be, are you happy with the changes you’ve made? Does it reflect that you that you’re hoping a reader will “see” in your words? If so, then it’s perfect for you.
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