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By (user no longer on site) OP
over a year ago
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So this is not a woe is me, the site is shit type post, I've just updated my profile and would like some feedback.
Thanks for taking your time to look
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Looks good. Clear, appealing and to the point.
Only other thing I'd suggest is perhaps mentioning some of the things you enjoy most. That can give a good starting off point for conversation on a common ground. |
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By (user no longer on site)
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Couple of grammar/typos.
You use "I love" twice in a row to start a new paragraphed sentence.
No commas in the first sentence.
Very stop starty (too many very short paragraphs/single sentences)
But if you just mean content, it's fine. |
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By (user no longer on site) OP
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"Couple of grammar/typos.
You use "I love" twice in a row to start a new paragraphed sentence.
No commas in the first sentence.
Very stop starty (too many very short paragraphs/single sentences)
But if you just mean content, it's fine. "
Thanks I will have a look at this |
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