"The writing is a bit messy isn't it,I think that needs some work.any suggestions "
It needs to flow more easily,it looks like you've just done bullet points,it needs to have sentences and paragraphs.
Maybe write it how you would speak it outloud,include a bit more on each point.
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"The writing is a bit messy isn't it,I think that needs some work.any suggestions
It needs to flow more easily,it looks like you've just done bullet points,it needs to have sentences and paragraphs.
Maybe write it how you would speak it outloud,include a bit more on each point.
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ive tried to make it more simple if that's better ,to be honest I'm not good at making myself sound good,I'm just me lol |
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