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By (user no longer on site) OP
over a year ago
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Whilst having a browse and if you have a bit of time could anyone give me a little advice on the quality of my shop window??
Thanx in advance of many wanks |
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"Whilst having a browse and if you have a bit of time could anyone give me a little advice on the quality of my shop window??
Thanx in advance of many wanks"
If you’re in a relationship best to be upfront about it - it won’t put everybody off  |
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Hi OP.
The text needs tidying up and I would get rid of 99% below the word SCENARIO.
Maybe type it in Word first and read it through, tweaking as necessary.
A greater variety of photos would also be good idea. |
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It's not terrible, it's fairly good! I'm not your target but I got a little glazed over, after 5 minutes reading it, sensing a bit of repetition and it not being as concise as I would have liked - but I'm not your target partner.
I was curious if your wife has given consent - you may have said it but I didn't notice.
Overall, you covered a lot of important things, you, your marital status, bi interests, career and more. I'd encourage you to let it retain your personality but reduce some of the detail, bloat and repetition. If it's more concise, you'll probably be able to retain the attention of those who are matched.
Your pics were perhaps a little samey - consider a little more variety.
Good luck!  |
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By *adetMan
over a year ago
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"It's not terrible, it's fairly good! I'm not your target but I got a little glazed over, after 5 minutes reading it, sensing a bit of repetition and it not being as concise as I would have liked - but I'm not your target partner.
I was curious if your wife has given consent - you may have said it but I didn't notice.
Overall, you covered a lot of important things, you, your marital status, bi interests, career and more. I'd encourage you to let it retain your personality but reduce some of the detail, bloat and repetition. If it's more concise, you'll probably be able to retain the attention of those who are matched.
Your pics were perhaps a little samey - consider a little more variety.
Good luck! "
Sound and well thought out advice as ever |
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By (user no longer on site)
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It's VERY long. Some of it seemed repetitive BUT...
In the most platonic and innocent ways possible, I already like you a lot! I only skimmed it but I thoroughly enjoyed what I did read and will be back again quite likely.
I don't know you at all but I feel like I can hear an actual person's voice, even if not in a Scouse accent!
And you're friendly  (unlike yours truly  )!
My one piece of advice would be to say "PM me to find out more about my writings"... But you probably get a ton of grief as is!
Are you on any other sites, e.g. that one like a Greek cheese? Your profile was as thorough as one on there |
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By (user no longer on site) OP
over a year ago
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Thanx for all your constructive remarks, I agreed with most and took it on board, I've now updated my profile accordingly and switched around a couple of photos as per advised....
Fingers crossed it's an improvement eah |
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By (user no longer on site) OP
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"It's not terrible, it's fairly good! I'm not your target but I got a little glazed over, after 5 minutes reading it, sensing a bit of repetition and it not being as concise as I would have liked - but I'm not your target partner.
I was curious if your wife has given consent - you may have said it but I didn't notice.
Overall, you covered a lot of important things, you, your marital status, bi interests, career and more. I'd encourage you to let it retain your personality but reduce some of the detail, bloat and repetition. If it's more concise, you'll probably be able to retain the attention of those who are matched.
Your pics were perhaps a little samey - consider a little more variety.
Good luck! "
Thanx for the heads up |
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If a woman is put off by seeing cock pictures, she won’t read the essay underneath. Couple profiles tend to be long and descriptive due to there being two of them, so your profile length is excessive for a single guy.
Add some more suited and booted photos, hide the cock pictures and with the text, try and shorten it as much as possible.
Plenty of kudos for putting in the effort though, some guys on here should take note |
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By (user no longer on site)
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"Whilst having a browse and if you have a bit of time could anyone give me a little advice on the quality of my shop window??
Thanx in advance of many wanks"
Il read your mate and give feedback as long as u do the same on mine, deal? |
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