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By *sGivesWoodWoman
over a year ago
ST. AUSTELL, CORNWALL |
"Can anybody check myy profile and give some advice on if good/bad and what can be better. I would really appreciate your help"
Check spelling, punctuation and grammar, maybe add a few more pics, not cock ones! |
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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago
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You may want to go back through and read it to yourself do you think it appeals? You need to do a spell and grammer check and maybe adjust the age range unless you are willing to meet people in their 90's |
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By (user no longer on site)
over a year ago
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There are numerous threads on this subject posted by a host of other men, all asking exactly the same thing. My first suggestion would be to have a read through a few of them and see what advice has been given to others and if you feel you can apply any of it to your own profile.
"OP, read and take note. 
https://www.fabswingers.com/forum/swingers/589480"
A couple of things that stand out for me.
The word is 'cuddly' not 'cudderly', and there is no 'e' in 'caring' - remember the rules when adding 'ing' to a word ending in 'e'?
No one is going to 'take a chance' - everyone on fab is on here for great experiences and to enjoy themselves. Many have limited free time to play and so they want to use this wisely.
No-one is going to 'ask you anything'. Why should they, when the next profile they visit has all the information they need about it's 'owner', and the number of single guys on fab means that they simply don't need to. You need to stand out for all the right reasons.
Interesting as your challenge may be, the single ladies of fab really don't have the time to be messaging all the single guys that are inviting them to 'ask anything' or 'message me for more information'
On a positive note, your profile text has a reasonably good layout. It's not all bunched up into one paragraph, or worse still, one long sentence. It's well spaced, and so will be more inviting to read.
It just needs more actual information within it and less padding - by that I mean sentences that do nothing but pad out your profile without providing any information. The last three fit that category.
Overall, it's a reasonable start.
Good luck sir.
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